KesssshTheshiptouchestheground.Ihearinmyheadsetthecaptainyelling.

Icanjustmake
outwhatshe'ssayingoverthegunfire.Moveout,Moveout!shescreams.Werunoutducking
anddivingoutofthealienslineoffire.

BoomWegetthrowntothegroundshrapnelsprayingeverywhere.Ilookacross,aminehas
explodedabouttwentymetresinfrontofus.Ihearscreaming,it'stheguynexttome.Hesgota
pieceofmetalstickingoutofhischest.Bloodisoozingdownhisbodytoapuddleonthe
ground.Ican'tstayhereI'vegottomove.

Iruntowardsacar,Icanhearbulletswhizzingpastmyears.Islamintoitleaningupagainstit
tocovermyself.Icansensesomethingontheothersideofthevehicle.Icrawlunderneathit
seeingthestrangestpairoflegs.Ipointmygunupatthethingandshoot.Greenbloodsplatters
allovermyfaceandontheground.

Itwasanalien,Ijustkilledanalien.Jack,Jack.it'savoicei'veheardbeforebutitdoesn't
makesense.Jackgetoffyourxbox,it'sdinnertime.Ipausethegametoreturntoitlater.

30MinuteNarrativeChallengeWritingAssessmentRubric

TITLEOFWRITINGBEINGASSESSED:TheDayTheAliensAttacked
Highlightwhereyoubelieveyourlevelofachievementisforeachofthe7assessmentareasbelow:

Level 2
Well Below
Standard
Ideas

many
simple
ideas,
related
to
topic

Level 3
Below Standard

Level 4
At Standard

Level5- 6
Above Standard

several
relevant

ideas
with

more
detail

complex
and
elaborated
ideas

writing
structure
and
language
are
appropriate
to
purpose i
nclude
detail
and are
mostly
controlled
controlled
ideas
which
make
sense
are
organised into
paragraphs

OR

2 or 3
ideas with
some
detail

Structure
and
Language

writing
structure
and
language
are
appropriate
to
purpose

writing
structure
and
language
are
appropriate
to
purpose w
ith
more

detail

Organisati
on

grouped
and
sequenced i
deas,
writing generally
flows
and
generally
makes
sense
(may be
brief)

controlled
ideas
which
make sense
but
paragraphs
are
not
actually
used

Vocabular
y

range
of
everyday
words
and
phrases
with a
few
precise words
for
detail.

Sentence
Structure

beginning
to
include
variety
of
sentence types
(simple,
compound,
complex)

Punctuatio
n

some
correct use
of
punctuation
such as full-stops,
capital letters
May attempt
contractions and
commas

variety of precise
words
and phrases
to
add information
and/or
interest

includes
a
variety
of
correct
sentence
types
(simple,

compound,
complex), and more
complex
sentences
are used
most
punctuation
is
correct and
some
other punctuation
has been used
correctly such as
commas and
contractions

OR

appropriate
words and phrases
to
enhance
meaning

Level 6 paragraphs
are
deliberately
structured
to direct
the reader

Ideas
are linked
effectively
within
and across
paragraphs
Precise words and
phrases are
consistently used
to
enhance meaning and
are used for effect

sentences
vary
in
structure and
length
with some
used
deliberately
for
effect

Sentences are
deliberately
crafted t
o
impact
and
engage

punctuation
is
correct and
some
complex
punctuation
is
attempted
such
as direct speech,
commas for
phrases and
clauses

Sentence and other

punctuation are
correct and
complex
punctuation is
used correctly
such
as, hyphens, colons,
parentheses
Punctuation
assists
meaning
Level 6 Controlled
use of punctuation to

All sentence

deliberately
selected
,
effective
and
original
ideas,
with
elaboration
which show
reflection
on the
wider world
writing s
tructure
and
language
are
appropriate
to
purpose,
include
detail
and are
mostlycontrolled
and
effective
Paragraphs s
upport
the d
evelopment o
f
text

Spelling

Spells a
range
of

personal and
high-frequency
words correctly such
as school, where,

friend, outside,
playing
May
attempt words
with more than two
syllables.

punctuation is
correct but no other
punctuation is used
Spells a
wide range
of personal and
high-frequency words
correctly.
Attempt
s difficult
words.

Self-Assessment and evaluation:

I really like the prompts this term and I can relate to some of them.
I enjoy writing a bit more now.

Peer feedback and feed-forward:

Invite a peer to provide feedback and feed-forward here

enhance
meaning
with no errors
Spells
high-frequency
words and
some
difficult
words

correctly such as
weird, through

Spells high-frequency
words and a
range of
difficult words
correctly, with few or
no errors.