The Effects of Analyzing Mentor Texts and Creating Noticings Lists
Melissa Sawyer Dr. Gershon Kent State University
Action Research Project Proposal 2 Research Interest I am interested in writing instruction because I feel that throughout my own schooling I was often assigned writing but never taught how to write effectively. I genuinely believe that every student has the capability to write well, and giving them a variety of strategies and effective approaches for conveying meaning through words will improve their abilities. One of my breakthrough moments in thinking about the teaching of writing occurred in my class with Dr. Morgan last semester. I had already thought that using student work for examples of effective and ineffective writing would be beneficial, but Id never considered how helpful it would be to guide students to create lists by specifically naming the things effective writers were doing. An example of this would be to analyze three different pieces of quality feature articles to see how writers start an article to grab a readers attention. Effective writers do anything from posing a question in the first sentence to dropping a reader right in the middle of the action of the story. Having students name the things that writers are doing instead of giving them a list or naming the examples for them will help them carry the practice to any genre of writing. It also shows students that they have choices in writing and that all aspects of effective writing are intentional decisions made by the writer. This lead to my teacher question: How can I improve students writing? I know from personal experience that using mentor texts (high quality examples of writing within the genre being attempted) to analyze the ways that writers convey meaning effectively helped me improve my own writing. I also used mentor texts during my ten-day unit last semester when I assigned a book review to students. I found that they utilized many of the strategies we uncovered after analyzing high-quality examples of published reviews. Their writing was effective with all 12 students earning a score of C or higher, but I didnt have Action Research Project Proposal 3 previous work examples to compare to the final product they turned in to me. I am hoping that the positive results Ive experienced will carry over into research paper analysis and writing. Much of the research pertaining to the study of high-quality mentor texts simultaneously examines other effective strategies to incorporate during writing instruction. Because teaching students about the writing process is a complex process, it is almost impossible to study the effects of a single strategy by itself. According to Graham and Perin (2006), no single approach to writing instruction will meet the needs of all students (p. 11). The meta-analysis of empirical research they conducted examined six studies, and they concluded that analyzing mentor texts provides adolescents with good models for each type of writing that is the focus of instruction (Graham & Perin, 2006, p. 20). Graham and Perin (2006) were unable to draw any conclusions for low-achieving writers because none of the studies addressed this specific population of students (p. 20). Five of the six studies Graham & Perin (2006) analyzed showed positive effects for students writing through the examination of model texts, or what I have defined as mentor texts (p. 59). Knudson (1989, 1991), Thibodeau (1964), Reedy (1964), and Keech (1980) all concluded that students writing improved when examining model texts in comparison to other methods of instruction. Only Vinson (1980) was unable to find a positive correlation between the study of model texts and students descriptive paragraphs when comparing the teaching method with instruction in revision strategies (Graham & Perin, 2006, p. 59). The combination of my personal experiences and the literature I reviewed lead me to the following research question for this study: How might incorporating the analysis of high-quality mentor texts affect students writing on a formal essay assignment?
Action Research Project Proposal 4 Interventions I conducted research at a public, suburban high school in northeast Ohio that enrolls around 1,500 students. I studied my cooperating teachers first period college prep English 11 class made up of 27 juniors. Six of these students are on IEPs and 504 plans. Sixteen students are male and 11 are female. Twenty-three students are Caucasian, two are African-American, one is Hispanic and one is Biracial, which is representational of the school as a whole. There is ability grouping and tracking in English-Language Arts at this high school. The honors track sets students up to take AP English their senior year. Students may not take the honors track after their sophomore year. Although the course is labeled as college prep, it is the only other choice for students not in the honors class. This may result in a lower self-efficacy than students in the upper-level course. After the split with students in honors courses, the college prep classes are grouped heterogeneously, and students with disabilities and students with IEPs are not separated from other students except in rare cases where contained classrooms are deemed to be the least restrictive environment for the student. Six of the students in this class are on IEPs or 504 plans while two additional students have other specialized learning needs. One student had a traumatic brain injury as a child and experiences hearing impairment, difficulty lifting heavy objects, problems with balance and coordination, and has a learning disability that contributes to below-average performance in reading and writing. Another student also has a learning disability that is a factor in below- average performance in reading and writing while anothers learning disability plays a role in below-average reading only. Another student has recently been diagnosed with Aspergers autism spectrum disorder, is managing issues with anxiety and has been assessed as a struggling reader and writer. One student has been diagnosed with ADD while three others have ADHD. Of Action Research Project Proposal 5 these three, one also manages Tourettes Syndrome, one suffers from depression and conduct disordered oppositional defiant behavior, and one has emotional symptoms associated with depression and recently came back to school after leaving for several weeks to get professional help after having thoughts of suicide. Class starts at 7:20 A.M. and we have 48 minute periods, Monday through Friday. Sometimes I wonder at the collectively calm atmosphere of this particular group of students, but I believe the early time of day contributes to their tranquility. The room is full with only one desk left open, but it doesnt feel too crammed because our classroom is a sufficient size. I have access to a digital projector, an overhead projector, a whiteboard, and a chalkboard. My interventions took place three consecutive days: Monday, March 24, 2014 through Wednesday, March 26, 2014. I planned to lead at least one more mini-lesson when students returned from spring break the week of Monday April 7, 2014, but unforeseen events kept me from doing so. Students completed a survey (Appendix A) before I introduced my interventions to the classroom. The purpose of the survey was to help me better understand how students see themselves as writers, the aspects of writing that they believe they are skilled at and aspects of writing they struggle with or feel they could improve. The survey was conducted on Monday, March 24, 2014 at the beginning of class. When the 25 students who were present completed the survey, I explained the upcoming mini-lessons I planned to do each day for the rest of the week and how it fit in with the action research I was conducting. I explained that I was choosing to focus on writing instruction because I felt that students were often assigned writing but rarely instructed how to write. I told them that my best experiences with writing instruction happened when I analyzed mentor texts, which are just high-quality examples of the kind of writing I was trying to do. I explained that we would be analyzing mentor texts and creating noticings lists, Action Research Project Proposal 6 which are lists of options and techniques we see in the mentor text that we can use in our own writing. Although we are going to be looking at essay examples, I wanted to show them that they could do this with any genre of writing. I chose to use an example of feature articles to model aloud the process of analyzing a mentor text to name techniques I could use in my own writing just so they could see me walk through the analysis process. I showed the class three lead paragraphs on the digital projector (Appendix B) and gave the students a few minutes to read the paragraphs