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Revising ContentAnalysis: Questions
Introduction

1. Does your hook spark the interest of the reader?

2. Does your intro transition gracefully into your thesis statement?

3. Does your introduction contain a thesis statement?
Thesis Statement Checklist
4. Is the thesis statement expressed as just one sentence?
5. Does the thesis statement appear at the end of the introduction?
6. Does the thesis statement identify the subject of the essay?
7. Does the thesis statement present the major ideas developed in the body paragraphs?
8. Does the thesis statement clarify how all of the main ideas are logically related?
Organization of Body Paragraphs:
9. Is each body paragraph at least half of a page long (double spaced) and at least twice as
long as the introduction or conclusion?
10. Could a different order to the body paragraphs strengthen the essay?
11. Could a different order to the ideas and supporting material within a body paragraph
strengthen the essay?
12. Could a body paragraph be better focused on just one major point?
13. Does each body paragraph (except the last) end with a transitional sentence that takes
readers smoothly and logically to the next paragraph?
14. Do you use transitional words and phrases throughout the essay to take readers from one
idea and one sentence to the next?
Support and Development of Ideas
15. Could certain ideas in your essay be changed or expressed in different ways to strengthen
your essay?
16. Could you present and develop a new idea about your subject that you did not present in
the earlier draft?
17. Could you add supporting evidence to a body paragraph?
18. Could you delete any supporting evidence from a paragraph because the evidence does
not clearly or effectively support the main idea of the paragraph?
19. Could the supporting evidence in a body paragraph be more effective if that evidence
were presented in a different order?
20. Could you shorten any quotations, deleting parts of a quotation that are not clearly
relevant to the main idea that you are developing?
21. Could you more effectively explain the meaning and relevance of some of the supporting
evidence that you present?



Revising uiammaiNechanics: Questions
Style
22. Are there any words that can be replaced with more effective synonyms?
23. Do you use concrete and specific words and avoid abstract, vague, and general diction?
24. Do you use a formal writing voice in your essay, avoiding such things as the first person
("I," "me," etc), contractions, and informal diction?
25. Do you use a variety of words in your essay?
26. Do you use a variety of sentences in terms of length?
27. Do you use a variety of simple, compound, and complex sentences?
28. Do you integrate all quotations into your own sentences effectively?
Mechanics
29. Is your essay formatted correctly? (MLA format)
30. Do you use the same font in your title as you do for the rest of your paper?
31. Have you proofread for spelling and grammar?
32. Have you checked for mistakes involving commonly confused words?