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Ielts-simon
boiled, unwind into* thread, and the thread will be twisted and
finally weaved.
My first question is that should I use future tense (will be
boiled....) or present simple tense (is boiled)?
The second question is that which preposition should i use? (the
qualified cocoons will be unwind into* thread: should I use "into") ?
I am looking forward to your reply. Thanks again.
Best wishes
Theresa
Hi Theresa,
Your paraphrasing is perfect. Here are the answers to your questions:
1. I would use the present simple to describe processes e.g. "The
selected (not 'qualified') cocoons are boiled."
2. I would avoid trying to use a preposition - I'd find another way
to describe it e.g. "The cocoon is unwound, leaving a single thread".
Or, "it is then possible to unwind the cocoon in order to have a
thread of silk."
Hope this helps,
Simon
When describing stages in a process:
1. Start at the beginning. Use words that clearly show the stages
(e.g. firstly, at the first stage, after that, next, following
this, finally).
2. Use the present simple tense.
3. Use the 'active' when someone or something does the action
(e.g. the moth lays its eggs).
4. Use the 'passive' when it is not important to say who or what
does the action (e.g. the silk cloth is dyed).
Here are some example sentences from last week's question:
The life cycle of the silkworm begins when the moth lays its
eggs.
Ielts-simon
I have highlighted the passive verbs and the words that mark stages.
Advice: you can avoid difficult passive verbs like 'unwound' or
'woven' by writing 'it is then possible to unwind' or 'the thread is
then ready for weaving'.
The table shows data about the underground rail networks in six
major cities.
The table compares the six networks in terms of their age, size
and the number of people who use them each year. It is clear
that the three oldest underground systems are larger and serve
significantly more passengers than the newer systems.
Ielts-simon
I've now written the full essay. I've followed my usual 4 paragraph
structure (see previous Task 1 lessons) and I've tried to make the
essay clear and simple.
I'd give my essay a band 9, but maybe I'm biased! Please let me know
if you find any mistakes in my writing (nobody's perfect), or ask if
anything is unclear.
Ielts-simon