themselves. I started by saying I might look at the very first sentence and notice that all three catch the readers attention, but they do it in different ways. The first uses a phrase that weve probably all said or heard someone say before. The second uses an interesting fact to make you want to keep reading. The third example drops the reader right into the action of a story, and the danger of the situation makes the reader want to continue. The survey and my explanations took longer than I expected, so I summed up my modeling by saying that just by looking at three lead paragraphs, I had three examples of ways to start my writing that I could try out if I were writing a feature article. Then I explained that for each upcoming mini-lesson students will discuss one mentor text in their reading groups (for the reading were also doing in Of Mice and Men) and then well talk about it as a class and write down the techniques and writing strategies to make noticings lists for different parts of the essay. At the end of class on that Monday, I also passed out the writing prompt (Appendix C) for the formal essay they will write in class when they return from spring break. Originally, students were going to have to write a research paper comparing a social issue in Of Mice and Men with the issue in modern society (example: working/living conditions of migrant farm workers) and I was going to compare their scores to a research paper they completed after reading The Crucible. However, due to time constraints, some of the requirements for this essay Action Research Project Proposal 7 were combined with the requirements of an in-class essay students are required to complete three times throughout the year. This in-class essay is meant to measure the Student Learning Objective (SLO) the junior English teachers agreed to focus on this year, which was the organization of a five-paragraph essay with an introduction, three body paragraphs with two pieces of evidence in each to back up the claim, and a conclusion paragraph. The students had completed two SLO essays previously. This affected my planned intervention because it meant I couldnt use previous student work examples for the research paper as mentor texts like I had planned. Instead, I wrote the mentor texts myself because I thought it was important that the examples students analyze meet the requirements of the prompt theyll be answering. According to Pytash & Morgan (2013), mentor texts should be about the same length as the pieces students will write, have to be of high-quality, able to withstand close scrutiny, and offer numerous possibilities and crafting techniques for students (Gathering texts section, para. 4). Because I didnt trust that I could write three essays that differed in style and content enough, I planned to ask that students offer suggestions for improvements of the mentor texts. Usually, the analysis of mentor texts only focuses on what is working in the text and not what could be improved. Also, I never told the students that I wrote all of the examples because I didnt want that to affect their criticality of the texts. I conducted my first mini-lesson on Tuesday, March 25, 2014. I wrote the three separate introduction paragraphs used in this mini-lesson the night before. At the beginning of class on Tuesday, I passed out two pages: the first containing all three introductory paragraphs and the second, guiding questions to help students analyze what techniques and writing strategies were being used in each of the introductory paragraphs (Appendix D). I decided to use guiding questions because students werent familiar with analyzing mentor texts. Students then read the Action Research Project Proposal 8 introductory paragraph assigned to their reading group (I had posted this on the whiteboard) and analyzed the paragraph by answering the questions on the handout together as a group. This part of the mini-lesson took longer than expected. I anticipated giving each group 5-8 minutes to read and discuss, but answering the questions on the handout made the group discussion take almost fifteen minutes. We moved to a large group discussion and I started by asking the questions about thesis statements from the guiding questions sheet they all filled out. As students answered the questions, I noted their responses on our noticing list (Appendix E). After noting what made a good thesis both in general and for this specific writing prompt, I asked the students if they thought their mentor text was a strong introductory paragraph. All the groups agreed that their example was a good paragraph, so I asked them to give me specific examples of what the author did to make it strong. I wrote these down on our noticing list as well. After one student summarized by saying their mentor text (example 1) drew him in as a reader, I asked for specific ways the writers drew in the reader with the very first sentence. Like the lead paragraphs I modeled with the previous day, students were able to name three writing techniques (using a fact, dialogue that places the reader in the middle of a situation, or speaking directly to the reader by posing a question) that could draw readers in right away. I mentioned that I had often heard students lament that they didnt know how to begin their essay, so this gave them three things to try out to get started. Participation was very high during this mini-lesson. According to the chart I use to jot down what I notice about student behavior and participation in class daily, of the 24 students who were present, at least 11 offered up responses of their own during the large group discussion. Others answered when called upon and I felt very enthusiastic to do the same lesson in a later class. All but one of the 24 present students turned in their answers to the guiding Action Research Project Proposal 9 questions. The mini-lesson did last around thirty minutes, which was about twice what I had anticipated. This didnt give me much time to do the other activities I planned to get through, including more than a brief discussion of the first chapter of Of Mice and Men I had assigned for homework the previous night. After talking about time constraints and the goals for the other learning tasks that were taking place that week with my cooperating teacher, mainly the reading and discussion of Of Mice and Men, I decided that I would combine the mini-lesson on body paragraphs with the mini-lesson on citations to save time, and then only do one more mini-lesson when we returned from spring break on Monday, April 7, 2014. My cooperating teacher and I both agreed that if we didnt devote in-class time at the end of the week to review the first three chapters of Of Mice and Men and read the last three together as a class, that many students wouldnt have a grasp on the plot of the story. They are used to reading texts and novels together in class, so assigning reading every night, especially the week before spring break, wouldnt result in full comprehension. The mini-lesson on Wednesday, March 26, 2013 focused on analyzing body paragraphs and reviewing MLA citations of quotations and paraphrased material. I wrote two body paragraphs to go along with the introductory paragraph examples 1 and 3. I did not write one to go with the second example because I did not want to give away plot details about Of Mice and Men. I started class by passing out the writing examples and guiding questions (Appendix F) and having the students analyze the texts in the same reading groups that they were in the previous day. Reading the mentor texts and answering the discussion questions with group members took about 15 minutes. The class discussion was not as enthusiastic as the previous day. Although my daily participation field notes are incomplete for this day, the same two students were answering my questions after longer silence times than the previous day. The energy level of the class was Action Research Project Proposal 10 much lower thisday, but we were still able to generate a sufficient noticings list for body paragraphs and citations (Appendix G). Students were able to collectively identify the need for supporting evidence to back up the topic sentence of the body paragraph. For this particular prompt, the class identified the need to use specific details of the writers personal story and compare it to the text through quotations. Students believed comparing anecdotes to quotations had to be done smoothly throughout the paragraph, and the writing didnt flow well when there was too much storytelling with a quote comparison at the end. We also examined the proper punctuation and information required for different MLA citations for both quotations and paraphrased summaries. The entire mini-lesson took around 30 minutes. Only 22 of the 25 students present turned in their guiding questions, aligning with the