Based on the feedbacks that I have gotten from my peers and the discussions that we had previously in class,

I believe that I now know what I need to revise throughout my essay. For my introduction paragraph, I was given a few comments there, but I know that I have to provide the rhetorical situations, such as the target audience for the book and how it was received by critics and reviews. In addition to those, I will need to introduce the book into more details, instead of giving the basics and I will probably have to mention its historical and cultural context that it relate to with the most. Although I do have a strong main idea for my thesis statement by mentioning the rhetorical situation of genre, I should intensify it by adding more specifics in what will be expected throughout the essay. This includes stating how individuals differences in culture and diversity affect how people react to the zombie outbreak by having contrasting decisions and responses as of what to do. As for my body paragraphs, I will have to somehow incorporate more analysis into the first two paragraphs in place of basically summarizing the excerpt in great details. Instead of just summarizing the characters story, I have to tie in their account to how it creates an underlying zombie genre convention to the novel. In doing so, I have to ensure that it wont be redundant to the additional analysis that I have in my third body paragraph. For my concluding sentences for my first two body paragraphs, I will have to again include how it relates to my overall thesis. Other than providing more details, I will have to introduce the authors first before including the quotes to make them seem more scholarly and credible. Regardless of getting little to no comments for my concluding paragraph, I know that it wasnt mentioned as part of the peer review activity, but I believe that I will have to strengthen it more. I will make sure that I frame my essay within the big picture of the rhetorical analysis that I am exploring. In this case, I will definitely keep in mind that I will have to state that World War Z is indeed a zombie fiction based on the two stories and evidences that I stipulated. And finally, as I conclude, I will have to mention an insightful statement about how the novel communicates based on my analysis and emphasizes.