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Professor De Piero
Writing 2
11 May, 16
Welcome to the Jungle
Lysergic acid diethylamide, better known as LSD, is a psychedelic drug that has had a
fascinating history and a remarkable effect on modern society. Since Albert Hofmann
synthesized LSD in 1938 and after the CIA did atrocious things with it in their program
MKULTRA, LSD has always been a subject of controversy. After it was banned in California in
1966, very little scientific research has been done about the effects and properties of the drug.
Consequently, most of the information about LSD is scientifically unsubstantiated. Two
examples of the few publications about LSD are the academic journals Lysergic Acid
case the article written by Smith fails to do so. This article not only omits the IMRAD formatting
but it also omits citations, a publication date and any use of relevant sources to support its
claims. Furthermore, the title Lysergic Acid Diethylamide: An Historical Perspective is
completely misleading. The words Historical Perspective give the audience the hint that the
article was written by a Historian or that it will mostly discuss dates, historical events and their
impact on society. In reality, the article was written by a doctor and it mostly talks about the
effects of LSD on people. For example, here are some of Smiths claims: When someone
ingests an average dose of LSD, nothing happens for the first 30 to 45 minutes... (2), or There
is a marked emotional liability and the changes in emotion are very frequent. (2), black and
white become equal, or good and bad frequently become equal (3). He claims all these things
without citing or explaining where they came from. Unfortunately, the poor choice of words for
the title and lack of citations affect the logos argument from reason (Carrol 52) - and ethos
the credibility of the rhetor (Carrol 54). This reduces the rhetorical impact of the article and adds
an element of ambiguity to the piece.
On the other hand, the article written by Carhart-Harris makes sure to follow academic
conventions which makes its rhetoric much stronger. Following the IMRAD convention, the
article curated the information in an organized and logical way strengthening the logos of the
article. The author of the article knows that the articles audience will consist of people who
want veridical and trustworthy information about LSD rather than information from unreliable
Comment [11]: ?
non-academic sources. This is why, in contrast with the article written by Smith, this article uses
the move Watch my back by making sure to cite other sources in order to strengthen its
credibility and watch out to not fall in ambiguity. For example, when Carhart-Harris talks about
the implications of suggestibility he argues, the issue of false memory is one of the most
controversial in mental health (Rosen et al 2004), and accusations of a therapists suggestion are
often made in such cases (790). By doing this, Harris makes sure the audience feels that
possible concerns about the truth of the articles claims are being addressed.
Although its been seen how both academic articles are very different in the way they
expose their information, they are similar in one way. Both authors know that not everyone in
their audience will have a familiarity with the subjects of suggestibility or LSD, and they make
sure to include a brief introduction on these topics in the first page of their articles. For example,
Harris explains that Lysergic acid diethylamide (LSD) is an ergotamine derivative with a high
affinity for and agonist properties at several different neurotransmitter receptors (785), and
that Suggestibility refers to an individuals susceptibility or responsiveness to suggestion
(785). Smith does the same in the first paragraphs of his article. He explains how [LSD] was
first synthetized in 1938 as an intermediate leading to the synthesis of ergonovine (1). Both
articles successfully use the move Ladies and Gentleman by making their audience feel
Even after seeing how both academic articles had something in common, one might
probably still be surprised by how different they are in their rhetoric. But the surprises about
LSD articles dont end there. One might assume that the online article, like many others around
the web, is similar to Smiths piece in terms of its rhetorical features. Well, lets see. At first
glance the online articles structure contains a title, and information is listed in chronological
order. Nothing too different from Smiths article. But, if the article keeps being read one can
observe that what makes this articles ethos much stronger than others around the web, and
Comment [20]: I'm spotting a recurring thread here -you've mentioned "ethos" a few times.
certainly stronger than Smiths, is its use of references. The author of the online article most
likely examined some scholarly articles, looked at their writing techniques, and decided to adopt
them in his article (Bunn 72). The author realized how rhetorically necessary those techniques
(references, chronological organization, etc.) are, especially if an article is found in an online
environment that is not inherently trustworthy, and decided to use them in order to offer a
trustworthy piece of writing.
In addition to making sure to include important scholarly conventions, the online article
also makes sure to use moves that are exclusive to the web. For example, at the end of every
block in the timeline, the author uses different colors for references, and web-links to other
resources like [Details] and [More Info]. The author uses these website resources to make the
reading more interactive, hence more appealing and easy for the reader to digest. For example,
the block that belongs to the date Jun 12, 1943 affirms, Susi Ramstein [Hofmanns assistant]
becomes the first woman in the world to take LSD. 4 [Details] [More Info] (Erowid). This
example shows how the information about the event remains concise and easy to read, while also
letting the reader decide to read more or easily access references about the event - something that
the user might prefer over reading a scholarly article where all the references cannot be easily
accessed.