lackluster enthusiasm of the day. The last two days of the week were spent focusing on finishing J ohn Steinbecks Of Mice and Men and discussing it as a class. This was unavoidable because my cooperating teacher and I agreed that instruction would be too disjointed if we didnt finish the novel before spring break started the following week. We were able to finish the novel, but lessons didnt go according to planned when we returned from break the week of Monday, April 7, 2014. I was unable to be at school that Monday and thought my cooperating teacher would show the majority of the film version of Of Mice and Men. This would have left me time to do one final mini-lesson on conclusion paragraphs on Tuesday, before finishing the film in class. Instead, the class examined a list of the literature theyve read throughout the school year and started generating ideas about how the themes might fit with their personal stories before watching parts of the movie. My cooperating teacher and I agreed that it was important to have them start brainstorming about the personal story they wanted to tell and the literature they could use to compare. Action Research Project Proposal 11 On Tuesday, April 8, 2014 I returned to school and we finished watching important clips from Of Mice and Men. At the end of class, students had to do an exit slip on a notecard and write down which prompt they were going to answer and which piece of literature they had chosen for the comparison. We did not have time to complete an analysis of conclusion paragraphs. On Wednesday, April 9, 2014 the English classes had to complete standardized assessments that measured their grade-level reading comprehension. The test did not take the entire class period, so students were instructed to begin their essay writing when they finished. I aggregated our noticings lists that wed generated as a class into a handout for the students and asked them to circle the strategies they were using in their writing as they completed their essays (Appendix J ). The list also had added-in notes about conclusion paragraphs because so many students indicated this part of the essay they struggled with, but we ran out of time and werent able to analyze the conclusions of mentor texts together as a group. The following three days of school, Thursday, April 10 through Monday April 14 were spent writing essays. Because every class-sized computer lab was booked for standardized testing it was necessary to split the class so half could work in the smaller newspaper lab and half could work in a different room with computers. I spent the time that students were writing observing, encouraging them to stay on task, and conferencing with those who had specific questions about their writing. All but three students finished their essays by the end of class Friday. Two of the other students finished with me in the newspaper lab on Monday and a student who was absent on Monday finished the essay in a study hall Thursday.
Action Research Project Proposal 12 Documentation I gathered multiple sources of data, both quantitative and qualitative to best determine the effects of my interventions on students formal essay writing. Quantitatively, I compared the scores of the formal essay students wrote after the interventions with two previous in-class, SLO essay scores (Appendix H) and a research paper score (Appendix I). Qualitatively, I gathered information from surveys (Appendices A and J ), field notes, student responses on the guiding questions from the two days of mini-lessons (Appendices D and F), noticings lists generated as a class (Appendeices E & G) and all three SLO essays. I planned to gather more data in the form of surveys than I did. I only conducted a pre-intervention survey (Appendix A). I was unable to conduct a formal post-intervention survey, but did ask that students examine the noticing lists (Appendix J ) and circle the strategies they utilized in the essay they wrote after they examined mentor texts. Validity The assessment of writing is affected by the biases and expectations of the assessor. Although my own biases didnt affect the scores students received because my cooperating teacher did all the grading, I still have biases that affect my interpretation of the data I collected. I do believe I was able to maintain confirmability by practicing triangulation in data collection because I compared three pre-intervention scores on formal writing assignments with the post- intervention scores of an in-class essay. I established credibility and dependability when I consulted my cooperating teacher to verify my data and analysis were accurate. My study has established transferability because the goal of my research wasnt to develop truth statements that can be generalized to larger populations. I know that my research is context bound, so I described the makeup of my classroom and the circumstances and environment that affected my Action Research Project Proposal 13 interventions. People reading my study can decide if my findings might be transferrable to their individual contexts. Analysis & Findings While developing my action research, I originally planned to compare the essays and scores of two previous Student Learning Objective (SLO) in-class essays with the SLO essay students would write right after my interventions. The SLO essays required students to construct a five-paragraph essay in roughly two class periods (1 hour, 36 minutes). Then, after reviewing the upcoming schedule with my cooperating teacher, I realized that students were going to have to write a research paper based on Of Mice and Men before they were going to be able to write their last SLO in-class essay. It appeared that students wouldnt be able to write the SLO essay until I was finished student teaching. I reworked my plan and was going to use the scores of their first research paper they wrote in December and compare it with the results of their Of Mice and Men research paper. A couple days before my planned interventions, my teacher and I agreed that we could combine the requirements of the second research paper with the third SLO essay. So the writing prompt for the essay students did after the interventions was a combination of an SLO writing prompt, which normally focuses on students abilities in structuring essays and the research paper requirement of quotations as evidence with proper MLA citations. Unfortunately at the time of my data analysis, nine of the 27 essays werent graded. The formal SLO essays must be graded by my cooperating teacher so grading remains as consistent as possible throughout the time student growth is being measured. The students whose essays werent yet graded have been taken out of the analysis of the scores for the average of the post- intervention essay, although they are included on the charts in Appendices. As I collected the previous SLO essays and scores, I noticed the grading criteria changed as the school year Action Research Project Proposal 14 progressed. The first essays were written at the end of August and were graded using a 25-point rubric (Appendix K) that critiqued style, writing conventions, theme, content structure/ organization, and content evidence separately. The second SLO essays were written in February and my cooperating teacher assigned a value up to 25 points, but they were not graded using any kind of rubric. The third SLO, the one students wrote after the interventions, was graded using a checklist rubric (Appendix K). I do not have grading criteria or students essays for the first research paper written in December, but I know that a similar rubric was used as was with the first SLO. These observations affected my interpretation of the score analysis because I realize that teacher bias could play a factor in scoring of any written work, no matter the teacher or criteria. Teacher bias has to be taken into consideration when examining the student scores on any of the essays, but more so in the second SLO that wasnt graded using a rubric. The addition of MLA citations to the third SLO prompt also means that the scores from that essay arent completely comparable to the scores from the previous two because more was expected in the last one. Looking at the scores from the first research paper to the post-intervention essay, scores increased an average of 7.11 percentage points. Of the 18 students who had scores for both the original research paper and the post-intervention essay, 16 improved their grade. Only two students scores dropped: Student 5 by 9.33 percentage points and Student 9 by 6.67 percentage points. Both students still earned a grade of B for the second paper, so their score drops did not indicate that they were below average in writing ability like a grade lower than a C would have. The scores for the post-intervention essay were a major improvement from the first SLO