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by Oliver Bartrum
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Instructor
A superb essay f rom start to f inish. You should
be extremely pleased with this - I know I am.
/100
Very good.
(5) REFERENCING
Bibliog not quite right.
(6) ANY GENERAL GUIDANCE
You've set a high standard here and we want you
to keep aiming high.
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Comment 1
An excellent intro.
Comment 2
delete
Comment 3
OK, this just about works.
Comment 4
Good. (Also politicians, interest groups, philosophers, and commentators on politics, have
identif ied corruption as a problem since Greek times. But your point is still a good one.)
Comment 5
Yes
PAGE 2
Comment 6
I don't f ully agree with your argument in this para and the previous one, but it's a clever
criticism well made - great!
Comment 7
Good.
PAGE 3
Comment 8
Yes.
Comment 9
You haven't shown this to be the case!
Comment 10
She probably can't do so because the numbers arguably just don't stand up to the weight
she wants to place on them.
Comment 11
Good!
Comment 12
Alphabetical, volume/page numbers f or journal articles, italics, etc. - quite a bit to improve in
your bibliog.