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Main Point

Rappers such as these are revolutionizing the

rap genre and sending positive messages
through their lyricsin their own styles. They
do this by telling stories, making their songs
relatable to their intended audiences, and still
having some of the negative conventions
that typical rap songs have.

A quick introduction to each song and

why they have positive messages.

Hopsins song message is one that is

still applicable to this day

Hopsins song has three main verses

that address three different problems
facing three different groups, that all
must change to not only help
themselves, but society as a whole
Upon analyzing the lyrics its clear that
Hopsin is trying to influence the
younger audience to change

J. Coles song is about the topic of

abortion and his song is told in an
argument style with women expecting a
child on one side and the man on the
other.
Lost Ones is that is meant to give
people who are expecting an
unexpected baby a way of thinking
about how the other person feels and
the importance of life.

Logic song is a fighting story about the

end of his addiction to cigarettes.

The rap genre still has many songs that

dont deliver positive messages, but

How It Supports my
Argument

Im demonstrating how
these songs have a
positive message
The message being
presented is important to
the younger generation
who has lots of problems
The lyrics prove that rap
can have a positive
influence on people

Hopsin is making his song

relatable by picking on
the very audience that is
listening to his songs
This song is told in a
story-like argument
fashion and also regards
a very relatable topic
J. Coles delivers a
positive message while
being able to connect
with not only the
intended audience, but
others too.
Logic presents and
inspiring song about the
end of his addiction, while
inspiring others to stop
smoking, all in his unique
way of making a song
personal.
Because of rappers such
as the one mentioned in

that is beginning to change

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Although all three songs were rap song,

they each presented their pints
differently.

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The rap genre is changing, while still

keeping some of the same conventions

this essay the rap genre

is changing to have more
positive3 messages.
Each message was
presented in a unique
way allowing for the
intended audience to be
able to relate more easily.
The rap genre is being
revolutionized.

Revisions
When making changes to my WP1, one of the biggest changes I made was to thesis.
I took of the part relating to rhyming scheme, and instead added how they made
their songs relatable to their intended audience. This was a major change because it
was something that you pointed out and I noticed that I had used it when analyzing
all of the three songs. Doing this reverse outlining really help me to identify the
points at which my essay was lacking or unclear. It also made me delete some
things that werent necessary, such as repeating sentences, while adding more to
sentences that needed to be followed up with more detail. It even helped me to
rework my thesis allowing for me to make a major connection between all of my
paragraphs.