essay, but dropped slightly from the average second SLO essay score. The average score for SLO 1, written in August 2013, was 61.76% and students were only given points for completing Action Research Project Proposal 15 the assignment. The average score for SLO 2, written in February 2014 was 88.96, an improvement of 27.2 percentage points. Students were told they would be awarded points based on their improvement from the first SLO essay. Only one of the 23 applicable students scores dropped from the first SLO to the second: Student 1 went from an 88% to a 76%. The average score for the post-intervention essay was 86.53% which is a 2.43 percentage point decrease from SLO 2. Students were told that the post-intervention essay would be worth a 75-point research paper grade for the last quarter, as well as 25% of their final exam for the year. The slight decrease in mean score from SLO 2 to the post-intervention essay could be accounted for by the increased expectations that were added to the latter. Although the average post-intervention essay scores increased in comparison to the first SLO essay and the first research paper, there are many factors that could have contributed to this improvement. Its impossible to link improvements directly with the interventions I introduced. The fact that all students wrote their post-intervention essays on computers while the first two SLO essays were written by hand could have benefitted those with typing skills or hindered students who dont type well. Some students may have felt they had more to say for a certain writing prompt over another. The amount of time that passed between writing the first SLO and the first research paper would be predicted to increase scores because its expected that students learn more about writing conventions and improve their writing skills over the length of a school year. Their improvement may also have to do with the fact that my cooperating teacher and I started talking about the essay assignment and gave them the writing prompt more than two weeks before they started writing them in class. We also required them to declare the topic of their essays and the piece of literature they were going to compare their anecdotes to the day before they had an opportunity to get started writing. The previous two SLO prompts were only Action Research Project Proposal 16 introduced the day before students started writing and they were never required to declare their topics before starting with the essay. The average improvement of scores when comparing the first research paper to the post-intervention essay could have been positively affected by the review of the first essay when my teacher reviewed common mistakes that were made, such as the misuse of MLA citations and quotes for evidence. As indicated by the Graham and Perin (2006) meta-analysis of empirical research, it is nearly impossible to study the effects of a single writing instruction strategy alone because no single approach to writing instruction will meet the needs of all students (p. 11). Qualitative data offers deeper insight into the individual learning that took place through the interventions. Although I wasnt able to administer a post-intervention survey, I asked students to circle the strategies they used on their post-intervention essays on the aggregated noticings list I gave them before they started the paper (Appendix J ). Only 16 students completed this task, and I believe this is because we were split in half as a class so many students may not have been reminded to do this as they were writing or when they finished their essays. J ust looking at the number of strategies students circled and comparing it to their grade on the post- intervention essay does yield a trend (Appendix J ). The one student who scored lower than a C and also indicated the strategies they used on the noticings list averaged only 3 circled strategies. The nine students who scored a B and also turned in the noticings list averaged almost 9 circled strategies. The three students who earned an A and also turned in the noticings list averaged 12 items circled. As a whole, this suggests that the more strategies students were able to identify using in their post-intervention essay, the better their score. Although this points to the fact that the intervention helped students score higher, students might have already been utilizing these strategies before the intervention. Action Research Project Proposal 17 Examining student work examples also points at the fact that the interventions were helpful for essay writing, but do not prove that they are the sole reason for any improvements. By examining Student 21s introductory paragraphs in the two SLO essays and the post- intervention essay (Appendix L), it can be concluded that her introductory paragraphs improved in content and structure. The introductory paragraphs from the first two SLO essays are basically one big thesis statement each. They are short, 4 sentences and 3 sentences respectively, and in my judgment, dont grab the readers attention to encourage them to continue reading. By the post-intervention essay, Student 21 has developed more of an introduction by making a statement about herself in the first sentence, and broadening her statements about love to appeal to the unknown feelings of the reader. This coincides with the noticings list strategies she indicated using: using a relatable scenario and drawing on emotion. The last two sentences of the post- intervention essay provide a defendable thesis for the rest of the paper and sets Student 21 up to have three strong topics for the three body paragraphs. She makes it clear that she will be comparing her story to the character of Georgiana from Nathaniel Hawthornes The Birthmark and then utilizes some specific details from her own failed relationship to set up the rest of the paper. This coincides with the fact that Student 21 indicated usage of all three strategies for thesis statements that she circled on the noticings list (Appendix L). Because other writing instructions, including the brainstorming my cooperating teacher did with students on Monday, April 7 when I was absent and the requirement that students identify the prompt and text being used for evidence the day before beginning the essay, it is impossible to conclude with any certainty that my interventions alone improved student writing. The higher average grades in comparison to the higher average number of strategies students said they utilized from the aggregated noticings suggests that the analysis of mentor texts and the Action Research Project Proposal 18 creation of noticings lists did help students write better essays, but it is also likely that other writing instruction methods benefited students as well. Democracy & Community Giving students specific strategies theyll be able to use in their own writing is good, but guiding them to uncover those strategies themselves is better because they can use their analyzing skills to help them write in any genre. Ideally, after analyzing mentor texts and creating noticings lists, students will see that they can do this activity on their own to improve their writing. It also shows students that they have choices in the writing process and that effective writing stems from intentional decisions made by the writer. Although the results of my interventions arent necessarily conclusive, I believe that they show that making time for writing instruction of any kind is beneficial to student performance on writing assignments. As a teacher I no longer feel that its acceptable for me to assign writing without instruction directly focused on improving writing skills. When I have my own classroom, I plan to make the analysis of mentor texts and the creation of noticings lists a regular part of writing instruction. I believe this activity will benefit students when they have practiced the analysis and are more comfortable with the process. I believe the analysis is easier to do when the genre of writing assigned is less academic, like in the case of memoir writing. When students have had practice analyzing and creating noticing lists for a range of genres (everything from lab reports to advertisements), analyzing 5-paragraph essays will be smoother. Also, the next time I guide students to analyze mentor texts and create noticings lists, I will make sure that this writing instruction doesnt interfere with other learning tasks like it did with the reading of Of Mice and Men. Ive found in my experience that enthusiasm and participation of the class as a whole dwindle when lessons are rushed or students Action Research Project Proposal 19 feel they are missing out on other regular learning activities. After concluding my study, I would like to make this intervention a regular part of classroom activities and writing instruction in the future.
