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25/07/2012

IELTS Writing Task 2: Argument Essay with Sample Answer


Task 2 Question
It is sometimes argued that too many students go to university, while others claim that a university education should be a
universal right.
Discuss both sides of the argument and give your own opinion.
Model Answer
In some advanced countries, it is not unusual for more than 50% of young adults to attend college or university. Critics, however, claim that
many university courses are worthless and young people would be better off gaining skills in the workplace. In this essay, I will examine
both sides of this argument and try to reach a conclusion.
There are several reasons why university has become a popular choice for young people. First, growing prosperity in many parts of the
world has increased the number of families with money to invest in their childrens future. At the same time, falling birthrates mean that
one- or two-child families have become common, increasing the level of investment in each child. It is hardly surprising, therefore, that
young people are willing to let their families support them until the age of 21 or 22. Furthermore, millions of new jobs have been created in
knowledge industries, and these jobs are typically open only to university graduates.
However, it often appears that graduates end up in occupations unrelated to their university studies. It is not uncommon for an English
literature major to end up working in sales, or an engineering graduate to retrain as a teacher, for example. Some critics have suggested
that young people are just delaying their entry into the workplace, rather than developing professional skills. A more serious problem is that
the high cost of a university education will mean that many families are reluctant to have more than one child, exacerbating the falling
birthrates in certain countries.
In conclusion, while it can be argued that too much emphasis is placed on a university education, my own opinion is that the university
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In conclusion, while it can be argued that too much emphasis is placed on a university education, my own opinion is that the university
years are a crucial time for personal development. If people enter the workplace aged 18, their future options may be severely restricted.
Attending university allows them time to learn more about themselves and make a more appropriate choice of career.
(320 words. IELTS 9.0)
Why does this Task 2 answer get an IELTS Band 9 score?
Task response: The model answer fully answers the question by stating several arguments both for and against the expansion of higher
education. The candidates position is clearly expressed in the conclusion. The style is appropriate to academic writing and the answer is
at least 250 words in length.
Coherence and cohesion: The model answer has an introduction and conclusion. Each body paragraph deals with a different side of the
argument and begins with a clear topic sentence. Arguments are developed with logical connectives such as therefore and furthermore.
Lexical resource: There is a good range of vocabulary suited to an argument essay, including reporting verbs like claim and suggest,
and hedging verbs like can and appear. There is native-like collocation throughout, including growing prosperity, enter the workplace
and severely restricted.
Grammatical range and accuracy: The model answer uses a wide range of grammatical devices appropriate to academic writing.
These include conditionals (If), participle clauses (, increasing the), concessive clauses (while it can) and passive constructions
(it can be argued that). There are no grammatical errors.
The argument essay is just one of the types of essay in IELTS. Check out more IELTS Writing Task 2
answers (http://ielts-academic.com/category/ielts-writing/task-2/sample-answers-task-2/).
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25/07/2012 - 7:20 PM
Anonymous
I am really thankful of you for sending sample writing answer,It is marvelous and definitely its really helpful to me
28/11/2012 - 6:52 PM
BAbak
Thank u very much fr all IELTS materials hyou put here,
Best wishes
16/03/2013 - 5:20 AM
Farjana bari
i have a one question..

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16/03/2013 - 5:31 AM
Farjana bari
weiting task 2 (The Ameirican film industry has too much influence on the film industry around the world. Goverments have a duty to invest
money in their own film industries in order to protect and develop their culture.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement
?) Please give this solution. my requerment is 6.5
02/04/2013 - 8:11 AM
Anonymous
the first body paragraph explained why university has become a popular choice for young people; but didnt give reasons why a university
education should be a universal right. That is not logical.
15/06/2013 - 7:50 PM
Anonymous
I have same confusion : what is the logic? Does ielts writing doesnt care about it ?
01/07/2013 - 1:42 PM
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Over recent years more and more students are enrolling to university schools. This may be due to the fact that university education is
essential for better job prospects. This has lead people thinking that there are already too many students enrolled in university, however,
others argue that this should be a right for all students.
Some critics think that the increasing number of students going to university may have negative effects to both the school and the learners.
There will be a significant increase in the number of pupils in class which may not provide a suitable environment for learning. Furthermore,
some of the students might be left behind in the teaching process as the teaching staff will have a hard time in catering all of the students
concern. Another, schools may resort to hiring incompetent staffs in an effort to reduce the teacher to student ratio. This will significantly
decrease the universitys credibility in teaching.
However, others feel that this should not be the case and that the right to university education should be the priority. They feel that every
student has the right to secure a better job in the future for them to achieve a reasonable standard of living. Another, limiting the number of
students going to university may seem unjust and immoral for some. Those who are not entitled with the education are restricted to pursue
their careers and this could have a detrimental effect to the student as a whole.
In conclusion, both perspectives have its own reason as to why a certain view should be the case. In my opinion, I agree that university
education should be a universal right; however, university schools should impose stricter educational standards. This will assure that
deserving students are entitled with the education and at the same time, maintain the number of students in a sustainable figure and the
credibility of the teaching staff in the university.(300words)
18/08/2013 - 9:08 PM
shell
I think your writing is better than the sample. CLEAR LOGIC!
19/09/2013 - 4:19 PM
prodeep
i also think similar to shells.

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24/10/2013 - 12:01 PM
June
Yes, in terms of task fulfilment I would say the sample is not a 9.
05/01/2014 - 12:21 PM
tung
i have one question. This is an argumentative essay . we only need to focus on protect our ideas and object completely to opponents
ideas .In this essay the author expresses the two edged side of the problem.In additon, this essay structure seems be ambigous. Help me
22/02/2014 - 3:58 AM
Anonymous
good grammatical structures used and a good style
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