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INTRO

Thesis: Although these articles

address the same subject, they
each focus on a specific aspect of
the event itself health
regulations, the humanistic yet
contradictory nature of Burning
Man, and what it is actually like to
attend the festival. In using specific
moves, rhetorical features, and
formatting techniques, the authors
are able to explain Burning Man
from their desired perspective.

How It Relates to the Main

Argument

Rhetorical features and

This paragraph discusses how both
conventions such as font,
of the academic articles were
formatting, and formal tone
formatted differently one being
influence the overall effectiveness
an informative essay while the
of the articles. It is clear to see the
other is a typical research paper.
structural differences between both They used a formal tone to convey
academic articles, yet they both
to readers that their arguments
value fact over fluff.
were important and legitimate.

The non-academic source is

completely different than both
academic publications in both
format, tone, and focus of content.
The author writes a series of daily
journal entries to give readers a
glimpse of what it is like to attend
Burning Man.

The third paragraph explains how

the non-academic source differs
from both scholarly publications by
using I statements and having a
conversational tone. This engages
readers and makes them feel as if
they know the author personally.

Though the sources are all very

different, the one thing they all
have in common is pictures. Each
author chose to include certain
pictures that relate to aspects of
their specific discipline.

Paragraph four discusses the fact

that all three articles use pictures to
illustrate their main points and to
provide visual context for their
readers. All of the authors use
photos that are specific to their
discipline or area of focus.

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How It Relates to the Main

Argument

One move the authors use in the

scholarly publications is the use of
quotations. They quote both other
sources and people to gain
credibility to their claims.

This paragraph examines how the

authors quote other sources and
people to gain more stake in their
claims. This move is all about
gaining credibility and further
backing up the argument.

Burning Man has its own lexicon Paragraph six describes the unique
that most people would not
lexicon of Burning Man and how
understand. The author of the non- Rembert Brown, the author of the
academic article uses a lot of this
non-academic piece, uses this
jargon in his journal entires to
jargon in his journal entries. It is
connect to his audience (mainly
important for him to use this jargon
those that have actually gone to
to show readers what it is like to
BM) and give them a glimpse of
immerse yourself in a place with its
what it is like to attend the festival
own culture. He also uses this
and be immersed in a new
jargon to engage and relate to his
culture.
readers that have been to Burning
Man.

The two academic articles are

really great for presenting facts and
draw from previous research to do
so. However, this puts limitations
upon the authors because they
have to find their own niche to
study. Non-academic sources are
more effective in depicting what
Burning Man is actually like, but
scholarly pieces may be better
suited for those wanting to study
the different dynamics found within
the event.

In this paragraph, I discuss how the

academic articles are very effective
in presenting facts and information
on Burning Man, but the nonacademic article gives a much
more realistic and comprehensive
idea of what it is like to attend
Burning Man. Scholarly articles
sometimes presents constraints
that can lessen the effectiveness of
the piece because the author is
limited as to what they can say and
how they can say it.

While each article discusses

Burning Man, they all approach it
from different angles and
emphasize different aspects.

In the conclusion paragraph, I

explain that while each article
focused on Burning Man, they all
emphasized different aspects of it
that relate to their specific
discipline. In doing this, each
author employed different moves
and formatting techniques in order
to most effectively present their
argument.