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Jazmin Bermudez
Professor Jackie Hymes
English 115, M/W 11:00-12:15
22 September 2014
Evaluation Letter
When given the assignment I knew I was going to write about soccer, but I didn't know
specifically what I was going to write. Then I figured I write about my first High School
tournament, but as soon as I started to write it I realized it was going to be long. I didnt know
exactly how I was going to start it so I just began to write. When I started to describe how I
started playing soccer to how I got to high school and just continued to write. Once the paper
was finished I realized how long it was and went back and cut some details out. Before I begin to
write I usually make a small outline of the paragraphs and what each one will contain. My
writing process is to try and stick to the outline I created and just continue to write without
getting distracted.
My strength in writing this assignment was being able to just write freely. Usually when
writing essay's for class I have a specific topic that I have to write about, but this time I didn't so
I think it was much easier to put the story together. However a weakness I had was that I had
trouble limiting myself of the details. Since I had no limits I found myself rambling and having
trouble trying to make it entertaining for the reader's because I was putting so much detail.
For the category of "Assignment Requirement" I believe I deserve 10/10. I followed all the
prompt instructions and properly used MLA format. My essay met the length/ word count
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minimum and I believe I had a creative title. For the "Content" category I believe I deserve
45/50. My revised narrative includes much more detail, explaining every thought in my head
making it personal. I also described how I started to play soccer and how I progressed throughout
the years. For "organization" I believe I deserve 30/30. My narrative is in chronological order
and does not jump from one day to another. I think it's fairly easy to follow along. For
"Mechanics" I think I deserve 7/10 or 8/10. Even though I did go back and revise my narrative to
add more detail with the semi-final game, I'm sure there are still part that could be better.