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DearMatt,

ThisquarterIimprovedasawriter.ThiscanbeattributedtotheconceptsIlearnedfrom
thecoursereader,theprocessofwritingandrevisingmyWPs,andalsoanewawarenessof
mywriting.
IthinktheconceptsofdraftingthatwerepresentedinShittyFirstDraftsandTwo
WaysofThinkingremovedsomeoftheintimidationfactorthatcomeswithstartingfromablank
page.Bynotworryingabouteverydetailandjustthrowingmyideasontopaper,Iwasableto
takeastepbackonceIdfinishedthatdraftandseealltheideasthatIhadtoworkwith,rather
thanforgettingsomeofmyideaswhiletryingtoperfectthewordingofmyfirstidea.
ReverseOutliningwasalsoanewandhelpfulconceptforme.Iwasaccustomedto
makingnormaloutlinesintheplanningofapaperbutbycreatingareverseoutlineIwasableto
lookbackandseewhatIhadactuallydone.Ithinkthishelpedmemakesuremybody
paragraphstiedbacktomythesisandalsoallowedmetocatchmomentsofredundancyinmy
paper.
Writingwithanawarenessofindexandstresstoimprovetheflowofmypaperwasalso
acompletelynewconceptforme.Idonotyetconsidermyselftobeparticularlygoodatwriting
thatway,anddontbelieveitcomesnaturallytome,butwithconcentratedeffort,Ifindthatitis
doable.IevenusedindexandstresstomakesenseofmythoughtsforapaperIwrotefor
anotherclass.Thatsaid,IthinktheconceptisreallyvaluableandIhopetogetbetteratitasI
continuetopractice.
Ithinkourmetacognitivereflectionsforcedmetoexaminemychoicesmorecritically
thanItypicallywouldhavehadtheynotbeenassigned.Reflectingonmypapersallowedmeto
thinkaboutwhatmademystrongpoints/favoritesectionseffective,andhowIcouldusethose
techniquestostrengthentheweakeraspectsofmywriting.

IchosetorevisemyfirsttwoWPs.IfiguredthatsinceIwrotethemearlieroninthe
quarterwhenIhadnotyetlearnedalltheconceptsofthecourse,theywouldhavethemost
roomforimprovement.InoticedthatinbothWP1andWP2,mythesisstatementsneedsome
seriouswork.MythesisforWP1wasmoreanobservationthananactualargument.Mythesis
forWP2essentiallydidntexistasIdidntseemtobefullyawareofwhatIwastryingtoargue
untilIgottomyconclusionparagraph.Thus,Idecidedthatformyportfolio,mymaingoalwould
betoendmyintroductionparagraphswithathesisstatementsthatareactuallydoubtable.I
thinkthatIachievedthatgoalandthatthedifferencebetweenmydraftsandthefinalversions
showshowmywritinghasimproved.
Asidefrommythesis,inrevisingmyWP1Isoughttomoreclearlydefinemygenres,
actuallyaddresstextualelementsofbeautyadvicearticles(ratherthanjusttheir
context/location),andmoreclearlydefinemytwogenres.Insteadofsometimessaying
magazinearticlesandothertimessayingwomensmagazinearticles,beautyarticlesetc.I
referredtothemstrictlyasbeautyadvicearticleswiththeassumptionthatmyreaderswould
understandthroughotherphrasesofmypaperthatthesearticlesappearinmagazinesandare
directedatwomen.Ithinkthismademyargumenteasiertofollow.AdditionallyIcraftedamuch
strongerargumentabouthowthepurpose,contextandaudienceshapetherhetoricalstrategies
ofTVcommercials(whereasmyfirstdraftsimplyalludedtotheirbroadnessoftheiraudience).I
alsocompletelyremovedmyanalysisofhoweachgenreusedlogosbecauseIdidntfeelit
stronglysupportedmyargument.Myinitialdraftwasstructuredaccordingtoethos/logos/pathos
butmyrevisedversionfocusesmorepurpose/context/audienceandhowthosefactorsshaped
whatrhetoricalstrategieswereused.
AfterrevisingmythesisforWP2,Itriedtobetterlinkmybodyparagraphsbacktothat
thesissothatmyargumentremainedstrongthroughoutthepaper.Itriedtobeverycognizantof

mypapersorganizationalflow.Iamstillverypleasedwithmyconclusionparagraphofthis
paperasIfeelitdemonstratesmyunderstandingofgivingmyreaderagift.UnfortunatelyIam
notamasterofthatskill,asmyconclusionforWP1couldstillusesomeimprovement.
Forbothofmyrevisions,thereducedpagecountandrequirementofquotesprovedto
beverychallengingforme.Ithinkwhatmadefindingquotessochallengingwasthatmostofthe
articlesinthecoursereaderhaveaninstructionalhowtofeelandthatdeterredmefrom
choosingalotofquotessometimesbecauseIdidn'tthinkIcouldmodifythegrammartomesh
withmywritingwithoutcompletelychangingthequote,andothertimesbecausesomearticles
(suchasDirks)werealmostentirelycomprisedofexamples.SinceIwasusingmyown
exampleofgenreetc,IfeltIcouldntusealotofherwriting(eventhoughherexamples
explainedtheconceptsverywell).
Inplanningmyrevisions,Ilookedbackatmysubmissiondrafts,mymetacognitive
reflections,yourcommentsontheWPrubrics,andthecommentsofmypeers.Outofallof
theseIfoundmymetacognitivereflectionandyourrubriccommentstobethetwomosthelpful
sourcesformyrevisions.AlthoughIthinkpeerreviewcanbehelpfulespecially3Questions
andExpertReview,Ifeelthatitcansometimesbehitormiss(somecommentswerehelpful,
butsometimesmyquestionswerentevenaddressed).
Iplantocontinuetowriteshittyfirstdraftsandturnthemintostrongargumentative
piecesofwritingbyusingreverseoutlinesandarestayingawareofthechoicesImakewhenI
write.Thankyouformakingmeabetterwriter.

Sincerely,
EmmaClaireBrock