Read the selection and choose the best the best answer to each question.

Then
fill in the answer on your answer document.
Jose wrote the following story in response to a class assignment. Before he turns it in, he would
like you to read it and look for ways he should revise it. When you finish reading, answer the
questions that follow.

Library Mouse
(1) Sam were a library mouse. (2) He lived in a little hole in the wall behind the
childrens reference books. (3) Sam loved to read, and he loved to write, too. (4)
Everyone loved his little books. (5) But Sam was very shy, and no one at the
library had ever meet him. (6) Once a week, The children at the library met for
Writers And Illustrators Club. (7) For our next project said Mrs. Forrester, the
librarian, I would like all of the boys and girls to work with a partner. (8) One of
you will be the author, and the other will be the illustrator. (9) You will find out
how teamwork can make a great book! (10) At the end of the meeting, their was
one child left standing by himself. (11) Dont worry, Tom, said Mrs. Forrester.
(12) Id be happy to work with you! (13) When night came, Sam the library
mouse went to do some research for a story he was planing to write. (14) All
night long, he studied, jotting down things in his notebook. (15) But as the sun
rose, his eyelids grew heavy and he fall asleep.

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Squeak! (16) Sam awoke with a start as children filed into the room. (17) In his
hurry to escape, he left his little notebook behind! (18) Tom discovered it on the
librarians desk. (19) Carefully, he opened the cover and turned the pages? (20)
Then he went to tug at Mrs. Forresters sleeve. (21) Whats this? said the
librarian, flipping threw the notebook. (22) From the titles of the stories in here,
I would guess this belongs to Sam, our mystery author. (23) Hes written so many
books, and yet weve never had the pleasure of meeting him! (24) Lets put it
back on your desk, said Tom, so Sam will find it?

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1. What is the BEST way to revise sentence 7?

A For our next project said Mrs. Forrester, the librarian, I would like
all of the boys and girls to work with a partner.
B For our next project. Said Mrs. Forrester, the librarian, I would like
all of the boys and girls to work with a partner.
C For our next project, said Mrs. Forrester, the librarian, I would like
all of the. Boys and girls to work with a partner.
D For our next project, said Mrs. Forrester, the librarian, I would like
all of the boys and girls to work with a partner.

2. Jose wants to add a closing sentence to his paper. Which sentence

could BEST follow sentence 24 and help bring his paper to close?
A Tom tore a piece of cheese from the snack he had brought, and he
left it by the opening.
B That night, Sam climbed onto the librarians desk to look for his
notebook.
C He replaced it with a peanut butter cracker.
D Sam grinned.

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3. What change, if any, should be made in sentence 13?

A Change planing to planning
B Change do to did
C Change write to wrote
D No change should be made in sentence 13.

4. What change, if any, should be made in sentence 1?

A Change a to an
B Change were to was
C Change mouse to mice
D Sentence 1 should not be changed.

5. How should sentence 21 be changed?

A Change whats to whats
B Change threw to through
C Change flipping to flip
D Sentence 21 does not need to be changed.

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6. How should sentence 5 be changed?

A Change library to librrary
B Change meet to met
C Delete the comma after shy
D Sentence 5 should not be changed.
7. What change needs to be made in sentence 15?
A Change fall to fell
B Insert a comma after eyelids
C Change the comma to a period
D Sentence 15 should not be changed.

8. What is the correct way to write sentence 6?

A Once a week, The children at the library met for Writers And Illustrators
Club.
B Once a week, The children at the library met for writers and Illustrators
Club.
C. Once a week, the children at the library met for Writers and Illustrators
Club.
D. This sentence is written correctly in the paper.

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9. What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 19?

A Change he to him
B Change opened to open
C Change question mark to a period
D Sentence 19 does not need to be changed.

10. How should sentence 10 be changed?

A Change by to buy
B Change their to there
C Change by himself to buy him self
D Sentence 10 does not need to be changed.

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