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initial WP
submission:
An observation or
question I
received from De
Piero or a
classmate:
The change(s) I
made to what I
initially wrote:
1. Written by
journalists, the
articles contain
analysis on trending
news topics regarding
sports.
In the sentence, I
added that the
articles are written by
fans as well.
By eliminating
unnecessary
repetition, the reader
would be more
anticipated of the
next move, instead of
having to read the
same sentence (in
different words) all
over again.
By elaborating more
in depth about this
topic, it was able to
create more support
for the argument
Worth addressing
that? Could that help
layer your argument
in any meaningful
way(s)?
5. By analyzing the
structure of each
piece, one can tell
apart a scholarly
article from a nonacademic media text
in this case online
newspaper editorials.
The title is the first
thing[2] to appear in
most texts. It is seen
even before starting
to read, and the larger
font grabs the
attention of the
reader. It gives a
clue...
My advice: steer
clear of thing and
things in academic
writing
It is not precise or
specific, and there
are better words to
replace it with.
7. The use of
Could it enhance to
*compare'n'contrast*
the titles of the pieces
in 1 paragraph?
Could that give your
reader more of a feel
of how these pieces
differ?
I created a separate
title explaining the
significance of the
title.
editorial. As on[1] e
starts to read the
editorial, a picture of
marijuana plants is
displayed, as well as
advertisements on the
side.
8. The journals are
broken down into an
introduction, methods
and results, and
discussion sections,
with sub-sections
written within those
parts.
I originally explained
the content of the
journals after this
paragraph, so I
switched it so that the
information about the
articles was
presented right after
the introductory
paragraph.
9. Economics-related
I explained why
subject-specific
jargon was used -- so
it could relate to the
more serious,
academic audience.
Without this
explanation, it would
leave the reader
wondering why the
jargon even matters.
I added, ...current
data from marijuana
sales in the illegal
market is used to
estimate future
numbers.
Getting into
affordances and
constraints is a great
idea -- weaving this
throughout your
whole paper could
enhance your
paper/argument
I used affordances
and constraints as
part of my overall
argument.
articles and
mainstream media
texts are tailored
towards a targeted
audience, each has
limitations and
constraints that a
reader not associated
with the specific
audience may find.
written in a unique
style in terms of
context of each piece
and the data
presentation, while
offering different
insight in a way that
is effective and
appeals to each
targeted audience.
Although each
source has unique and
different contexts that
take a stance on the
legalization of
Marijuana, the
process of creating
scholarly articles is
constrained because
of its structured
format, collection of
data, and subjectrelated jargon they
have to abide to-moves that limit
scholarly articles to a
small audience -while the writers of
mainstream media
texts can afford to
have an attractive
format, the
acceptance of
opinions, and easy
access to the piece
that allow the genre
to appeal to a larger,
general audience.