Revision letter of Curing Writers Block with Mary Pipher by Ronja

Peterson
An Evaluation by Michelle Sou

#1 First hand impression: A well-written evaluation of Piphers book

Writing to Change the World that gives the book support for its
purpose. The criterion is its address to a writers challenge of
inadequacy and inability to gather self-reflection in change writing.
Overall, I thought the authors focus on the books helpfulness to
writers block was very thoughtful and made the essay very consistent.
#2 identify one aspect of the draft that seems especially
effective: I think the introduction is especially effective in stating the
authors criteria for what makes this book so great for writers who face
writers block. It gives examples of some writers challenges that lead
to writers block, and helps the reader expect these issues to be
addressed in the book itself in the following paragraphs.

Read again to Suggest improvements

#1 Recommend ways the strengthen the presentation of the
Subject
Some ways to strengthen the presentation include emphasizing the
books usefulness for beginner writers intimidated by the common
writers block, not just generalizing it as just writers. That way, you can

go into specifics about what makes being a beginner writer even more
challenging when it comes to the issue at hand. Integrating your
quotes will also present your points more coherently and effectively.
#2 suggest ways to clarify the overall judgment and
strengthen the supporting argument: Overall, you should clarify
your supporting arguments with more commentary after the quotes.
This is especially helpful in paragraphs 2, 4, 5, and part of 6. For
paragraph 6, you should include a quote from Piphers Chapter 6:
Diving In in order to show that she is not fond of the term writers
block, and then comment on that to show why that reflects how helpful
her writing is for people who do have writers block. Always end your
paragraphs with your own words, not quotes (paragraph 2).

#3 Suggest ways to improve the response to likely objections

and/or alternative judgments: I liked your refuting paragraph a lot,
especially how you tried to tie in all your sources together at once in
defense of Piphers book. I would making the topic sentence stronger
by ending the sentence with a reason why Piphers book isnt just for
the weeping writer. Maybe explain what a weeping writer is because
I dont really understand what that means. Basically, I would
recommend expanding on the dissenting opinion, and then backing it
up with more meat about why Piphers book is really more than
appeasing. Maybe expand on how Mores feeling is a clear testament,

and Plotniks connection to all of it. Again, more of Piphers words, and
more commentary following it would make this a very convincing
refuting argument.
#4 suggest how the organization might improve: I liked your
organization very much, and cant say I would suggest your
paragraphs to change order in any way. I would probably recommend
changing the paragraph with the topic sentence believing yourself
and knowing that your person has something to make it about what
part of Piphers book is especially helpful in doing so. I agree its
important, but how is Pipher integral in learning how to do so?