Action Research Project Proposal 20 References Graham, S., & Perin, D. (2007). Writing next: Effective strategies to improve writing of adolescents in middle and high schools A report to Carnegie Corporation of New York. Washington, DC: Alliance for Excellent Education. Knudson, R. E. (1989). Effects of instructional strategies on childrens informational writing. Journal of Educational Research, 83, 9196. Knudson, R. E. (1991). Effects of instructional strategies, grade, and sex on students persuasive writing. Journal of Experimental Education, 59, 141152. Pytash, K. E., & Morgan, D. N. (2013). A unit of study approach for teaching common core state standards for writing. Middle School Journal. Retrieved from http://www.amle.org/ BrowsebyTopic/Curriculum/CurrDet/TabId/186/ArtMID/793/ArticleID/274/Unit-of-Study- Approach-for-CCSS-Writing.aspx. Reedy, J . E., J r. (1964). A comparative study of two methods of teaching the organization of expository writing to ninth-grade pupils. Unpublished doctoral dissertation, Boston University School of Education, Boston, MA. Thibodeau, A. E. (1964). Improving composition writing with grammar and organization exercises utilizing differentiated group patterns. Unpublished doctoral dissertation, Boston University School of Education, Boston, MA.
Action Research Project Proposal 21 Appendix A NAME___________________________
Writing Survey
Circle the answer that aligns closest with your feelings and beliefs.
1. I enjoy writing in my own time. Strongly Disagree Disagree Agree Strongly Agree
2. I enjoy writing at school. Strongly Disagree Disagree Agree Strongly Agree
3. I am a good writer. Strongly Disagree Disagree Agree Strongly Agree
4. I am good at writing essays. Strongly Disagree Disagree Agree Strongly Agree
5. I can learn to be a better writer. Strongly Disagree Disagree Agree Strongly Agree
6. I write better when I plan my essay out with notes before I start. Strongly Disagree Disagree Agree Strongly Agree
7. I write best when I get it done all in one sitting. Strongly Disagree Disagree Agree Strongly Agree
8. My final version of writing is very different than my first draft. Strongly Disagree Disagree Agree Strongly Agree
turn over Action Research Project Proposal 22 Answer the following questions to the best of your ability and as thoroughly as possible, but dont worry about complete sentences, grammar or spelling.
9. Explain how you usually go about writing an essay for school.
10. What part of essay writing are you good at?
11. What part of essay writing do you struggle with?
12. What else do you have to say about writing essays?
Action Research Project Proposal 23 Appendix B From Camille Noe Pagans list article Focus! from the August, 2013 issue of O: The Oprah Magazine:
Im so scatterbrainedI must have ADHD. Its a lament that doctors like Michael Coates, MD, are hearing more and more from adult patients, many of whom assume medication is the answer to their woes. Yet most people dont have ADHD, nor do they need a pill, says Coates, who chairs the Department of Family and Community Medicine at Wake Forest School of Medicine. What they need is a better routine. In fact, only about 4.5 percent of American adults are estimated to have ADHD, according to a report in the American Journal of Psychiatry. For the rest of us, feeling unfocused is not the result of a disorder or even a personality traitits simply a habit.
From Up in the Air by Lev Grossman from the J uly 2006 Time issue:
The world record for two people juggling 10 clubs between them is 378 catches. It is currently held by two Russian siblings living in the U.S. named Vova and Olga Galchenko. The Galchenkos also hold the world record for 11 clubs (152 catches) and 12 clubs (54 catches). The ability to juggle at this level is highly unusual, especially at their agesVova is 18, Olga 15. But then again, the Galchenkos are very unusual people.
From Ed Yongs Mental Floss article The Lava Chaser, published in the J uly/August 2013 issue:
Ken Sims was already drenched in sweat; then the soles of his shoes started to melt. Sims was climbing up a 40-foot ridge inside Nyiragongo, an active volcano on the eastern flank of the Democratic Republic of Congo, toward a churning 100-yard-wide pool of black molten rock. Acrid gases steamed off the top of the pool, and shifting lattices of orange fire crisscrossed it. To protect himself from the heatthe lava can reach up to 1,400FSims wore a bulky helmet and a silvery sheath of aluminum foil known as a lava suit. But the treacherous climb meant that his shoes had to go uncovered. I could feel my feet sliding and see goo pushing up against the bottom, he says.
Action Research Project Proposal 24 Appendix C APRI L ESSAY Standard W.11-12.1 Students will demonstrate well-developed arguments with valid reasoning, relevant evidence and well-chosen details.
WRITING PROMPT (Pick 1) I n a well- developed 5-paragraph essay:
1. Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you? Compare your experience to a character or time period in American literature. What lessons did you learn?
2. Reflect on a time when you challenged a belief or idea. What prompted you to act? Compare your experience to a character or time period in American literature. Would you make the same decision again?
