College Essay Feedback

Take five+ minutes to carefully respond to the essay you just read (feel free to use the back of this page is you need more room). TITLE OF ESSAY: ______________________________________________________________________________ 1. What did you learn about the author? What kind of person is s/he?

2. Please share your thoughts about the tone of the essay. For example, are there parts of the essay that come across arrogant, disingenuous, sappy, passionate, etc.? What parts and why (word choice, a particular story, or quote, etc)?

3. Does the essay focus too much on someone or something else? Please explain.

4. Is the topic of the essay a successful vehicle for learning about the author? How so? If you
feel the topic does not benefit the author, what parts or aspects of the essay should s/he keep?

5. Imagine that you are an admissions officer. What about this essay makes you want to
meet, learn more, or advocate on behalf of this student? Or did it have a somewhat opposite effect? If so, why?

6. Do you have any additional comments or suggestions (please write on back)?