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TE 804
Student Assessment Analysis
I: The Prompt
This essay was assigned within the context of our discussion of the early republic
under the Constitution and Hamilton and Jeffersons stance on interpreting the
Constitution. We had also discussed the issue through current events, specifically
regarding gun laws.
The prompt provided to students:
Persuasive Essay: Strict vs. Loose interpretation
Your task is to create a persuasive essay based around the idea of
interpreting the Constitution. You are to choose which form of interpretation
is better for the United States under the Constitution: LOOSE or STRICT. In
your essay, you need to include a thesis statement that states your position.
This thesis, along with a counterclaim that acknowledges what an opponent
might say, should be included in the opening paragraph. Next, you are to
provide THREE OR MORE pieces of evidence (facts, statistics, examples, real
life experiences) that support your position. Each of these arguments must
be written as a paragraph (for a total of three). Lastly, you need to write a
strong closing paragraph that wraps up your argument, restates your thesis,
and leaves the reader understanding your position.
Your essay should be 5 paragraphs consisting of 3-5 sentences each.
One way to set it up might be like this:
Paragraph 1: Opening (includes thesis that introduces us to your
argument and acknowledges what an opponent might say)
Paragraphs 2-4: Three main points of evidence (from history OR
present day) that argue your position.
Paragraph 5: Closing (restates thesis and enforces argument)
Resources to use:
Composition book pages: 29, 51-54
Strict Construction versus Loose Construction reading packet
handout
Textbook pages: 194 (elastic clause), 238-242
Along with the given structure, students were also provided with a short example of
an essay argument, which was labeled and annotated to demonstrate the structure
even further. Its important to note that this structure was only highly suggested
and that if students felt strong in their writing abilities to go ahead and structure in
a manner that catered to their own intuition.
By providing a high amount of structure through which students were to make their
arguments, it was my intention that they would be free place more emphasis on
content of the essay.
main point of the assignment and get lost in detail and information unnecessary to
make their argument toward loose or strict construction of the Constitution. Kayla
makes no such mistake. Moving on, in the first body paragraph, Kayla argues that
we shouldnt interpret the freedom of speech clause in the Constitution strictly,
because some things, like death threats, shouldnt be said for the sake of the safety
and civility of society:
For examples, death and bomb threats are illegal which means this part of
the Constitution is already interpreted loosely in some ways, as it should be.
This was a common argument many others made, as well, but whats really
impressive in Kaylas example is that she distinguishes between how we should
interpret the Constitution and how we are interpreting it. This sort of nuanced
thinking demonstrates a wealth of understanding on Kaylas part for the assignment
at hand. Kayla further demonstrates her understanding in the second body
paragraph, where she argues for a loose interpretation of the second amendment,
citing, events such as Sandy Hook, or the Colorado movie massacre as evidence
in defense of it.
If one could make an argument for a weak point in Kaylas essay let be in her third
and final piece of evidence, where she argues from a historical perspective. After
describing differences between Hamilton and Jefferson and how they viewed the
future of America, she states, A loose interpretation lets the government be
creative and allows room for new ideas. I think she makes a great point with this
quote, but unfortunately doesnt provide the proper evidence to back up such a
statement. I believe it was her intention that her words about Jefferson and
Hamilton would provide that backing, but I found them far too vague. It may not be
a failing on her part more so than on the way in which I taught the content. More on
that later.
Kaylas conclusion, much like her opening, is a succinct recap of everything shes
written. In it, she restates her thesis and her position. In her final words she states:
The government needs new ways and ideas to keep us growing, and the new
material we need is not going to be found word for word in the Constitution.
The Constitution should be interpreted loosely.
A quote like this reinforces that Kayla not only understand the benefits for a loose
construction but also the ramifications held by strict one. A word for word
approach, shes argued masterfully, is detrimental to the U.S.
Kayla received 32 out of 32 possible points.
Brians Essay:
The Constitution is an American document that needs to be loosely
interpreted because of three reasons. The interpretation and people have
changed since 1790, when it was made. The creators (The Founding Fathers)
Zanes Essay:
The United States constitution should be interpreted very strictly. This
is the document that has kept us going and alive for over 200 years. In
todays world it is not being interpreted right and has our government
questioning our amendments and wanting to take all of our guns whether
they are legal or not. Also, looking back on the past when the constitution
was first written and mostly followed and not just some pieces of paper life
wasnt so bad. Although some may argue that a loose interpretation of the
constitution isnt bad they are clearly wrong un-American liberals.
In todays world our government has decided to follow the constitution
loosely and do whatever they feel pleases them whether it is making
unwritten amendments or just flat out shutting down. President Obama has
decided because of all the killings in the world taking guns away and adding
many more restrictions will stop violence, but what he doesnt realize is that
he is basically saying that the second amendment doesnt matter, who knows
what other amendments this could happen to. Also, by adding more
restrictions to guns will mean less people can get/own guns which essentially
is an American right to freedom, so by doing this not only on amendment is
violated but two are violated. The government also has made it clear that if
they dont want to do anything one day they can all just shutdown but still
get paid. This is wrong because we need our government to function,
because without government we are leaving our back door wide open to a
terrorist attack on America. This is a few great reasons we need a strict
constitution in the government so they cant just do what they want.
