Peer Review: Reflective Essay draft

Authors name: ____Ugochukwu Okechukwu_______________________

Reviewers name: Brandon Morris
Author: Provide the following information about your essay:
1. Write your thesis statement/main idea below (if it is still a work in progress, say so)
My main idea is how technical communication and writing has improved my aspect of writing in all
forms, which may include in my form of communication and thinking.
2. Write out one or two questions about your draft you would like your reviewer to answer.
Am I on the right track?
What am I missing?
Reviewer: Read the writers entire draft once. As you reread the draft, respond to the following:
1. Introductory paragraph(s): Write down the sentence or sentences that contain this reflection
papers main idea (according to you). Does the author focus on an overarching theme/metaphor/quote
symbol/etc.? Suggest how the thesis statement/main idea could be strengthened, clarified, or otherwise
improved. Does the author state which evidence will be examined in the rest of the essay? Suggest
how the author could improve this part of the essay.
I started the semester strong and ready, but I also felt that I needed to improve in all aspects.
It seems he focuses on improving himself. Yes, he writes about revising his papers and how his writing
compares to previous writing

2. Supporting paragraphs: Check to make sure the content of the paper supports the thesis and that
additional evidence or content is not needed to support it. Indicate one paragraph in which the writers
evidence is strong, and state the reasons why you think so. Then find one paragraph that needs more
evidence. Drawing from your own experiences or understanding of the type of assignment the author is
discussing, suggest evidence that might work to better illustrate or develop the main idea or subclaims.
He states that his understanding of format at the beginning of the class was lacking but has gained
knowledge of proper formatting.

3. Organization: Number the paragraphs in the authors paper. Then, use the space below to describe
the purpose or main idea of each paragraph. Check to make sure the paper follows a consistent
organizational pattern and is effectively organized with clear paragraphs (focused around one subclaim) and smooth transitional/topic sentences. When you finish, suggest where the writer might
improve the organization of the paper through the use of transitional sentences, by focusing on one
topic in each paragraph, by restructuring the order of paragraphs, etc.
There is proper flow, but some paragraphs could be broken up and detailed more.

4. List the 2 most important things the author should focus on during revision.
-Increasing the length to meet the professors requested length
-More detail on certain subjects

5. Respond to the authors questions in number 2.

Looks fine but could use more detail. Maybe dive into the process work of certain assignments.

Author: When your essay is returned, read the comments by your peer reviewer and do the following:
1. Compare your description of the thesis statement with your readers. Consider your readers
comments and revise your thesis statement if necessary.
Revised
2. What additional evidence from the research youve read, from your experiences, from your
observations, etc. would strengthen the support for your thesis?
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3. Make a revision plan. List, in order of importance, the 3 most important things that you need to do
as you revise your essay.

Proper flow of paragraph

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Process work