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Rewrite the Lead
‘ad te rat blow. Then review the flowing axles of pering sartances, based onthe same infomation
Net ty yous usirg he information provided.
Yesrerday was really hot. twas te last day of schoo. All day long I thought of going tothe
town pool walked home from the bus stop, and my mother drove me tothe pool. We got
‘here in 10 minutes, but the pool was closed, Police tape surrounded the aces. An officer told
18 to go home—there was no swimming today.
‘Use action: Sweat ran down my back as approached the pool building. But when T saw detec
tives swarming around the poo, «chill went through my body,
‘ve question: Have you ever stumbled upon a crime scene?
{se an announcement I've had some days that I wish had never happened
‘ee bold statemeat: Jus yesterday mdr changed my snane
‘Use dilogu: “told you kids, the POOL i ott the plc lice barked
‘se pile ore: What do you ala poo! with lis water dein out oft
Use emotion: 1 spent every day of the summer bored and hota brick. Every aight, though, 1
woke up shaking from nightmares about the murder atthe rown pool.
‘Your tur, Rewrite the lead forthe following fist daft.
Yn spending the week with my grandmother Shelves ewo hours away. Mom dropped me off
and sid she'd come back to get me. I've spent fou really long days watching TV. Today
Grandma went to the sapecmarket and left me at home. I walked up tothe atic and saw the
cangest ching,
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