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Focus means that the essay's ideas and supporting details / evidence work together to convey a thesis. One quick way to check for focus is to read over the essay title, thesis statement, and topic sentences. Reading each word aloud will often alert you to the omission of necessary words, use of the wrong word, and general sentence confusion.
Focus means that the essay's ideas and supporting details / evidence work together to convey a thesis. One quick way to check for focus is to read over the essay title, thesis statement, and topic sentences. Reading each word aloud will often alert you to the omission of necessary words, use of the wrong word, and general sentence confusion.
Focus means that the essay's ideas and supporting details / evidence work together to convey a thesis. One quick way to check for focus is to read over the essay title, thesis statement, and topic sentences. Reading each word aloud will often alert you to the omission of necessary words, use of the wrong word, and general sentence confusion.
4.1 Revising for Focus, Organization, Development, and Sentence Clarity Purpose This lesson helps determine whether an essay is focused and organized, whether its ideas are developed adequately, and whether its ideas and supporting detail are expressed clearly on the word and sentence level. Focus means that the essays ideas and supporting details/ evidence work together to convey a thesis.the essays overall argument. One quick way to check for focus is to read over the essay title, thesis statement, and topic sentences. This quick read should indicate whether major ideas developed in the essay connect to the overall argument suggested by the thesis statement and essay title, indicate whether major ideas are logically organized in support of the thesis statement, and whether major ideas are unnecessarily repeated. One quick way to determine whether major ideas are adequately developed is paragraph length. If body paragraphs are typically short, more details/evidence to develop the ideas introduced in the topic sentences should be considered. Combining some of the shorter paragraphs into one longer paragraph, introduced with an appropriate topic sentence, may also be necessary. See Writers Reference, C-4e, for more information about paragraph length. One last tip: Always revise for focus, thesis, organization, and development first. Once these global revisions are made, then revise for word choice and sentence clarity. Reading each word aloud will often alert you to the omission of necessary words, use of the wrong word, and general sentence confusion. Also reading the sentences aloud in reverse order forces you to concentrate on what your sentences actually say rather than on what you think they say. Directions FIRST, print out a hard copy of the student essay, Got Internet? AND the Revision and Edit Guide. For this essay assignment, the student was
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instructed to use her own experience and observation as primary support
for her thesis on internet use and to select information from articles she had read to support her thesis. She was also required to use MLA format to document this borrowed information. SECOND, read over Got Internet? and number the paragraphs for easy referencing on the Revision and Edit Guide. THIRD, after reading the essay and numbering the paragraphs, answer the questions on the Revision and Edit Guide and mark the essay as directed. Your answers and suggested revisions will frame the discussion for the peer editing workshops in Lesson Two.