Peer Review: Reflective Essay draft

Authors name: _____ Grace C___________________

Reviewers name: ______Chelsea Brown_____________________
Author: Provide the following information about your essay:
1. Write your thesis statement/main idea below (if it is still a work in progress, say so)
Central Theme for portfolio:
Theme of the paper:
2. Write out one or two questions about your draft you would like your reviewer to answer.
A. I feel like my draft needs a lot of work, what area needs the most work and why?
B. Is my theme making sense for my portfolio is falling in love with words to ambiguous?
Reviewer: Read the writers entire draft once. As you reread the draft, respond to the following:
1. Introductory paragraph(s): Write down the sentence or sentences that contain this reflection
papers main idea (according to you). Does the author focus on an overarching theme/metaphor/quote
symbol/etc.? Suggest how the thesis statement/main idea could be strengthened, clarified, or otherwise
improved. Does the author state which evidence will be examined in the rest of the essay? Suggest
how the author could improve this part of the essay.
The author focuses on the awareness of the class. She did not know that the class would teach her as
much as it did. I feel that the introductory paragraphs could have been more polished. I feel like I want
to know more.

2. Supporting paragraphs: Check to make sure the content of the paper supports the thesis and that
additional evidence or content is not needed to support it. Indicate one paragraph in which the writers
evidence is strong, and state the reasons why you think so. Then find one paragraph that needs more
evidence. Drawing from your own experiences or understanding of the type of assignment the author is
discussing, suggest evidence that might work to better illustrate or develop the main idea or subclaims.
Her supporting paragraphs go into more detail about how each module helped her as a writer become
more aware of the technical communication writing process. The paragraphs are organized by module
which helps the portfolio reflection seem more concise.

3. Organization: Number the paragraphs in the authors paper. Then, use the space below to describe
the purpose or main idea of each paragraph. Check to make sure the paper follows a consistent
organizational pattern and is effectively organized with clear paragraphs (focused around one subclaim) and smooth transitional/topic sentences. When you finish, suggest where the writer might
improve the organization of the paper through the use of transitional sentences, by focusing on one
topic in each paragraph, by restructuring the order of paragraphs, etc.
She breaks down each paragraph into its individual module. For example, she has writing for
employment as one and the others bolded as a heading. Just make sure your paragraphs flow reread the
topic sentences.

4. List the 2 most important things the author should focus on during revision.
Focus on grammatical errors. Reread your paper make sure you didnt leave anything you wanted to
say out.

5. Respond to the authors questions in number 2.

Just keep on learning about the writing process dont stop outside of this class. You are a very polished
writer. Just sit at the typewriter and bleed.

Author: When your essay is returned, read the comments by your peer reviewer and do the following:
1. Compare your description of the thesis statement with your readers. Consider your readers
comments and revise your thesis statement if necessary.

2. What additional evidence from the research youve read, from your experiences, from your
observations, etc. would strengthen the support for your thesis?

3. Make a revision plan. List, in order of importance, the 3 most important things that you need to do
as you revise your essay.