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Proximity
Each header in the How section is located close to its related paragraph to visually
associate them, but the rest of the proposal leaves equal spacing above and below
headings. Moving them closer to their related information would make it easy to discern
what information is associated with each heading.
Font
A plain, boring Times New Roman (or something that looks just like it) is used
throughout the proposal. A different font, such as Arial or something similar, would get
rid of the bureaucratic feel while still retaining a professional appearance.
Qualifications
No qualifications are given for the named applicant (Ted Walsh), nor the science teacher
who consults for the Carmel River Watershed Council. The proposal would benefit
significantly from more background information on this consultant and his qualifications
to lead a project of this scope.
Costs and Benefits
The financial costs are laid out in the beginning of the proposal, but the costs of in-class
student instructional time as well as additional time requirements for teachers outside of
the classroom are notably absent. The benefits are well laid out in the Benefits
section, but feel like they should in the Why section, which is instead muddled with
strange and often difficult to read requirements and descriptions of how the proposal
meets them.
Sentence Structure
There are a number of sentences that, although grammatically correct, are difficult to
follow and digest. They should be revised for better cohesion for the reader.
Please contact me if you have any concerns, recommendations for improvement, or
questions at parker@parkersmith.us.