After analyzing each of the articles conventions and moves, it is easier to see what each
of them accomplishes for their audience. For example, take Smiths article. It could be said that
although it was lacking important elements to achieve credibility, the article was written in a
very clear way. The use of easy language and lack of citations might have been a move the
author used in order to attract an audience who avoided dense scholarly writing. It makes sense if
its taken into account that the article was written in 1967 (one year after LSD was declared
illegal), when most people who were interested in LSD were not necessarily scholarly. In
contrast, the second academic article by Harris did a splendid job with its rhetoric. Again, it is
Comment [22]: This may just be a pet peeve of mine -though I'd think that a lot of people share my view -- but
I'd like you to really chop down your paragraphs.
You're tackling a ton in each one. Use your
paragraphs like bites during a meal -- one forkfull at a
time, otherwise, I might choke on it.
important to remember that this second article was published in 2014 when interest about LSD
started to significantly increase in the scientific community. All the information was strongly
supported by citations and graphs throughout the paper, and the information was conventionally
organized. Overall, Harris article accomplishes a sense of trustworthiness and accuracy
appealing to a more modern reader who might value the use of scholarly conventions. Finally,
thanks to its use of references the online article achieves persuasion despite not being an
academic source. It is important to remember that since LSD is an illegal substance, articles of
this kind are the most frequented and used to disperse or acquire knowledge about the drug. This
means that the audience this kind of articles have is much greater than academic ones. That
might be an explanation of how much effort is put on making most of these type of articles as
credible as they are .
Some other important things to think about are the things that each of these pieces can
achieve that the others cannot. Probably the most interesting article to think about in this context
is Smiths. Although Smiths article lacks citations and references, the fact that it is published in
an academic journal gives its readers a sense of reliability. Now, if the same article had been
found on the web, the same could not be said. It is very probable that most people would not take
its information seriously since most online articles about LSD tend to contain a good amount of
references and sources. After thinking about this, one can realize how much credibility a
scholarly article can achieve just by being labeled as academic. Likewise, the piece by Carhart-
Harris also gains some automatic credibility by being labeled as academic. But from all the
pieces analyzed here, this one is the one that with no doubt achieves the most credibility in its
audience thanks to its use of precise information, references and academic conventions. Finally,
lets take the online article and analyze its exclusive achievements. Probably its biggest
advantage over the academic articles is how easy it is to access. The amount of people who could
potentially read it is definitely something that the academic articles cannot compete with thanks
to the fact that it is available to anyone who has an internet connection.
Two different types of articles about LSD have been analyzed and it could be seen how
unpredictable they can be in terms of moves, conventions and rhetorical features. While one
would expect all scholarly articles to be accurate and strict in the use of citations or references,
Smiths article showed us this is not always the case. Likewise, it could be seen how an online
article can make good use of web resources and can adopt characteristics of academic articles,
making it more credible and appealing to its audience. Investigation and research about LSD has
not been greatly accepted in the scientific community until recently and that might be the
explanation of how much online sites and non-academic sources have worked in order to offer
the public trustworthy information about this promising and potent drug. For now, academic
research about LSD remains a jungle; mysterious, unknown and ready to show its beauty to
whoever decides to explore it. Lets hope that in the following years we can have more scholarly
articles like the one by Carhart-Harris and that online sites, like Erowid, keep up their good work
resembling the moves and conventions of academic writing.
WORKS CITED
Smith, David E. "Lysergic Acid Diethylamide: An Historical Perspective."
Journal of Psychoactive Drugs 1.1 (1967): 1-5. Web.
Carhart-Harris, R. L., M. Kaelen, M. G. Whalley, M. Bolstridge, A. Feilding,
and D. J. Nutt. "LSD Enhances Suggestibility in Healthy Volunteers."
Psychopharmacology 232.4 (2014): 785-94. Web.
Erowid. "LSD Timeline." Erowid. N.p., 10 Feb. 2015. Web. 7 May 2016.
Bunn, Mike. How to Read Like a Writer. Writing Spaces. Vol. 2. 2011. 30 Oct. 2015.
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Josue,
Comments and Grade
I can tell you put a lot of work and effort into this
paper -- thanks. :) Its got a bunch of potential, and I
hope my comments can guide you in a productive
direction.
values, etc.
Z
7.5/10