Writing Paper Part 2.

Task Type: Essay

Question
In your English class you have been talking about animal welfare and the role of zoos.
Now your teacher has asked you to write an essay.
Zoos are an outdated concept and should be banned. Do you agree?
Notes
Write about:
1. the ways in which zoos play a positive role in animal welfare.
2. why some people might have a negative view of zoos.
3 ................ (your own idea)
Write your essay for your teacher (around 140-190 words).
What you need to do to pass
Read our checklist first to understand what the examiner is looking for in a good
answer.
Ideas for writing
Ask yourself the following questions to help you get started:
How might zoos play a positive role in animal welfare?
E.g. Helping with research? Saving endangered species? Educating the public?
What criticisms can be levelled at zoos?
E.g. Animals are not living in their natural environment? Wild animals are
captured to be moved to zoos? Animals can suffer from stress?
Is there another way of looking at the issue?
E.g. Is there a compromise to be made? Are criticisms of zoos totally
unjustified? Should more support be given to the natural environment?
Drafting and proofreading your work
You should look at your first draft of the task and decide:
Have you responded to the statement and the notes appropriately?
Is the essay organised in a clear and logical way?
Is the language accurate with a good range of structures?
Is the style OK?
Will it have a positive effect on the reader?
If the answer is 'no' to any of these questions then you will need to do some more
drafting!
Writing Criteria (go to Task)

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Writing Paper Part 2. Task Type: Essay

Content
Should include a discussion of both the points in favour and against
zoos. Include a short conclusion giving your opinion and offering an
idea of your own.
Communicative achievement
Semi-formal. The teacher would be informed and would know what
your own opinion is.
Organisation
Could include a brief introductory paragraph. The points in the main
body of the essay should be in a logical order, i.e. the positive role
of zoos to begin with, the negative view later. The final paragraph
should be a conclusion with an idea of your own.
Language
Language of opinion ('In my view....'), and argument and
comparison ('On the one hand....'; 'However, a major criticism
is ....'). Aim for a variety of language (e.g. advantages and
disadvantages = pros and cons; pluses and minuses). Should not
contain major errors that lead to misunderstandings or that irritate
the reader.

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Tutoras Especiales
Den Funes 981 Piso 8vo. Dpto. C X5000AAS Ciudad de Crdoba
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(00)(54) 0351- 4263718
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Celular: + 54 9 351 5513625