ESSAY OUTLINE

Topic / Prompt:

Technology use in high schools

Possible Thesis:

Communication technology, such as cell phones and iPods, should be

allowed in high schools for students to use.

High school students should be allowed to use communication

technology, such as cell phones and iPods, in the school building during
school hours.
-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------Introduction
Background Info:

the use of technology is a controversial subject in schools

many high schools ban the use of cell phones, iPods, etc.
many students dont understand why such technology is not allowed
because they see great uses for it

Definitions Needed:

technology
cell phone, iPod, Blackberry, etc.

Thesis:

High school students should be allowed to use communication technology

such as cell phones and iPods in the school building during school hours.

Body Paragraph 1 = Argument 1

Topic Sentence:

Cell phones are useful in emergencies situations that may occur during
school hours that require students to contact others or receive
communication from others.

1st Statement/Claim: One type of emergency situation that may require cell phone use is
injuries acquired in classes like gym, biology, chemistry, and shop.
1st Evidence/Example/Support/Quotations with identified source: In gym class, for example, it is
not unusual for a student athlete to focus so much on a football play that he/she hits an
opponent or the wall really hard and gets hurt. Coach Davis says, Ive seen four injuries like
this already. And its only September. In Chemistry, students can get burned by not wearing
safety equipment. 40% of students every year sustain some type of eye injury when they use
chemicals in a lab, according to the Cambridge School District.
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Chemistry class: chemical spills injuries

Gym: football accident get hurt
Have quote from Ms. Davis, football coach
Get statistic about kids getting burned in cooking class

1st Explanation of how the evidence supports the statement/claim

These situations can be scary and medical attention is required right away. Cell phones then
come in handy because instead of running to the nurses office, a student can whip out a cell
phone and call the ambulance

2nd Statement/Claim: main idea= school shootings and tragic events

- cellphones are helpful in these situations
2nd Evidence/Example/Support/Quotations with identified source:
- Colombine: statistics on # of students who used cell phones
- How quickly police came due to cell phone call (quote police)
- Parents quote saying theyre glad to hear students voice
- Intruders with weapon
- Stalker coming into the school
2nd Explanation of how the evidence supports the statement/claim
- students can use cell phones to call police, ambulance
- students can make cell phone calls to tell parents theyre safe
- can use cell phone to warn other students not to come to that area of
the school
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3rd Explanation of how the evidence supports the statement/claim
Concluding Sentence: Cell phones are an effective form of communication during school hours
for students in cases of emergency.
Body Paragraph 2 = Argument 2
Topic Sentence:

iPods can help students concentrate better in class.

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Concluding Sentence:
Body Paragraph 3 = Argument 3

Topic Sentence:

Most cell phones nowadays have features that help students stay
organized, so students should be allowed to access these features.

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Concluding Sentence:

Body Paragraph 4 = Argument 4

Topic Sentence:

Communication technology, such as Sidekicks and iPhones, has internet

capability, which means students can use these devices to access
information and do research quickly.

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Body Paragraph 5 = Argument 5

Topic Sentence:

Students can use cell phones to document wrongdoings which can help
to prevent or deter crime around the school.

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Concluding Sentence:

Conclusion

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