Name: Peem Boonvisuit 7B

Date: 19/03/2013

Rewriting Frankenstein
How can your environments impact who you are and the choices you make? Pick one of the following scenes from the play. Think about how the situation affected the Monster. Think about how if the scene unfolded differently, the Monster may have changed. Rewrite one of the following to show how they would have impacted the Monster and his choices in life if the situation had been different. 1. 2. 3. 4. When Frankenstein sees the monster for the first time and his reaction is to run away When the monster is in a town, where dogs and towns people are after him When Felix shoots the monster When the monster kills William

Your scene should have between 2-4 characters. 1 or 2 of these characters may be your own characters (not from the play). Your scene will have two parts: 1. What happens to the monster (the situation) 2. His choices as a result (the impact) Which scene will you rewrite? Scene 1 (When Frankenstein sees the monster for the first time and his reaction is to run away) What is the situation in the scene? What do others How does this affect the Monster? What impact does do to the Monster? it have on his life? What choices does he make as a In the situation Frankenstein created the monster result? and when he sees the monster he runs away. The This affects to the monster because then he would other people has just stood there and watch and be ugly and he would destroy the whole entire world. some people ran away from him. It impacts the monster because then he can be freedom and but when Frankenstein runs he might be sad and lonely. The choices that he made is that he walked around and looking at people and being sad that he was so ugly that many people hate him. How will you change the situation? How might things How will this affect the Monster? What impact will it happen differently during the scene? have on his life? What choices will he make as a Frankenstein and Clerval might work on changing result? cats to dogs. Suddenly he saw a dead person and This might affect the monster because if the monster wanted to make him back to alive. Then when is kind the people might like the monster more and Frankenstein and Clerval finish creating it after that greeted the monster better. This impacted his life there was an lightning and storm coming. because he wont be lonely and bored and now he Frankenstein and Clerval were so scared of the will be happy and joy all the time. The choices that storm and lightning. After that the lightning strikes he can do is help people do work and achieve their down on the dead person, everyone screams and goals, he can help Frankenstein do chores or be his suddenly he saw two hands reaching up. The two of servant etc. them began to be scared then Elizabeth came and saw the hands she quickly ran to hide with Clerval and the monster stood up. The dead person stands up. He quickly walked around the room while Frankenstein saw that he was strange and was like a monster Finally the monster saw the three of them hiding. Then the monster doesnt kill the three and asking them to be friends. The Elizabeth and Clerval

Name: Peem Boonvisuit 7B Date: 19/03/2013 wanted to be friends with them but Frankenstein hated the monster. Then while that the monster spited on Clerval by accidently and she was mad but the monster was tries to apologies but still she doesnt accept it. Then Clerval planned with Frankenstein about how to kill the monster then Clerval went to accept the apologies to Frankenstein and he was happy then she nodded back to Frankenstein and Frankenstein picked her gun at the waist and shoot the monster five times. The monster silently falls down and said for the last word to Frankenstein that he was the betrayal. Elizabeth was sad and she left the lab. Frankenstein blamed Clerval and she got sad and never do work for Frankenstein. Finally Frankenstein continued on his project. Rewrite the scene using your ideas from the purple boxes above. Your scene should: Include A Note On Staging refer to page 6 in the Frankenstein play o Explain the set design o Explain the costumes and props o Explain lighting, sound, and special effects Include a paragraph to explain your choices for your Note On Staging Include descriptions of the characters refer to page 8 in the Frankenstein play o List each character and give a short (2-3 sentences) description of his/her appearance and personality Include stage directions (in italics) to indicate how the characters move and how they speak In your scene, include dialogue that will move the plot along and show how the new situation unfolds and how it impacts the Monsters life

Criterion A: You compose a script that shows how a situation impacts the Monsters life using a lot of details (dialogue and stage directions).

Criterion B: You write in the form of a script, using the appropriate structures expected in a play script. Your scene builds appropriately.

Criterion C: Your write your characters to reflect their personalities and tone. Your script is free of grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors.