REQUIREMENTS Essay should include: Introduction paragraph, 3 body paragraphs, and a conclusion paragraph.
1 -2 p. 1 American Literature source Works cited page (create using easybib.com)
Introduction: Start your paragraph with an opening to your topic. End your intro. paragraph with a thesis statement that expresses your direct point about the topic. (4-6 sentences)
To help you start a thesis statement write: I believe that _______________. Once youve developed your idea, take out the I believe that.
Body paragraphs: Start each paragraph with a topic sentence that identifies the main idea of the paragraph. (MINI MUM 3 PARAGRAPHS)
Paragraph 1: Discuss your own life event in relationship to the prompt and how it affected you.
Paragraph 2: Discuss how your experience compares to a character or time period in American literature. Include (2) parenthetical citation from your American literature source to demonstrate similarities.
Paragraph 3: Discuss what lessons you learned or Discuss how you if you would make the same decision again?
Conclusion: Begin your last paragraph with a restatement of your thesis. DO NOT USE IDENTICAL WORDING. Follow with at least 2 sentences about what was learned about your experience in relation to American literature. In short, summarize your final thoughts.
PAGE FORMATTING Use standard MLA formatting for the paper. 1 margins size 12 font (Tahoma) Do NOT include any special formatting to the font double-space entire paper center title of paper (no underline, bold, italics, etc.) include heading (see below as ex.)
Your name Smith 1 Mrs. Mankamyer English 11 CP 11 April 2014 Struggling with acceptance [title]
TIPS Use your time wiselyIMC time is extremely limited Proofread-Proofread-Proofread!! Do not use abbreviations A flashdrive to save would be a good idea Ask for help if you are struggling Use PROPER English
**It is extremely important that you use your time wisely in class. ALL writing is done during English and you may not take it home.
Action Research Project Proposal 25 Sample Works Cited page
Smith 3 Works Cited
Longfellow, Henry W. "The Cross of Snow." Elements of Literature: Fifth Course. Austin, TX.: Holt, Rinehart & Winston, 1997. N. pag. Print.
IMPORTANT INFORMATION
DUE DATE: __________________ This research paper assignment will count as (2) separate scores.
1. Research paper: 75 points
2. SLO Writing Assessment: 25% of your final exam grade
WRITING INSTRUCTION 26 Appendix D M. Sawyer Mrs. Mankamyer English 11 CP 24 April 2014 Example 1 According to a 2013 study on poverty and education, almost one in four children in the United States live in poverty and this negatively affects their chances of being academically successful and graduating high school. In comparison with kids from more affluent families, children who grow up in poverty complete two fewer years of schooling and earn half as much money later in life. Poor children are three times as likely to have poor health, poor males are twice as likely to get arrested, and poor females are five times more likely to have a child out of wedlock than their richer counterparts (Coley and Baker 8). I am a child living in poverty, but I refuse to add to these sickening statistics. Although researchers study these trends to try to show that they need changed, I feel like my familys income has already labeled me a failure. But I want to challenge and overcome the idea that I wont be successful. Being poor is hard enough without a stigma associated with it, and I see education as the only way out of this awful cycle. Through my studies I have been able to relate t the ideas of certain movements in society and art. The Transcendentalist period of American literature, particularly the beliefs and works of Henry David Thoreau and Ralph Waldo Emerson, has inspired me to be a self-reliant non-conformist dedicated to overcoming the beliefs society has about me based on the economic status of my family.
WRITING INSTRUCTION 27 Example 2 Have you ever put your heart and soul into reaching a goal, but still failed? I have. I had a dream of joining Teach for America, a group that trains and sends recent college graduates to high-need schools across the country in an effort to improve the education available to students in failing systems. I dedicated countless hours to completing applications, writing essays, conducting phone interviews, taking aptitude and attitude tests, and planning and delivering practice lessons. After making it to the final round of interviews and then receiving an email declaring I was not chosen for the program, I was devastated. What makes failure like this easier to overcome? For me, it was reading about characters that have faced similar obstacles and also failed. Literature provides readers with fellow humans with whom you can commiserate with and learn from. I happened upon such a character in George from J ohn Steinbecks Of Mice and Men. Although we dont know if George overcomes his lost American Dream, I was able to relate to his stoicism and acceptance despite bitter disappointment and pursued an alternative route to making my dream of teaching a reality.
Example 3 Some people just cant handle a little fun and go crying to their mommies when they get a little boo-boo! Imagine being a scared and still-adjusting freshman, sitting behind an upperclassman that you once looked up to while they knowingly directed that jab at you. I could feel the hot tears welling up as I willed myself not to blink, lest they fall along with my sinking heart. Although I managed to hold back the tears that day and the incident I would eventually come to understand as hazing is now years behind me, a piece of my heart remains in my belly from the alienation I faced for challenging a cruel, yearly ritual for the high school volleyball team. I dont regret speaking out about the bullying that occurred, but it was only after reading about and relating to characters in some of my favorite pieces of literature that I was finally able to make peace with my decision to come forward. Reading works like Arthur Millers The Crucible helped me see that you sometimes have to sacrifice a lot to do what you know in your heart, no matter how many pieces its in, is right. Reading about the literal death that J ohn Proctor faced with dignity in The Crucible has allowed me to make peace with the social death that I faced for challenging the status quo of an awful tradition. WRITING INSTRUCTION 28 Name_______________________
INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH NOTES
WE ANALYZED EXAMPLE #: _____
1. Underline and label the thesis statement. What makes this a thesis?
2. Is this a strong thesis? Why?
3. Is this a strong introductory paragraph? Why?
4. How does the writer grab the readers attention with the first sentence?
5. Where/how does the writer make a comparison with a character or time period in literature?
6. How much background information does the writer include for the reader (who may not be familiar with the writers story or certain terms the writer is using)?
WRITING INSTRUCTION 29 7. What do you think the three body paragraphs are going to/should address?
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8. What else do you notice or like about this introductory paragraph?
