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Task 1
Make a list of features which should e a!oided to maintain appropriate academic writing style. Contractions (Youll, dont werent etc.)
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Identify the problems with style in the following sentences and then rewrite them. . I sub!ected the mean score for the two trials to multi"ariate analysis.
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&. 'cientists need to come up with "alid reasons for such results.
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Insessional Academic Writing Course Faculty of Life Sciences Aspects of Academic Style
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Task &*( is to re+,rite the te#t to make it more appropriate academic ,riting style" Aspects of Academic Style
Task -$ Achie!ing clarity :ook at the two descriptions of an e%periment. ;oth were submitted to ,).1 scientists from industry and the academic world. ;ased on the e"idence of the te%t alone, -)< of the scientists sur"eyed concluded that one of the writers had a better organised mind and was more competent as a researcher than the other. 'i%ty nine percent also found his te%t more interesting and stimulating. 8hich one is it=
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In the first e%periment of the series using mice it was disco"ered that total remo"al of the adrenal glands effects reduction of aggressi"eness and that aggressi"eness in adrenalectomi>ed mice is re storable to the le"el of intact mice by treatment with corticosterone. $hese results point to the indispensability of the adrenals for the full e%pression of aggression. ?e"ertheless, since adrenalectomy is followed by an increase in the release of adrenocorticotrophic hormone (*C$+), and since *C$+ has been reported (;rain, 4-#) to decrease the aggressi"eness of intact mice, it is possible that the effects of adrenalectomy on aggressi"eness are a function of the concurrent increased le"els of *C$+. +owe"er, high le"els of *C$+, in addition to causing increases in glucocorticoids (which possibly accounts for the depression of aggression in intact mice by *C$+), also result in decreased androgen le"els. In "iew of the fact that animals with low androgen le"els are characterised by decreased aggressi"eness the possibility e%ists that adrenalectomy, rather than affecting aggression directly, has the effect of reducing aggressi"eness by producing an *C$+9 mediated condition of decreased androgen le"els. $e%t ; $he first e%periment in our series with mice showed that total remo"al of the adrenal glands reduces aggressi"eness. Moreo"er, when treated with corticosterone, mice that had their adrenals taken out became as aggressi"e as intact animals again. $hese findings suggest that the adrenals are necessary for animals to show full aggressi"eness. ?e"ertheless remo"al of the adrenals raises the le"els of adrenocorticotrophic hormone (*C$+), and ;rain# found that *C$+ lowers the aggressi"eness of intact mice. $hus the reduction of aggressi"eness after this operation might be due to the higher le"els of *C$+ which accompany it. +owe"er, high le"els of *C$+ ha"e two effects. 3irst, the le"els of glucocorticoids rise, which 3ebruary #114 5age & of (
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