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Formal Observation #1
Abby Kerlin
October 1st, 2014
Teaching Point: Writers select a seed idea from their notebooks to develop on special draft paper. Drafting
does not mean copying word-for-word, but using all the strategies youve learned to make your story even
better!
Learning Objective(s)
What do you want students
to know, understand, or be
able to do as a result of this
lesson?
Students will be able to select an entry from their notebook that reflects their
understanding of seed ideas and begin a first draft on drafting paper.
Students will understand that drafting does not mean copying your work, but adding
on as you go, drawing on known strategies, to make your story even better.
Evidence for
assessment
Where will you look
(product, performance,
documentation you create,
etc.) for signs of student
learning?
What will you look for?
What are your criteria?
(examples of statements or
actions that would show the
particular kinds of
understandings, learnings,
&/or skills you are after?)
Where?
Connection: Turn and Talk / T-Chart
Independent Writing
Rationale
Why are you teaching this
What?
Pre-draft a T-Chart, Watermelon Topics
vs. Seed Stories. Use a class mentor text,
such as Marla Frazees Roller Coaster, to
get started. Ask kids to turn and talk about
another seed story that might emerge from
a day at the amusement park. Make a
mental note of those who are having
trouble zooming in on one moment. Have
they been to an amusement park? Invite
students to share ideas and record them on
chart. Choose a strong seed idea and ask
the rest of the class if they agree (thumbs
up). Take notice of which students might
need more support with this .
Invite students to use the strategies they
have been learning to develop a piece of
writing around a shared experience.
Opportunities for assessment:
1. Writing a lead
2. Using 5 senses to add details to
sentences
3. Wrapping up final thoughts with a
powerful conclusion
Look at student drafts alongside their prewriting from notebooks. What strategies
are students using to develop stories? Are
they refining their leads? Elaborating with
the 5 senses in mind? Adding sound
words? Slowing down their stories?
Which students did not start a draft today?
Are students still writing about big topics,
or do these drafts show an understanding
of seed ideas?
Invite students who are having trouble
getting started to orally talk through their
ideas for a small seed story. Once students
have a moment in mind, pose questions
that support them with developing details.
Use student work to determine if students
are developing a better understanding.
CCSS.ELA-LITERACY.W.3.3
lesson? What connections technique, descriptive details, and clear event sequences.
does it have to standards?
Does it connect to students CCSS.ELA-LITERACY.W.3.3.A
interests, strengths, and
Establish a situation and introduce a narrator and/or characters; organize an
needs?
With guidance and support from peers and adults, develop and strengthen writing
as needed by planning, revising, and editing.
I am teaching this lesson because I want my students to understand drafting as an opportunity to
breathe life into their stories. Most third graders do not have experience with drafting, and must be
taught the ins and outs of this crucial step in the writing process from the use of special draft paper
to tapping into their growing repertoire of strategies. A large portion of this lesson revisits the
distinction between writing about a big watermelon topic and narrowing in on one moment, or one
experience, that happened within those stories. After looking over student work from this unit, at
least a third of my current class could benefit from additional practice with this essential component
that defines a seed idea. Additionally, I noticed children needed more practice unfreezing their
stories. Many are summarizing an event rather than telling about an experience. Therefore, since
drafting is being taught as an opportunity to develop their pieces, this lesson also provides students
with a review of the strategies and techniques they have been using to improve their stories. Most
students have exhibited a knack for detail, whether in their writing or their story telling. The
modeling and shared writing portion of this mini-lesson offers students several opportunities to
demonstrate this skill. It also applies to their strengths because most of my students are more
inclined to engage during lessons that rely on their input. This lesson uses their interests in a few
ways: (i) it acknowledges the work students have been doing, and the topics they have been writing
about; (ii) it uses a favorite mentor texts; (iii) it taps into a meaningful experience since many
children have written and spoken about taking a trip to an amusement park; and (iv) the active
engagement portion of the lesson is rooted in a shared experience.
something real that occurred. This lesson takes into consideration that some
students are still struggling with zooming in on a small episode, but it assumes they
know they are not writing about invented characters or fictional storylines, they are
writing about true stories that are important to them. Students have already learned
how to strategically select leads, recall sensory details, include action and
incorporate dialogue in order to improve their writing in very noticeable ways. This
lesson expects students to be familiar with these strategies and to draw on them
Learning Experience
Assessment
Starting It
Doing It
Outline your sequence of
instructional moves including
participation structures,
materials, intellectual
resources, and time allotted.
Is there a product or
performance you will be
expecting students to
create?
use the strategies discussed in the lesson did he/she copy directly from source?
-Is there evidence of strategy application
between writing pieces?
-What are students using?
-What are students not using?
Finishing It
How will you bring students
to closure with this learning
experience and connect it to
future learning?
Accessibility
In this lesson, I have considered that some students are not yet grasping the concept
The topic I chose to write about was something we experienced together as a class
the day before, so that all students feel included and are not limited in their
participation. I also remind students of the strategies they can use in order to
participate in the active engagement piece, naming them (5 senses) and choosing an
example pulled from their notebooks (Josiah thought about how the popcorn
tasted), strategically weaving in students who might need to be refocused. Lastly, I
differentiate the draft paper for the students who may feel intimidated by the lines
on the loose-leaf paper.
Materials Needed
Chart Paper, Markers, Doc Cam, Writing Notebook and Differentiated Draft Paper