Assessment of Reading, Writing and Mathematics:

Primary Division, 2016

Released Assessment: Item-Specific Rubrics and

Sample Student Responses with Annotations
Student Booklet: English, Primary Writing

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Scoring Guide for Primary Short Writing (2016)

Topic Development- Rubric
Move fast or fly high? Question A13
Prompt: Would you rather be able to move very fast or fly very high?
Write a paragraph explaining which you would choose and why.
Code

Descriptor

Blank: nothing written or drawn in the space provided

Illegible: cannot be read; completely crossed out / erased; not written in English
OR
Irrelevant content: does not attempt assigned prompt (e.g., comment on the task,
drawings, ?, !, I dont know)
OR
Off topic: no relationship of written work to assigned prompt
OR
Errors in conventions prevent communication

10

Response is not developed; ideas and information are limited and unclear.
Organization* is random with no links between ideas. Response has a limited
relationship to the assigned task.**

20

Response is minimally developed with few ideas and little information.

Organization* is minimal with weak links between ideas. Response is partly related
to the assigned task.**

30

Response has a clear focus, adequately developed with ideas and supporting details.
Organization* is simple or mechanical with adequate links between ideas. Response
is clearly related to the assigned task.**

40

Response has a clear focus, well-developed with sufficient specific and relevant
ideas and supporting details. Organization* is logical and coherent with effective
links between ideas. Response has a thorough relationship to the assigned task.**

*Organization refers to the sequencing of information and events. The links may be explicit (e.g.,
transition words) or implicit (the right information at the right time).
**Task refers to form, purpose and audience.

Scoring Guide for Primary Short Writing (2016)

Topic Development
Move fast or fly high? Question A13

Code 10

Annotation: Response is not developed; ideas and supporting details are limited and unclear (e.g.,
so I can get stuff done really fast. so I can run across the hole Island and Explore. I dont
want to go to high.). Organization is random with no links between ideas.
Response has a limited relationship to the assigned task.

Scoring Guide for Primary Short Writing (2016)

Topic Development
Move fast or fly high? Question A13

Code 20

Annotation: Response is minimally developed, with few ideas for moving fast (e.g., be ontime
where ever you go. I like going very high in the sky to.) and little information as to why it is the
students choice (e.g., you can go to places faser like school, dance class and work.).
Organization is minimal with a simple opening sentence and weak links between ideas (e.g., I will
like You can be I like).
Response is partly related to the assigned task.

Scoring Guide for Primary Short Writing (2016)

Topic Development
Move fast or fly high? Question A13

Code 30

Annotation: Response has a clear focus, with adequately developed ideas and details (e.g., I
would be unstopabulrun around the world ten times in one minutebe the best at every
gametag, capcher the flag, man hunt, hide-and-go-seek, and lots more). Organization is
simple with simple opening and closing sentences and adequate links between ideas (e.g., If would
ratherbecauseI could beand that is why)
Response is clearly related to the assigned task.

Scoring Guide for Primary Short Writing (2016)

Topic Development
Move fast or fly high? Question A13

Code 40

Annotation: Response has a clear focus, with well-developed ideas and specific details for (e.g.,
win races for my school at track and field and recive a ribbon for coming in 1st place. get to
school early and play soccer before the bell rings. be a better football player and win the cup for
my team). Organization is logical, with opening and closing sentences and clear, effective links
between ideas (e.g., I would choose... The1st reason is The 2nd reason is The third reason is
Those are 3 raeson why I would want to run very fast.).
Response has a clear and thorough relationship to the assigned task.

Scoring Guide for Primary Short Writing (2016)

Use of Conventions - Rubric
Move fast or fly high? Question A13
Prompt: Would you rather be able to move very fast or fly very high?
Write a paragraph explaining which you would choose and why.

Blank: nothing written or drawn in the space provided

Illegible: cannot be read; completely crossed out / erased; not

written in English
OR
Errors in conventions prevent1 communication

10

Errors in conventions interfere2 with communication

OR
Insufficient evidence3 to assess the use of conventions

20

Errors in conventions do not interfere4 with communication

30

Conventions are used appropriately5 to communicate

Conventions refers to grammar, usage, spelling and punctuation.

prevent: Errors prevent understanding. The reader cannot determine what the piece of writing is saying.

interfere: Reading rhythm is constantly interrupted. The errors disrupt clear communication of ideas.

insufficient evidence: The student has not written enough to assess his/her use of conventions. A
minimum of two sentences (or their equivalent) is required to receive at least a Code 10.
4

do not interfere: Reading rhythm may be interrupted. The errors do not disrupt communication of
ideas.
5

Conventions (e.g., punctuation, grammar, syntax and spelling) are used appropriately:
Conventions are used accurately and consistently. Response reflects the standard of written
communication expected by the Ontario Curriculum to the end of the grade being assessed.

Scoring Guide for Primary Short Writing (2016)

Use of Conventions
Move fast or fly high? Question A13

Code 10

Annotation: Response has errors in conventions (In this run-on sentence there are: misspelled
words: wold, abale, areall, frunt, tose, rilly, atened; the use of a lower case letter for the word i; and
inconsistent use of upper case letters in lines 2 and 3) that interfere with communication.
Response does not demonstrate control of grade-level conventions.

Scoring Guide for Primary Short Writing (2016)

Use of Conventions
Move fast or fly high? Question A13

Code 20

Annotation: Response has errors in conventions (e.g., a run-on sentence; misspelled words: lik,
feaild, frenids, allways; missing commas after Also, frenids) that do not interfere with
communication. The response contains both a correctly punctuated simple and compound sentence.
Response demonstrates control of some grade-level conventions.

Scoring Guide for Primary Short Writing (2016)

Use of Conventions
Move fast or fly high? Question A13

Code 30

Annotation: Response uses conventions appropriately to communicate (e.g., correct use of

beginning and end punctuation; correct use of a contraction: didnt). Some errors exist (e.g.,
misspelled words: coruld, happend; missing commas after hurt, somewhere; a missing apostrophe:
peoples). The response demonstrates control of compound sentences.
Response demonstrates control of grade-level conventions.