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1. Aziz is He worked 2. Aziz was He works 3. After he became doctor, 4. a house for their own. 5. They so proud of Aziz. 6. He is also saved up some money 7. I and my family 8. I went for a vacation at Malaysia. 9. We were so interested in animal trick. 10.We were went to the Crocodile Show. 11.We were so tired and hungry and we had lunch. 12.We were so happy we can visited 13.We always helping each other. 14. if we doesnt understand the subject. 15.My family is a harmony family. 16.I really like my family. (OK) 17.We caring for each other 18. such as playing game, 19.She likes listening music, 2 Alim 2012

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Aziz is He works Aziz was He worked After he became a doctor, a house for themselves. They are so proud of Aziz. He also saved up some money My family and I. I went for a vacation in Malaysia. We were so interested in the animal trick./ animal tricks. We went to the Crocodile Show. We were so tired and hungry so we had lunch. We were so happy we can visit We are always helping each other. if we dont understand the subject. My family is a harmonious family. I really love my family. We care for each other such as playing games, She likes listening to music, (Mixed essays)

- Mixing tenses (Present with Past) - Mixing tenses (Past with Present) - Missing article (a) - Possessive pronoun - Missing auxiliary verb (are) - Unnecessary auxiliary verb (is) - Position of pronouns. - Preposition (at vs. in) - Missing article (the) - Unnecessary auxiliary verb (were) - Unsuitable conjunction (and vs but) - Modal verb (can) + Root verb (visit) - Missing auxiliary verb (are) - SVA : Plural (we) + (dont) - Noun (harmony) vs. Adjective (harmonious) - Choice of word. - Wrong verb form (-ing vs. root) - Plural - Missing preposition (to)

20.Sometimes he make me laugh.

Sometimes he makes me laugh.

- SVA : Singular (he) + (makes)

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21.We care each other 22.It was pulling the plane and spinned it 23.The plane was smashed in pieces. 24.Was the stearing wheel broken? 25.It is easy to doing the calculations 26.I love the mates subject 27.I donot really understand 28.I particularly love calculating subjective question 29.When I am calculate the questions 30.I have a good felling about 31.He watering his vegetables everyday. 32.At the afternoon, .. 33.He will sell them to the market. 34.She looked pale but still she was energy. 35.Why my face looks like this? 36.Why does my face looks like this? 37.Suddenly, she heared a shout from 38.The police already shoot her 2 Alim 2012

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We care for each other It was pulling the plane and spinning it The plane was smashed into pieces. Was the steering wheel broken? It is easy to do the calculations I love the Mathematics subject I do not really understand I particularly love calculating subjective questions When I am calculating the questions I have a good feeling about He waters his vegetables everyday. In the afternoon, .. He will sell them at the market. She looked pale but still she was energetic. Why does my face look like this? Why does my face look like this? Suddenly, she heard a shout from The police already shot her (Mixed essays)

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- Missing preposition (for) - Consistent verb form (-ing form) - Preposition (in vs. into) - Spelling - to infinitive (to + root verb) - Spelling - Spelling - Plural - Verb (am) + (-ing form) - Spelling - Simple Present Tense - Preposition of Time - Preposition of Place - Noun (energy) vs. Adjective (energetic) - Missing Auxiliary verb (does) - Aux. verb (does) + Root verb (look) - Spelling - Past tense

39.There are many strange item 40.Why everyone looked at her? 41... many items such as a voodoo doll. 42.Alice was a young girl that was 43.All of the class were screaming 44.Sudently, 45.If you think of me, I will exist 46.The doll so cute. 47.She tryed to escape 48.My father is a teacher, he is working at (OK) 49.He teaching the subject of 50.They both study at same school. 51.My sister age is 17 years old. 52.When we sick, she will take care of us. 53.She teaches at a pra-sekolah. 54.My little brother is a bad boy, 55.My father always makes we laugh. 56. to take care our earth 57. to save environment 58.My name is SHAHIDA BINTI ALSIRI. 59.Now she is taking the PMR examination. 60.I love my family for ever and ever. 2 Alim 2012

There are many strange items Why was everyone looking at her? .. many items such as a voodoo doll, a magic mirror (etc). Alice was a young girl who was All of the students in the class were screaming Suddenly, If you think of me, I will appear The doll was so cute. She tried to escape My father is a teacher, he works at He teaches the subject of They both study at the same school. My sisters age is 17 years old. When are we sick, she will take care of us. She teaches at a pre-school. My little brother is a naughty boy, My father always makes us laugh. to take care of our earth to save the environment My name is Shahida Binti Alsiri. This year she is taking the PMR examination. I love my family very much. (Mixed essays)

- Plural - Verb be (was) + -ing form (looking) - (many) + few examples - (that) things, (who) people - Missing words - Spelling - Word choice /vocabulary - Missing auxiliary verb (was) - Spelling - Simple Present Tense - Simple Present Tense - Missing article (the) - Possessive pronoun (sisters) - Missing auxiliary verb (are) - English translation - Word choice / Vocabulary - Pronoun (we vs. us) - Missing preposition (of) - Missing article (the) - Unnecessary capital letter - Unsuitable word - Unsuitable phrase

61. to my friends house to study with his. 62.The kidnapper was arrest. 63.When I walked to his house 64.He was kidnapping a girl 65.The girl suddenly sleeps. 66.I told he that it was because 67.Last friday, my school had a carnival 68.... many activities prepared at the carnival. Among the activities prepared at the carnival were 69.... many activities prepared at the carnival. Among the activities prepared there were 70.Then, the carnival was exciting because 71.There were exhibits, games, competitions 72.To lift up their spirit to result in a successful situation. 73.Everyone went for lunch at canteen. 74.On monday afternoon, 75.The boys began feel sleepy 76.Picking up some stone, they starter to 77. gathered to hear what had happened. 78.They reported the problem to the authorities. 79.Although, she felt happy for helping the 80.I was a blind boy, I cant see anything. 2 Alim 2012

to my friends house to study with him. The kidnapper was arrested. When I was walking to his house He was trying to kidnap a girl The girl suddenly fell asleep. I told him that it was because Last Friday, my school had a carnival ... many activities prepared at the carnival. Among the activities prepared there were ... many activities prepared at the carnival, for example The carnival was exciting because There were exhibitions, games, competitions To lift up their spirit to gain successful results. Everyone went for lunch at the canteen. On Monday afternoon, The boys began to feel / feeling sleepy Picking up some stones, they starter to gathered to listen to what had happened. They reported the incident to the authorities. However, she felt happy for helping the I was a blind boy, I couldnt see anything. (Mixed essays)

- Pronoun (his vs. him) - was + verb -ed form (arrested) - when + aux. verb (was) + -ing form (walking) - Addition of word - suddenly + [more suitable words] - Pronoun (he vs. him) - Capital letter - Repeated phrases (at the carnival there) - Joining sentences - Unsuitable linker (Then) - Word choice / Vocabulary - Word choice / Inaccurate meaning - Missing article (the) - Capital letter - to infinitive / Verb form - Plural (stones) - Word meaning / Vocabulary - Vocabulary - Unsuitable linker - Negative modal verb (cant vs. couldnt)

81.After a few minute, 82.One day, she bought me to the park. 83.They brought me a present for 84.In the park

After a few minutes, One day, she brought me to the park. They bought me a present for At the park

- Plural - Vocabulary - Vocabulary - Preposition of Place (in vs. at)

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