Using the constitution in the past was actually a really good way of
keeping everyone in check and had really strong government system. When
the constitution was first written almost everyone was for it and followed it.
One major standout was Alexander Hamilton, he wanted to make and open a
national bank which was not stated in the constitution but many were against
his idea feeling that he was breaking the rules. We also never had a problem
with foreign affairs because we had everything under control. Some major
problems in the past such as the Civil War and the Cuban Missile Crises all
were a part of poor constitutional interpreting. In the Civil War the South was
having their rights revoked and had to follow the rules of the North and could
not do anything about it. So they demanded their rights and did not receive
them so they seceded from the union and that was what started the war. The
Cuban Missile Crisis during the Cold War escalated because the government
became focused on getting a new president from the two parties when the
focus shouldve been the war. They easily couldve avoided this by just
keeping the president in office or just having a quick election. Our
government used to be strong one of the strongest and we never had very
many problems until recently when we started to not use the constitution.
We used to make jokes of other countries and now we are probably one of
the biggest. We need a government like in the past so a president doesnt
get too much power and the government will be strong once again.
While some may argue that a loose interpretation of the constitution is
better they are completely wrong. By siding for a loose interpretation you are
basically saying the rules dont matter the constitution can go burn its self
and all laws dont matter. Our constitution is our law book for government
which honestly is complete trash right now and could use a little guidance.
By having a strict constitution you have rules set and wont get broke.
Personally I believe anyone who breaks the constitutional rules should be
kicked out of American because they feel they are too good for the rules that
have kept this country sane. Another reason that strict is better is because
you cant get a single power of government too powerful and becoming a
dictatorship. For example if our next president becomes too powerful he can
declare himself a dictator and we would all have to follow his ideas and
opinions whether we like it or not and our country could fall apart just look at
the middle east, a main portion has been turned into a war zone from civil
wars because of dictating. In other words we need this set of rules to keep us
from becoming worse than we already are.
In conclusion the United States Constitution needs to be interpreted
strictly for plenty of reasons. Whether it be that it has kept us running for
over 200 years solid or that it can screw us all because we dont follow it. The
constitution also has the power to keep this beautiful country from getting
way off the deep end. If we continue to follow the constitution loosely our
world will be ended as we know it from us falling apart leading to the falling
apart of other countries that rely on us than it will cause a domino effect.
(sic, a million times, sic)
Here, Zane provides the beginnings of what could potentially be a strong argument
for strict interpretation. Unfortunately, instead of citing examples as to how more
guns could lead to more thorough protection, his argument falters: Also, by adding
more restrictions to guns will mean less people can get/own guns which essentially
is an American right to freedom A quote like this doesnt push his argument
forward. Rather than explaining why owning guns is a right to freedom, which could
potentially strengthen his claim for strict interpretation, he only claims that it is a
right to freedom, leaving him at a stand-still. There is again very little in terms of an
argument being made.
Further on, Zane takes a historical perspective, stating, Some major problems in
the past such as the Civil War and the Cuban Missile Crises all were a part of poor
constitutional interpreting. Regarding the Civil War, he has this to say:
In the Civil War the South was having their rights revoked and had to follow
the rules of the North and could not do anything about it. So they demanded
their rights and did not receive them so they seceded from the union and
that was what started the war.
I assume the rights to which he refers as being revoked are of the Constitutional
variety. If not, then his argument is irrelevant to the assignment. Assuming they are,
however, he would have needed to be more clear, substantiating his claim through
more detail and evidence. Unfortunately, his argument goes unsupported.
Lastly, there are moments in his essay when Zane contradicts himself. In his
counterclaim, he states:
By siding for a loose interpretation you are basically saying the rules dont
matter the constitution can go burn its self and all laws dont matter.
The sentiment is fairly obvious in this quote. But in the very next sentence he says:
Our constitution is our law book for government which honestly is complete
trash right now and could use a little guidance.
He fails to make clear why the government is complete trash and consequently
comes dangerously close to implying that its because of the Constitution. That
those are his own beliefs Im sure isnt true, but to the reader he risks making it
sound like that.
He commits a similar mistake in his conclusion, stating that strict interpretation has
kept us running for 200 years solid, but contradicting himself two sentences later:
If we continue to follow the constitution loosely our world will be ended as we know
it Have we been following the Constitution strictly or loosely? At this point in his
essay, Zane seems to have lost sight of the points he is trying to make.
Theres are plenty more examples that could be cited and examined in Zanes
assignment but they all seem to succumb to the same fate: an argument crafted
from a place of passion rather than reason.
Zane received 28 out of 32 possible points. (A misguided scoring on my part)