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More and more families have computers in their homes, and children spend a great deal of their
free time using their home computers. Discuss the advantage and disadvantages of this situation
and give your own opinion.
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Nowadays, a new generation have a deep relation with his computers. That is not only because of
using the computers for long time in school of for study, but, because they also spend most of their
free time with their best friend "Mr. Computer". This essay will discuss some prons and cons for
using computer by children for long time. In fact, I believe that this habit has more drwabacks than
benifites.
There is no dout that getting famelier with computer has some advantages. Some people think that,
using computer is one of modern life's need. To illustrate that, we all know that most of new books
has an online page contains additional excersis and form for student to exchange their experience
with that book.
However, some recentely studies had showen that there are a lot of disadvantages for using
computer by children for long time. Fist of that advantages, the side effect on health. For example,
most of fight games has a dangerous side effect on brain. In addition to that, some children lose the
ability to build a good communication with his society. for inectanse, an active boy on facebook migh
be unable to have a simple chat with his classmeat.
In fact, many drawbacks might effect the children if they have really better relation with their
computers than their environment. The most dengarous one is the losing the losing of
communication skills.
In conclusion, although we should encourge our kids to be familier with computers because it
considered as one of life's need. But in same time, we should pay a serious attention to their relation
with computers. Simply, we want our children to participate on the life devlopment not only losing
their time in entertainment. Finally, as I explained, I beleive that using computer by children for long
time has more drawbacks that benifits.
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All parts of the task are covered but some are
more fully covered than others, there is some
repetition and some ideas are not clearly
developed / explained.
There is an overall progression but there is
some faulty cohesion within or between
sentences and paragraphing (e.g. body 3) is not
always logical.
Noticeable errors in spelling bring it down to a
5
Grammatical errors are too frequent to get a 6.
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6
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5