Melissa Koroleff

TE 848
July 2015

Revised System for Feedback on Student Writing

Explaining and Expanding Ideas and Content

6: The writer exceeds expectations in demonstrating control of and sophistication in the
following:
Topic is fully explained and elaborated in an articulate, eloquent manner
Ample detail, evidence, supporting examples, etc. are successfully integrated
Writing demonstrates vast newfound knowledge/connections made that further enhance
quality of content
Content is inviting and captures and holds readers attention
Content is appropriate for audience and exudes a clear purpose
Special care and detail for specific genre is apparent and helpful in developing content
5: The writer successfully meets expectations in demonstrating solid control of the following:
Topic is explained and elaborated well
Enough detail, evidence, supporting examples, etc. are successfully integrated
Writing demonstrates newfound knowledge that further develops the content
Content is inviting and holds the readers attention most of the time
Content is mostly appropriate for audience and demonstrates a clear purpose
Care and detail for specific genre is apparent in developing content
4: The writer meets expectations in demonstrating fair control of the following:
Topic is mostly explained and elaborated
Majority of detail, evidence, supporting examples, etc. are integrated
Writing demonstrates an attempt at making connections that further develop the content
Content holds the readers attention some of the time
Content is somewhat appropriate for audience and demonstrates a purpose most of the
time
Care and detail for specific genre is mostly apparent in developing content
3: The writer is approaching expectations in demonstrating control of the following:
Topic is somewhat explained and partially elaborated
Some detail, evidence, supporting examples, etc. are used
Writing demonstrates an attempt at making newfound connections in the content
Content holds the readers attention at certain points
Content is appropriate for audience at times and demonstrates a purpose some of the time
Care and detail for specific genre is present at times
2: The writer has room to grow before approaching expectations in demonstrating control of the
following:
Topic is not fully explained and elaboration is missing
Many details and supporting examples are missing or not used appropriately
Writing does not show newfound connections in the content
Content minimally holds the readers attention
Content is not entirely appropriate for audience and demonstrates unclear purpose most
of the time
Care and detail for specific genre is in beginning stages of development
1: The writer has not completed or submitted the assignment

Melissa Koroleff
TE 848
July 2015

Revised System for Feedback on Student Writing

Organization of Ideas and Form of Content

6: The writer exceeds expectations in demonstrating sophisticated control of the following:
Organization of ideas flows very logically and in a way that enhances the content greatly
Organization of form and content greatly accentuates the inviting nature of the writing
Sentences, paragraphs, and ideas are well connected
The writing is extremely easy to follow
The writer clearly plans and achieves important transitions and connections
Form of content is thoughtfully appropriate to genre, audience, and purpose
5: The writer successfully meets expectations in demonstrating solid control of the following:
Organization of ideas flows logically and in a way that enhances content
Organization of form and content accentuates the inviting nature of the writing
Sentences, paragraphs, and ideas are connected
The writing is easy to follow
The writer plans and achieves transitions and connections
Form of content is appropriate to genre, audience, and purpose
4: The writer meets expectations in demonstrating fair control of the following:
Organization of ideas flows logically
Organization of form and content is apparent
Sentences, paragraphs, and ideas are mostly connected
The writing is mostly easy to follow
The writer plans and achieves transitions and connections in most areas
Form of content is mostly appropriate to genre, audience, and purpose
3: The writer is approaching expectations in demonstrating control of the following:
Organization of ideas is somewhat choppy or transient
Organization of form and content is not always apparent
Sentences, paragraphs, and ideas have some connectivity
The writing is sometimes easy to follow in areas
The writer attempts to use some transitions and connections in some areas
Form of content is appropriate to genre, audience, and purpose at times
2: The writer has room to grow before approaching expectations in demonstrating control of the
following:
Organization of ideas is lacking and there is no logical flow between ideas
Organization of form and content is not apparent
Sentences, paragraphs, and ideas are not easy to follow
The writing is not easy to follow
The writer does not use transitions or connections
Form of content appropriate to genre, audience, and purpose is in beginning stages of
development
1: The writer has not completed or submitted the assignment

