Working Draft 2 Dear Dr. Hartman, I loved to write this assignment.

I wrote about an activity that I did on a school trip. First, Dr. Hartman, I find it hard to evaluate myself. I feel that something good for me may be normal for someone else. I rated myself proficient in each category. I improved since the first draft. I used the commentaries of my classmates in the reading activities to help me improve it. At first, my draft was more a brainstorming, meaning that I wrote a lot of events but I did not really describe it. For the rhetorical knowledge, I used all senses and figurative language to describe some ideas. For critical thinking, I do not think that my draft is exemplary but I used different punctuations to vary the tone of my draft. For the knowledge of conventions, I know that my wording was not exemplary but I feel that it was good. I tried to make it easy and fluid to read. This working draft was a little harder for me to do because I had to look for words that I do not know at first. For example, when we did the activity in which we had to find the verbs and adjective in a short paragraph, I was able to identify them but I did not know the meaning of every word. Everything is going well in this course. I like it when we have to read our text in small groups because it helps me to improve my writings. I also like when we do different activities in class that are not usual, this makes the class way more enjoyable. Thank you, Vince

Criteria PROCESS As a working draft, piece shows:

RHETORICAL KNOWLEDGE As a working draft, piece shows:

Exemplary Process work is present and provides robust evidence that student has participated; Clear evidence of strong idea development; Robust evidence of revision (changes in at least 2 drafts) is clearly present Writer has fulfilled the assignment beyond expectations; Exceptionally clear what topic/subject is being described; Excellent attention to audience by appealing to senses, using appropriate figurative language, etc.

Proficient Process work is present and evidence of participation is clear; Evidence of idea development is present; Evidence of effective revision is clearly present in at least 2 drafts

Developing Some evidence of process work; Attempts at idea development, but ideas are lacking in some way; Little evidence of revision is present (ex. Only 1 draft submitted, no daybook or other process work, etc.) Writer has fulfilled the assignment; Purpose is hard to decipher or not yet clear; Little evidence of attention to audience due to vague description, little to no sensory details or figurative language, etc.

Lacking Participation in process work, development of ideas, and/or evidence of revision is incomplete or insufficient

Writer has clearly fulfilled the assignment; Clear purpose; Good attention to audience to audience by appealing to senses, using figurative language, etc.

This aspect of the piece is incomplete/ insufficient. Work shows little to no evidence of rhetorical knowledge

CRITICAL THINKING AND WRITING GROWTH As a working draft, piece shows:

KNOWLEDGE OF CONVENTIONS As a working draft, piece shows:

Exceptional use of tone and voice; Robust attempts to be appealing and interesting in describing subject/topic; Writer clearly is taking risks by trying strategies discussed; Reflective letter is included and clearly addresses these aspects of piece Exceptional and adept wording and phrasing; Little to no issues in readability; Writer displays clear control over mechanics, grammar, and usage

Clear attempts to use tone and voice; Clear attempts to be appealing and interesting in describing subject/topic; Writer is taking some risks; Reflective letter is included and sufficiently addresses these aspects of piece Good wording and phrasing; Little to no issues in readability; Writer displays control over mechanics, grammar, and usage

Writer is struggling to use/understand tone and voice, to create interesting writing, and/or to take risks; and/or reflective letter is missing or does not clearly addresses these aspects of piece

Write made little to no attempts to present critical thinking or writing growth; and/or no reflective letter included

Some or repeated issues with awkward or ineffective wording/phrasing; Writer displays lack of control over mechanics, grammar, and usage, causing issues in readability

Glaring issues/errors in grammar, capitalization, punctuation, spelling, and other conventions; Piece is difficult to read; Little to no attention has been given to conventions of writing