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You do not reach the standard described below. Your script reflects very limited imagination Your script does not use the Your script does not reflect the voice of and creativity. It does not show the organizational structures of a script. the characters. situation and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script is generally disorganized. Your script has very frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and spelling. Your script has no details (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects limited imagination and Your script sometimes uses the Your script sometimes reflects the creativity. It attempts to show the situation organizational structures of a script. voice of the characters. and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script is beginning to be organized Your script has frequent errors in Your script has insufficient details but lacks coherence. grammar, punctuation, and spelling. (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects some imagination and Your script usually uses the Your script often reflects the voice of creativity. It somewhat shows the situation organizational structures of a script. the characters. and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script is generally well-organized. Your script uses generally accurate

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Name: Peem Boonvisuit 7B

Your script has adequate details (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects imagination and creativity. It shows the situation and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script has substantial details (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects a lot of imagination and creativity. It clearly shows the situation and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script has illustrative details (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Include a title Describe each character Include a note on staging to explain how your staging choices (set design, costumes/props, effects) show the situation and its impact on the Monster Employ dialogue to show how the scene develops Include stage directions to show the action Use details to show the actions and emotions of the characters involved

Date: 19/03/2013
grammar, punctuation, and spelling. Your script consistently uses the organizational structures of a script. Your script is usually well-organized. The ideas build on each other. Your script uses the organizational structures of a script in a sophisticated manner. Your script is consistently wellorganized. The ideas build on each other in a sophisticated manner. Use the format of a script o Skip a line each time a new character speaks o Italicize the stage directions o Write dialogue by bolding character names Build the dialogue and action to first show what the situation is, then how the Monster is affected Your script often reflects the voice of the characters. Your script consistently uses a formal tone to explain. Your grammar, punctuation, and spelling are accurate. Your script masterfully reflects the voice of the characters. Your script shows a mastery of formal tone to explain. Your grammar, punctuation, and spelling are completely accurate. Edit for spelling, punctuation, and grammar Use first person when writing the dialogue Use the type of language that the character would use when writing the dialogue

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In order to succeed you need to:

Characters: Frankenstein - A young man, short hair, friends with Clerval, Has a lot of creative idea, very mean and wild. Clerval - A young girl, long hair, friends with Frankenstein, Always helps Frankenstein when needed, kind and helpful and brave Dead person- Sad, big, not wild and mean, no shirt and pants, has green furs, big eyes and mouth full of siliva. Elizabeth - Nice, young girl, friends with Clerval and Frankenstein, long hair Narrator Settings:

Comment [JH1]: Good description of the characters.

Frankenstein Science Lab Has a lot of cable and wires Very noisy and busy Not much rooms

Props: A belt with a gun for Clerval and Frankenstein A lot of wires for the science lab A bed Radio A whole at the top for lightning

Comment [JH2]: Good.

Name: Peem Boonvisuit 7B Date: 19/03/2013 Sound Effects: Smoke when the monster appears Lightning to strike the monster on the bed

Reason I chose to do this note on staging because it doesnt need a lot things and also it is very easy to organized the following things. I think it is very descriptive to be also to orgainise.

Frankenstein Rewrite
( When Frankenstein sees the monster and his reaction is to run away)
Act 1: The Monster comes Alive On the top of the mountain there was Frankensteins Science Lab. In the lab there is a bed, Frankensteins room, Ultimate super tool box in Frankensteins room, a shelf, a tool box in on a shelf and the floor is full of wires. The room was full of radio noises. Clerval and Frankenstein are working on their project on changing a dog to a cat. On Friday night they nearly accomplished their first ever project but something incredibly just happened. Frankenstein: Where are the tools? Clerval: They are in the box on the shelf. Frankenstein: Well then go get them! Clerval: (Angrily) Fine. Clerval walks to get the tool box but suddenly saw something outside. Clerval: Frankenstein, look outside! Frankenstein: Oh god it is just a dead person. Clerval: But can we make it alive? Frankenstein: No! Clerval: Please I beg you. Frankenstein: Fine. Clerval and Frankenstein walk out of the room and dragged the dead person inside the lab and put him on the bed. Frankenstein: OK, lets start but first get me the super ultimate tool in the box in my room

Comment [JH3]: Try not to use the word things so much! You need to be specific about what you are are referring to.

Comment [JH4]: Good, this helps the audience to know how Cleveral is expressing himself.

