Mary Ellery writing task

Learning intention: I can plan, compose and review a short

imaginative text (EN1-2A)
TASK:
Write the complete story of Mary Ellery. It can be from
any characters perspective or written in the third
person.
Your plot will be shaped by; your imagination, the
information in the original Mary Ellery text and 6Rs
class investigation.
Your story must explain how and why Mary Ellery was
removed from official historical records of the voyage
to Osiris.
Success criteria:
I use the information in the original text to structure my
story
I use the information the 6R gathered in our
investigation to structure my story.
I use my imagination to creatively fill in the gaps
needed to complete the story.
I write my story in a clear narrative structure:
o Title: an imaginative title that encapsulates your story.
o Orientation; who/what/where/when/why/how
o Complication: what issues or problems occur?
o Events: describe a series of events that shape your plot
o Resolution: this could conclude your story clearly OR
leave the audience gripped by an unsolved problem
I use language features appropriate for an
imaginative text. Including:
o Use of particular nouns to refer to or describe the particular
people, animals and things that the story is about
o Use of adjectives to build noun groups to describe people,
animals or things in the story
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o Use of time connectives and conjunctions to sequence events

through time
o Use of adverbs and adjectival phrases to locate the particular
incidents or events

Success criteria continued (language features)

o Use of past-tense action verbs to indicate the actions in the
narrative
o Use of saying and thinking verbs to indicate what characters
are feeling, thinking or saying

I use my Editing Checklist to proofread and edit my draft

ORIGINAL TEXT
In the year 2050, Mary Ellery, daughter of William and Elizabeth Ellery,
left her home in Mountsville to travel to the planet Osiris. She was a
member of the group Venture, led by Dr. James Harvey. Mary never
returned. The team does not speak of her. There is no mention of her
in the records and her name does not appear in the medal citation that
honours the work of Dr. Harvey and his group.

Information gathered in class investigation:

1. Mary was an introverted teenager. She left for Osiris when she
was 15.
2. Despite being quiet in person, Mary Ellery actively used social
media to express herself.
3. Mary was initially excited about the voyage but became scared on
the trip after conducting in depth research about the planet Osiris.
4. Mary abandoned the space craft in the middle of the voyage. Noone has spoken of her since. We do not know if she survived.
5. The journey to Osiris took 4 months. The crew slept for most of
that time.
6. Osiris is a hot, volcanic planet considered uninhabitable by
humans.
7. Dr Harvey has no defined speciality he considers himself a
doctor of everything.
8. William and Elizabeth Ellery were aware of Marys plan to join the
Venture team.

Additional Information from your imagination:

PLANNING SHEET
Title:
Think of an interesting title that reflects the story.

Orientation:
Where?
Explain where the story begins and describe the setting.

When?
Explain the time your story takes place.

Who is the central character?

You will need to make who the main character is clear in the opening of your story.
Who is telling the story?

What situation is the character in when the story begins?

This should set up the rest of the story.

Complication:
What problem/event occurs that takes the story into unpredictable territory?

Series of events:
How do to people in your story think/feel and react to the problems posed in the complication?
Use the events from the original text, class investigation and your imagination to shape this
sequence of events.
Event 1:

Event 2:

Event 3:

Resolution:
This is where the story ends.
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You must wrap up the events to lead to some sort of conclusion that compliments your story.