Melissa Koroleff
TE 848
July 2015

Revised System for Feedback on Student Writing

Voice, Style, and Word Choice

6: The writer exceeds expectations in demonstrating sophisticated control of the following:
The writer successfully speaks to his readers with an authentic voice and personality
appropriate to genre, audience, and purpose
The writer successfully incorporates stylistic devices if/where appropriate
The writer successfully uses exceptional and creative words in meaningful ways to
convey his points
Voice, style, and wording sound extremely natural, not forced
5: The writer successfully meets expectations in demonstrating solid control of the following:
The writer speaks to his readers with a voice and personality appropriate to genre,
audience, and purpose
The writer incorporates stylistic devices if/where appropriate
The writer uses creative words in meaningful ways to convey his points
Voice, style, and wording sound natural, not forced
4: The writer meets expectations in demonstrating fair control of the following:
The writer mostly speaks to his readers with a developing voice and personality mostly
appropriate to genre, audience, and purpose
The writer attempts to incorporate some stylistic devices if/where appropriate
The writer uses some creative words in efforts to convey his points
Voice, style, and wording mostly sound natural
3: The writer is approaching expectations in demonstrating control of the following:
The writer sometimes speaks to his readers with a forming voice that is somewhat
appropriate to genre, audience, and purpose
The writer sometimes attempts to incorporate some stylistic devices if/where appropriate
The writer uses few creative words, yet they are not used appropriately
Voice, style, and wording sound natural in some areas
2: The writer has room to grow before approaching expectations in demonstrating control of the
following:
The writer does not speak to his readers. The writer does not have a voice that is
appropriate to genre, audience, or purpose
The writer does not incorporate stylistic devices if/where appropriate
The writer does not use creative words
Voice, style, and wording do not sound natural
1: The writer has not completed or submitted the assignment

Melissa Koroleff
TE 848
July 2015

Revised System for Feedback on Student Writing

Sentence Fluency and Logic

6: The writer exceeds expectations in demonstrating sophisticated control of the following:
The writing sounds extremely fluid and natural
The writing has great pacing and patterns
Sentences have extensive variety of structure, style, and craft
Sentences have extensive variety of length and complexity
Logic in writing is expressed extremely appropriately for specific genre, audience, and
purpose
5: The writer successfully meets expectations in demonstrating solid control of the following:
The writing sounds very fluid and natural
The writing has good pacing and patterns
Sentences have variety of structure, style, and craft
Sentences have variety of length and complexity
Logic in writing is expressed appropriately for specific genre, audience, and purpose
4: The writer meets expectations in demonstrating fair control of the following:
The writing sounds mostly fluid and natural
The writing has a fair pace and some patterns
Sentences have some variety of structure, style, and craft
Sentences have some variety of length and complexity
Logic in writing is expressed appropriately for specific genre, audience, and purpose in
most areas
3: The writer is approaching expectations in demonstrating control of the following:
The writing sounds somewhat fluid
The writing has semblances of pace in some areas
Sentences have a few different types of structure, style, and craft in only a few areas
Sentences have a few different types of length and complexity in only a few areas
Logic in writing is emerging in some areas
2: The writer has room to grow before approaching expectations in demonstrating control of the
following:
The writing does not sound fluid or natural
The writing does not have a clear pace
Sentences are of the same repetitive structure and style and lack craft
Sentences are of the same repetitive length and lack complexity
The writing is not logical
1: The writer has not completed or submitted the assignment

Melissa Koroleff
TE 848
July 2015

Revised System for Feedback on Student Writing

Conventions and Editing

6: The writer exceeds expectations in demonstrating sophisticated control of the following:
Accurate and advanced spelling
Consistent and correct capitalization
Effective and consistent use of punctuation to attribute to clarity and style
Successful incorporation of grammar and mechanics to practice form within context of
content
Wide range of efficient uses of rules of English language so that editing is rarely needed
5: The writer successfully meets expectations in demonstrating solid control of the following:
Accurate spelling with mostly advanced wording
Correct capitalization
Consistent use of punctuation to attribute to clarity and style
Incorporation of grammar and mechanics to practice form within context of content
Range of uses of rules of English language so that editing is largely unneeded
4: The writer meets expectations in demonstrating fair control of the following:
Mostly accurate spelling with attempts at fairly advanced wording
Mostly accurate capitalization
Fair use of punctuation to attempt to clarify the writing
Fair attempts at incorporating grammar and mechanics to practice form within context of
content
Editing is needed throughout several key areas of the piece
3: The writer is approaching expectations in demonstrating control of the following:
Somewhat accurate spelling
Somewhat accurate capitalization
Inconsistent use of punctuation that makes clarity of writing difficult to achieve
Developing understanding of and use of grammar and mechanics
Editing is needed throughout the majority of the piece
2: The writer has room to grow before approaching expectations in demonstrating control of the
following:
Frequent spelling errors that detract from the content
Frequent capitalization errors that detract from the content
Frequent punctuation errors that detract from the content
Lack of grammar and mechanics
Editing is needed in all areas of the piece
1: The writer has not completed or submitted the assignment