9. What could be improved in this paragraph?
WRITING INSTRUCTION 30 Appendix E
WRITING INSTRUCTION 31 Appendix F M. Sawyer Mrs. Mankamyer English 11 CP 24 April 2014 Example 1 According to a 2013 study on poverty and education, almost one in four children in the United States live in poverty and this negatively affects their chances of being academically successful and graduating high school. In comparison with kids from more affluent families, children who grow up in poverty complete two fewer years of schooling and earn half as much money later in life. Poor children are three times as likely to have poor health, poor males are twice as likely to get arrested, and poor females are five times more likely to have a child out of wedlock than their richer counterparts (Coley and Baker 8). I am a child living in poverty, but I refuse to add to these sickening statistics. Although researchers study these trends to try to show that they need changed, I feel like my familys income has already labeled me a failure. But I want to challenge and overcome the idea that I wont be successful. Being poor is hard enough without a stigma associated with it, and I see education as the only way out of this awful cycle. Through my studies I have been able to relate to the ideas of certain movements in society and art. The Transcendentalist period of American literature, particularly the beliefs and works of Henry David Thoreau and Ralph Waldo Emerson, has inspired me to be a self-reliant non- conformist dedicated to overcoming the beliefs society has about me based on the economic status of my family. Transcendentalists like Ralph Waldo Emerson defined what it means to be self-reliant while Thoreau showed me what it means in action. In his essay Self Reliance Emerson says every man must take himself for better, for worse, as his portion; that though the wide universe is full of good, no kernel of nourishing corn can come to him but through his toil bestowed on that plot of ground which is given to him to till (251). I have taken this to mean that every person must accept their lot in life, even if youre born to rags instead of riches. The only good that can come to a person is through their own hard work and dedication. Henry David Thoreau put Emersons ideas into real action when he lived at Walden Pond and only relied on himself for the essential things he needed to survive. When I read the works by these American writers, I knew I could only count on myself to transcend the unique obstacles I face because of my poverty. I have to work two different jobs in order to pay for basic things like toothpaste and deodorant for myself. Sometimes our food runs out before my mom gets paid again and I rely on the money I earn to feed myself. Although this might bring some people down, I dont think about what other people have, I strive towards getting what I want and need. I follow Thoreaus advice when he said in Walden however mean your life is, meet it and live it (46). WRITING INSTRUCTION 32 Example 3 Some people just cant handle a little fun and go crying to their mommies when they get a little boo-boo! Imagine being a scared and still-adjusting freshman, sitting behind an upperclassman that you once looked up to while they knowingly directed that jab at you. I could feel the hot tears welling up as I willed myself not to blink, lest they fall along with my sinking heart. Although I managed to hold back the tears that day and the incident I would eventually come to understand as hazing is now years behind me, a piece of my heart remains in my belly from the alienation I faced for challenging a cruel, yearly ritual for the high school volleyball team. I dont regret speaking out about the bullying that occurred, but it was only after reading about and relating to characters in some of my favorite pieces of literature that I was finally able to make peace with my decision to come forward. Reading works like Arthur Millers The Crucible helped me see that you sometimes have to sacrifice a lot to do what you know in your heart, no matter how many pieces its in, is right. Reading about the literal death that J ohn Proctor faced with dignity in The Crucible has allowed me to make peace with the social death that I faced for challenging the status quo of an awful tradition. One way that J ohn Proctors story mirrors my own is through his initial reluctance to come forward about the immoral actions of others in his community in an effort to protect his own dignity. Although Abigail tells Proctor that the girls in Salem were only covering up the fact that they got caught dancing in the woods and the incident didnt have to do with witchcraft, he doesnt immediately come forward with this information (Miller 20). It isnt until his own wife is threatened that Proctor admits that he was alone with Abby when she made this confession (Miller 56). The hazing experience I went through caused me a different kind of shame than what Proctor felt, but I could still relate to his reluctance to make known the truth. What started out as a game that could have been painless and fun quickly turned more sinister when the coach stopped supervising the upperclassman as they made the freshmen players collect all the volleyballs they had strewn about the school. As I was attempting to gather some of them, a senior pushed me into a locker and my finger broke. I was also elbowed in the face and received a fat lip. At the end of the practice, the coach laughed at me because I was so flustered about what had just occurred. When I got to my moms waiting car, I could barely tell her what happened through my tears. I hesitated because I knew that she would want the incident reported to the school administration. After the truth came out, my mother urged me to talk to the athletic director about what had occurred. Although I felt embarrassed, I told my story because I knew that the coach was wrong for allowing events to unfold as they did. J ohn Proctor and I both had a choice to expose the unethical actions of others even though it meant being shamed ourselves, and we both made the decision to accept the negative consequences for doing so.