Name: Peem Boonvisuit 7B

Date: 19/03/2013

Narrator: Frankenstein and Clerval work for one week until they achieve their goal, to bring the dead person alive. The last day but something incredible happens. The sky becomes dark and wind is blowing hard. Frankenstein: Oh my god what is going on? Clerval: I dont know but. Suddenly there is a lightning strike at the dead person BOOM!!! Frankenstein: Clerval, are you alright. Clerval: I am OK but look at the dead person. Suddenly two hands reached up to the air, Frankenstein and Clerval are scared so they hide in a corner. Then the dead person steps out of the bed and looks around the lab. Frankenstein sees that he has no cloths and has furs so he thinks it is a monster. The dead person keeps on walking around the room. While he is walking Elizabeth came in. Elizabeth: Hello guys.. (Angrily) Who is he! ? How did he get here? Elizabeth screams and runs to hide with Clerval and Frankenstein in that corner. While the monster is wondering around the monster saw see the three of them and stares at them. Clerval: Please!!! Dont kill us Monster: Kill you oh come on Im not going to kill you I am a kind monster. Elizabeth: Really!!! Monster: Sure!!! The monster reaches his hands to Clerval, Elizabeth and Frankenstein and pulls them up. Frankenstein seems to hate the monster but Clerval and Elizabeth likes the monster and starts to be friends together. The monster walks to Frankenstein and asked Monster: Can I work for you? Frankenstein: No Monster: Can I be friends with you? Frankenstein: No Monster: So what do you want me to you?
Formatted: Font: Not Bold Comment [JH5]: How will we know that they start to be friends, you need to be more specific here, what is happening.

Name: Peem Boonvisuit 7B

Date: 19/03/2013

Frankenstein: Go away or die!!! Monster: Please! Frankenstein gets a gun and aims at the monster. The monster leaps out of the room miserably while Clerval and Elizabeth pull him back and disagree with Frankenstein. Clerval: (Shouts) Frankenstein what are you doing??? Elizabeth: Yeah whats wrong with you Frankenstein? Frankenstein: I just dont like the monster and why are you two so nice to him? Clerval: Because we want to be friends with him. The monster crawls down to Frankenstein legs and begs him with tears. Finally Frankenstein lets him lived here and be his servant .The monster was so happy and also Elizabeth and Clerval. Clerval: Thank you Frankenstein now you are a kind person. Frankenstein: I just want him to be our servant. Monster: Thank you sir. Narrator: The monster lives with the three of them as their servant for three days. The monster seems to like staying here but one day something not good happened. While the monster was playing with the Clerval and Elizabeth the monster accidentally spitted spat on Clervals arm and made her him mad. Clerval: Hey!!! Monster: What did I do? Clerval: You spat on me. Monster: No I didnt. Clerval: Yes you did, lier. Elizabeth: It was just an accident I think the monster doesnt did not mean to do it. Clerval: No I think it wasnt an accident. Clerval walks to Frankenstein and tells the story. They discuss quietly in the corner of the room. Frankenstein puts his gun behinds Clervals belt and walks to the monster. Frankenstein stands behind Clerval then he waits.
Comment [JH6]: This is good, it shows that two people are working with Frankenstein and question what he is thinking.

Comment [JH7]: Why would the monster be happy as someones servant?

Name: Peem Boonvisuit 7B

Date: 19/03/2013

Clerval: Get up monster. The monster stands up even Elizabeth also stands up. Clerval: I think it was an accident and sorry for shouting at you. I hope you feel better. Monster: Thank you and sorry for lying to you. As that minute the plan starts. The plan starts with Clerval dropping her his earing on the floor. Clerval: Oops. (Kindly)Can you please pick my earing up for me? As the monster bends down to get the earing. Clerval flicks his fingers and Frankenstein snatches the gun from his belt, Clerval bends down and Frankenstein shoots the monster in the heart five times. The monster screams. Monster: AHHHH!!! The monster slides down but while he slides down he said his last sentence to Frankenstein Monster: (Angrily) you are a BETRAYER!!! The monster falls down and dies. Elizabeth is so sad that she slapped Frankenstein on the face. Elizabeth: (Angrily) You two are so mean!!! Elizabeth leaves dragging the monster out of the lab and replies she will not be coming back to this lab. Frankenstein turns and yells at Clerval. Frankenstein: (Angrily) This is because of YOU!!! If you wouldnt be friends with HIM!!! Clerval: (Sadly) Im so sorry. Clerval walked into his room sadly and locked the door. Frankenstein was so happy now that nobody is interrupting him. Finally Frankenstein went to continue his project on changing dogs to a cat. A person comes by the stage, 12 years later Frankenstein accomplished his 12th time on changing dogs to cats. He lived happily ever after in his science lab on top of the mountain with Clerval but not helping him now.

Comment [JH8]: Ok but what is the impact on the monster? He dies, but what does that mean the impacts on his life are?

THE END

Name: Peem Boonvisuit 7B

Date: 19/03/2013