There are social, medical and technical problems associated with the use of

mobile phones. What forms do they take? Do you agree that the problems
outweigh the benefits of the mobile phone?

Although mobile phones are thought by some to have some issues related to society, health and
technic, other people think there are some benefits from them. As far as, I am concerned, I do not
side with the negative effects outweigh the positive effectsof the mobile phone.
Admittedly, there are some basic negative impacts of the cell-phones. Firstly, for the society, the
stressful, busy life >> FAST-PACED LIFESTYLE is attributed to CAUSED BY THE USE OF
mobile phone. As a matter of fact, the employer could call to their employeeseverytime,
everywhere that making TO CHECK ON THEIR STAFFS PROGRESS AND THIS MAKES
the A bad environmental working WORK ENVIRONMENT. SO IT IS UNDESTANDABLE
THAT Employees are alwayS disturbed by their boss. Secondly, for FROM the medical
PERSPECTIVE, the scientists SCIENTISTS HAVE demontratedDESMONTRATED that the
radiation of the mobile phone will be harmful TOfor THE humans brain, pregnant WOMEN and
THEIR babies. They advicedADVISE that userS should not put the mobile phone near their
body everytime. Thirdly, for the technic FROM TECHNICAL ASPECT, the secret individual
information INDIVIDUALS PRIVATE INFORMATION could be stolen by hackerHACKERS.
The users phone number, information from the content of THEIR messages could be hacked and
sell THEN SOLD to somebody seeking that ILLEGAL ORGANIZATIONS. Especially, it is not
safe if the information from bank account DETAILS of Auser( USERS)is stolen leading ,
,WHICH COULD LEAD TO the A big problem.
Nevertheless, despite the disadvantages above, I believe that the mobile phone have HAS a lot of
benefits for the human life. One potentially positive effect is easycommunication.It is no doubt
that the mobifone= Mobile Phone/Cellphone helpS people live closed CLOSE TO each other.
People from everywhere could talk and share everything such as photos, music, emotion...People
do not feel alone when they help to live far away from their house. Especially, Astudent who
have HAS to go abroad to study.Another obvious advantage is the society is more active.It is
clear that the problem in THEworkplacewill be resolveRESOVLED quickly which will boost the
effective working. Last but not least, the mobile phone is entertainment. With the cutting-edge
technology, there are a lot of functions intergatedINTEGRATED in the cell-phone such as radio,
music, camera, games and so on. Thus, it is easy for human to reduce stress after hard working
day by their cell-phone.
Inclusion IN CONCLUSION/ IN BRIEF, having the convenient, comfortable, mordenMODERN
life far outweights OUTWEIGHS any of the minor drawbacks from the mobile phone>>
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nht position l drawbacks= benefits. However, we should control the technical

mordenMODERN devicesand do not let them dominate us.
Task response: 6
Coherence and cohesion: 6
Lexical resource: 6
Grammatical range and accuracy: 5
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