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Jane H. Buckingham 2014 jhbuckingham@yahoo.ca https://twitter.

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THE CHALLENGE EVOLUTION OF A TRANSLATION
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Jane H. Buckingham 2014 jhbuckingham@yahoo.ca https://twitter.com/translator_frog

Preface
The characters are real an the e&ent recor e here is factual. The compiler has been gi&en e'plicit consent by each of the participants to epict( using suitable pseu onyms( their creations an their acti&ities. The contents or part or parts of the contents of this ocument may not be copie ( isseminate ( or istribute without ue cre it to the author or authors in&ol&e . #ane $ %uckingham "ompiler )ctober *+,-

Jane H. Buckingham 2014 jhbuckingham@yahoo.ca https://twitter.com/translator_frog

CHARACTERS
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Jane H. Buckingham 2014 jhbuckingham@yahoo.ca https://twitter.com/translator_frog

SETTING
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TIME
The present.

SYNOPSIS
A group of former classmates get together iscussing poetry an one of them offers up the classic poem Trees 2,5,64 by #oyce 7ilmer 2,889-,5,84 as inspiration an a challenge to the rest to come up with poems about one of nature:s gift to mankin . )ne classmate imme iately picks up the gauntlet an presents a "hinese translation. The subse;uent burst of fer&ent energy results in a a33ling isplay of creati&e talents an constructi&e criti;ues.

Jane H. Buckingham 2014 jhbuckingham@yahoo.ca https://twitter.com/translator_frog

As the curtain rises, the old friends are hovering together having a discussion. /)01 7nowing how much time you all ha&e to be creati&e an scholarly( < thought the following poem from #oyce 7ilmer woul inspire you all in one way or another. After all( in my humble opinion( what a way to pay tribute to his insightful poem while celebrating our school=s upcoming centennial by coming up with one or more of your poems about one of nature:s remarkable-but-oftentaken-for-grante gifts to mankin . Trees by #oyce 7ilmer I think that I shall never see A poem lovely as a tree. A tree whose hungry mouth is prest Against the earth's sweet flowing breast; A tree that looks at God all day, And lifts her leafy arms to pray; A tree that may in Summer wear A nest of robins in her hair; Upon whose bosom snow has lain; ho intimately lives with rain. !oems are made by fools like me, "ut only God #an make a tree. Trees is a &ery lo&e poem( we learne it as a lo&ely song( < still remember the tune. < woul n=t are to write anything comparable. < coul n=t e&en if < try. %ut( < o want to o a translation. < ha&en=t looke up translate &ersion on the web so as not to be biase . $ere=s my &ersion:
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Jane H. Buckingham 2014 jhbuckingham@yahoo.ca https://twitter.com/translator_frog

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Jane H. Buckingham 2014 jhbuckingham@yahoo.ca https://twitter.com/translator_frog

Such a lot for me to chew an igest. The other ay < listene to the song My Way an it ga&e me some insights. $ere=s a part of it: And now, the end is here And so I fa#e the final #urtain 'y friend, I'll say it #lear I'll state my #ase, of whi#h I'm #ertain I've lived a life that's full I traveled ea#h and ev'ry highway And more, mu#h more than this, I did it my way . /or most of us( the en is an unknown istance from here an sooner or later we ha&e to face the final curtain. #ust as sai ( C0e=re all mi le age( {|} , ~( -e6( lea&e something for the ki s to sa&our.D < o think you ha&e a point there. %ut( < ha&e to stress again that what we write aren=t the like that of . 0e only call them ( meaning that we on=t stick to the format( the . 0e just o it our way. < write just as a pastime an really -( or ,,- or whate&er other combinations of these. <f you think that our socalle poems won=t pollute the web( < am most happy to accept your offer.
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To be continued

Jane H. Buckingham 2014 jhbuckingham@yahoo.ca https://twitter.com/translator_frog