1. What does the first sentence do to set up the paragraph?
2. How many pieces of evidence does the writer give to support the idea in the topic sentence?
3. How does the writer cite evidence? (Do quotes stand alone or are they introduced?)
4. Do all the MLA citations look the same? Why?
5. Why are citations important?
6. Is this a good supporting paragraph?
7. What is done well in this paragraph?
8. What could be improved in this paragraph?
WRITING INSTRUCTION 34 Appendix G
WRITING INSTRUCTION 35 Pseudonym SLO Essay 1 Score SLO Essay 2 Score SLO Essay 3/2nd Research Paper Percentages Improved from SLO 1 to SLO 2? Improved from SLO 2 to SLO 3? Improved from SLO 1 to SLO 3? Improved from SLO 1 to SLO 2 to SLO 3? Student 1 88.00% 76.00% 90.67% no yes yes no Student 2 56.00% 96.00% 74.67% yes no yes no Student 3 84.00% 100.00% not available yes not available not available not available Student 4 80.00% 92.00% 97.33% yes yes yes yes Student 5 76.00% 100.00% 84.00% yes no yes no Student 6 56.00% 92.00% 90.67% yes no yes no Student 7 64.00% 100.00% 89.33% yes no yes no Student 8 80.00% 100.00% not available yes not available not available not available Student 9 not available 100.00% 80.00% not available no not available not available Student 10 40.00% 88.00% not available yes not available not available not available Student 11 64.00% 76.00% 86.67% yes yes yes yes Student 12 28.00% 64.00% not available yes not available not available not available Student 13 40.00% 96.00% 89.33% yes no yes no Student 14 44.00% 72.00% 76.00% yes yes yes yes Student 15 40.00% not available 68.00% not available not available yes not available Student 16 48.00% 96.00% 86.67% yes no yes no Student 17 68.00% 100.00% 92.00% yes no yes no Student 18 72.00% 100.00% not available yes not available not available not available Student 19 64.00% not available not available not available not available not available not available Student 20 not available 76.00% not available not available not available not available not available Student 21 76.00% 96.00% 97.33% yes yes yes yes Student 22 72.00% 100.00% 93.33% yes no yes no Student 23 52.00% 72.00% 82.67% yes yes yes yes Student 24 60.00% 76.00% 88.00% yes yes yes yes Student 25 88.00% 100.00% not available yes not available not available not available Student 26 48.00% 56.00% 88.00% yes yes yes yes Student 27 56.00% 100.00% 89.33% yes no yes no Mean Score: 61.76% 88.96% 86.53% yes no yes no Appendix H
WRITING INSTRUCTION 36
Student Scores for SLO Essays
20.00% 30.00% 40.00% 50.00% 60.00% 70.00% 80.00% 90.00% 100.00% SLO 1 Score SLO 2 Score SLO 3 Score Student 1 Student 2 Student 3 Student 4 Student 5 Student 6 Student 7 Student 8 Student 9 Student 10 Student 11 Student 12 Student 13 Student 14 Student 15 Student 16 Student 17 Student 18 Student 19 Student 20 Student 21 Student 22 Student 23 Student 24 Student 25 Student 26 Student 27 WRITING INSTRUCTION 37 Pseudonym First Research Paper Percentage SLO Essay 3/2nd Research Paper Percentages Improved From First to Second Research Paper? Student 1 82.22% 90.67% yes Student 2 44.44% 74.67% yes Student 3 91.11% not available not available Student 4 91.11% 97.33% yes Student 5 93.33% 84.00% no Student 6 84.44% 90.67% yes Student 7 88.89% 89.33% yes Student 8 90.00% not available not available Student 9 86.67% 80.00% no Student 10 not available not available not available Student 11 68.89% 86.67% yes Student 12 84.44% not available not available Student 13 80.00% 89.33% yes Student 14 44.44% 76.00% yes Student 15 not available 68.00% not available Student 16 66.67% 86.67% yes Student 17 91.11% 92.00% yes Student 18 86.67% not available not available Student 19 80.00% not available not available Student 20 not available not available not available Student 21 84.44% 97.33% yes Student 22 84.44% 93.33% yes Student 23 68.89% 82.67% yes Student 24 66.67% 88.00% yes Student 25 88.89% not available not available Student 26 62.22% 88.00% yes Student 27 82.22% 89.33% yes Mean Score: 78.84% 86.53% yes Appendix I
WRITING INSTRUCTION 38 Student Scores for Research Papers
40.00% 50.00% 60.00% 70.00% 80.00% 90.00% 100.00% Research Paper 1 SLO Essay 3 (Research Paper 2) Student 1 Student 2 Student 3 Student 4 Student 5 Student 6 Student 7 Student 8 Student 9 Student 10 Student 11 Student 12 Student 13 Student 14 Student 15 Student 16 Student 17 Student 18 Student 19 Student 20 Student 21 Student 22 Student 23 Student 24 Student 25 Student 26 Student 27 WRITING INSTRUCTION 39 Appendix J THESIS comes at the end of first paragraph makes some kind of claim/states belief summarizes/previews what the body paragraphs will cover INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH HINTS answer the prompt (if there is one) o our example: talk about character or time period AND personal experience sets up the rest of the essay strong thesis draws the reader in with the first sentence can grab readers attention through o relatable scenario o asking a question o sensory details (sight, sound, touch, smell, etc.) o dialogue o quote o statistic o draw on emotion o draw on logic BODY PARAGRAPH HINTS first sentence (topic sentence) mini-thesis for paragraph explain unknown words or necessary aspects of story every claim requires evidence o quote from text dont let quote stand alone, explain it o example from personal experience comparisons are smooth and not forced o not too much personal experience CLOSING PARAGRAPH HINTS restate the thesis in new words summarize the main points made end with something memorable o could be the lesson learned/conclusion to an anecdote started in intro paragraph CITATIONS normal MLA citation: I agree that Rather than love, than money, than fame, give me truth (Thoreau 234). using the authors name: I agree with Thoreau when he says Rather than love, than money, than fame, give me truth (234). WRITING INSTRUCTION 40 0 2 4 6 8 10 12 14 Scored 79% or lower Scored 80-89% Scored 90- 100% Average Number of Items Circled on Aggregated Noticings Lists Average Number of Items Circled on Aggregated Noticings Lists Pseudonym Number of Items Circled on Aggregated Noticings List SLO Essay 3 Percentages Student 1 6 90.67% Student 2 3 74.67% Student 3 not turned in not available Student 4 16 97.33% Student 5 6 84.00% Student 6 not turned in 90.67% Student 7 14 89.33% Student 8 18 not available Student 9 11 80.00% Student 10 not turned in not available Student 11 6 86.67% Student 12 16 not available Student 13 16 89.33% Student 14 not turned in 76.00% Student 15 not turned in 68.00% Student 16 2 86.67% Student 17 not turned in 92.00% Student 18 not turned in not available Student 19 not turned in not available Student 20 not turned in not available Student 21 16 97.33% Student 22 not turned in 93.33% Student 23 5 82.67% Student 24 11 88.00% Student 25 10 not available Student 26 not turned in 88.00% Student 27 8 89.33% paraphrase: I could particularly relate to his preference for the pursuit of truth over love, wealth and fame (Thoreau 234).
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Appendix K Rubric for SLO Writing Prompt 1
WRITING INSTRUCTION 42 Checklist Rubric for Grading Post-Intervention Essay
WRITING INSTRUCTION 43 Appendix L Student 21s Writing Sample for SLO Essay 1 Introduction Paragraph
Student 21s Writing Sample for SLO Essay 2 Introduction Paragraph
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