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Aircraft Maintenance

by Fahad Naeem

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Aircraft Maintenance
GRADEMARK REPORT
FINAL GRADE

GENERAL COMMENTS

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Instructor
Dear Fahad,
thank you f or your Coursework.
Our specif ic comments are in the text itself .

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More general ones are here. It would be very


usef ul to f ollow our Academic Writing
presentations more closely. Elements like
colloquial writing style, consistent use of Harvard
Style as well as logical f low f rom one chapter to
the other would be advisable in your next
submissions.
Your Coursework is a pass.
Welcome on board.
Ivan

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Comment 1
T hank you. Still in our understanding submission through Moodle does not require a Cover
Sheet. Please conf irm with PG Aviation bef ore the next submission.
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W/ D
Well done! T hank you.
Additional Comment Apart f rom page numbering an acceptable T itle Page f ormat.

Comment 2
T itle Page does not have page numbers.
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W/ D
Well done! T hank you.
Additional Comment Well done on the table of contents.

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Proof read

proof read
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Proof read
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Additional Comment Style and spelling should be proof read bef ore the submission.

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W/ D
Well done! T hank you.
Additional Comment Having the acronym f irst and sorted by them would be even more
ef f ective.

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Proof read
proof read

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Weak Transition
Weak paragraph transition:
Although paragraphs are separate, individual steps of your paper, it is important to clearly
demonstrate a logical connection between them. Generally speaking, the way your
paragraphs relate to one another displays how sound your argument really is. A paragraph
that begins with "also" or "in addition" of f ers a weak transition f rom the previous point, even
though it may develop a highly interesting and related point.
Additional Comment A connection between maintenance and the incorporation of the
latest technology (i.e. the maintenance of the same) is not very clear at this point.

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WC
Word choice error:
Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very
dif f icult to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or
trying too hard to come up with a f ancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A
thesaurus can be a handy tool when you're trying to f ind a word that's similar to, but more
accurate than, the one you're looking up. However, it can of ten introduce more problems if
you use a word thinking it has exactly the same meaning.

Comment 3
Good attempt to use in text citation. Still more close f ollowing of the Harvard Style would be
even more appreciated.

Comment 4
Being an engineering school we would expect f or SI units to be used in the text.
Consider adopting as a best practice f or f uture CW.
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Title_and_Source
T itle and source required.
Consider adding.
Additional Comment T his applies to all f igures other elements apart f rom text in your
document.

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Support
Support Needed:
A well-written paper will include strong support f or its thesis. Support f or your thesis should
come f rom primary (original documents, interviews, and personal experiences) and
secondary (inf ormation that has been processed or interpreted by someone else) sources.
T o use your support ef f ectively, you must elaborate upon the inf ormation, quotations, and
examples taken f rom your sources and connect them to your thesis. It is also important to
remember to cite the sources of the evidence and support you use in your paper.

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Harvard
Improper ref erencing or in-text citation. Consider using Harvard Style and check this link:
http://libguides.city.ac.uk/content.php?pid=238813&sid=1970764 (In particular the slide
presentation at the bottom)
Additional Comment Althought ef f ective use of f ootnote if you wanted to make an in text
citation you should have used Harvard Style approach.
Consider addopting the same in f uture papers.

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Comment 5
Numeration of the chapters and subchapters should be in Arabic nuimerals on Roman
numarls.
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Comment 6
Consider using % instead of word representation of the symbol.
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Coll.
Inappropriate use of slang, cliche phrases, or idiomatic expressions:
T he use of slang, clich phrases and idiomatic expressions can conf use your readers and
destroy the f ormal tone of your writing.
Additional Comment Strong statement has been used that is not to be used in Academic
writing. Consider having dif f erent statements when presenting f ormal documents f or
Coursework.

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Coll.
Inappropriate use of slang, cliche phrases, or idiomatic expressions:
T he use of slang, clich phrases and idiomatic expressions can conf use your readers and
destroy the f ormal tone of your writing.

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Comment 7
Consider using text instead of symbols in this case.
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Weak Transition
Weak paragraph transition:
Although paragraphs are separate, individual steps of your paper, it is important to clearly
demonstrate a logical connection between them. Generally speaking, the way your
paragraphs relate to one another displays how sound your argument really is. A paragraph
that begins with "also" or "in addition" of f ers a weak transition f rom the previous point, even
though it may develop a highly interesting and related point.

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Comment 8
Strong statement. In academic text we need to bring conclusions based on evidence.
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Comment 9
Interesting selection of ref erences used!
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Harvard
Improper ref erencing or in-text citation. Consider using Harvard Style and check this link:
http://libguides.city.ac.uk/content.php?pid=238813&sid=1970764 (In particular the slide
presentation at the bottom)
Additional Comment Some of ref erences have been f ormatted in a proper way. One would
expect to f ollow the same rule f or all.

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