Melissa Koroleff
TE 848
July 2015

Revised System for Feedback on Student Writing

Creativity and Effort/Progress

6: The writer exceeds expectations in demonstrating sophisticated control of the following:
The writer successfully takes creative risks in illustrating newfound knowledge in
eloquent ways
The writing is original, thought-provoking, inventive, and appealing to readers
The writing reflects honest dedication to and metacognition about the writing process
The writing reflects sincere effort and strong progress made since the previous writing
experience
5: The writer successfully meets expectations in demonstrating solid control of the following:
The writer takes creative risks in illustrating newfound knowledge in expressive ways
The writing is original and very appealing to readers
The writing reflects honest dedication to the writing process
The writing reflects sincere effort and noteworthy progress made since the previous
writing experience
4: The writer meets expectations in demonstrating fair control of the following:
The writer attempts to take creative risks throughout the piece as he attempts to illustrate
newfound knowledge
The writing is original and appealing to readers
The writing reflects dedication to the writing process
The writing reflects effort and some progress made since the previous writing experience
3: The writer is approaching expectations in demonstrating control of the following:
The writer attempts to take some risks in certain areas of the piece as he attempts to
illustrate his points
The writing is somewhat appealing to readers
The writing reflects some dedication to the writing process
The writing reflects some effort and some progress made since the previous writing
experience
2: The writer has room to grow before approaching expectations in demonstrating the following:
The writer does not make creative risks
The writing is not particularly original nor is it appealing to readers
The writing does not reflect dedication to the writing process as a whole
The writing reflects little to no progress made since the previous writing experience
1: The writer has not completed or submitted the assignment

Melissa Koroleff
TE 848
July 2015

Revised System for Feedback on Student Writing

Color-coded Feedback Key:

Please see the attached copy of your writing for highlighted evidence of growth from previous
assessment(s)/unit(s) in green font:
See attached copy of your writing for highlighted areas of future improvement in yellow font.
Please read through my written feedback below and then take a few minutes to complete the
Writer Reflection form that appears after my comments.
Things I learned about you while reading:

Things I learned about your writing while reading:

Areas of your writing that impressed me:

Things I challenge you to try with your future writing:

Melissa Koroleff
TE 848
July 2015

Revised System for Feedback on Student Writing

Writer Reflection
Student:
Class:
Date:
Assignment:
Please answer the following questions and return this form to Miss Koroleff in order to receive
your overall writing progress assessment, current grade on this particular assignment, and further
assistance with your writing for another draft if needed/wanted.
1. Identify and describe two strengths in this writing assignment and/or parts of this
assignment that make you proud.

2. Identify and describe two weaknesses in this writing assignment and/or parts of the
writing process in general that make you anxious or frustrated.

3. How do you feel you improved your writing skills since our last writing assignment?
Please explain with examples. This could be something that you did do well this time or
tried to do this time that you did not do in the past, for example. If you do not feel that
you improved, please explain why.

4. Describe at least one new goal you have for yourself for your future writing.

Moving forward:
If you are unhappy with how your writing turned out and wish to make revisions and resubmit
your work for a NEW grade, you may do so within ONE WEEK of receiving this reflection
form. Please check your course of action:

Melissa Koroleff
TE 848
July 2015

Revised System for Feedback on Student Writing

____ I am ready to revise! Thanks for another chance!

____ I would also like to schedule a one-on-one writing conference with you, Miss Koroleff, to
talk through ideas and concerns and/or to get more clarification/feedback before I submit my
revised draft in one week. Possible times I am able to meet (either before or after school, during
homeroom or study hall) are the following:

____ I will not be revising this time. I feel confident about how I did and I accept the grade I
earned as noted on the rubric above.