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this might
work better as
a numbered
list? It's kind
of hard to
read a long
list like this
and
remember the
items.
what was
corrected?
what was the
issue with the
first one? or,
perhaps you
should delete
this altogether
and just focus
on defining
and defending
the act.?
don't mention
changes or
"modifications"
unless you're
going to discuss
them.
explain
instead of giving us so
much detail about this
case, why not use it to
show that some patients
did move to get the
drugs, and then use that
use words to
distinguish
here, like "on
the other
hand"
good attention to
broad audience
what is them?
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GRADEMARK REPORT
FINAL GRADE
GENERAL COMMENTS
84
Instructor
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this might work better as a numbered list? It's kind of hard to read a long
list like this and remember the items.
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what was corrected? what was the issue with the f irst one? or, perhaps
you should delete this altogether and just f ocus on def ining and def ending the act.?
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them.
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explain
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you could improve this essay by "chunking" your material into sections, like
the above material could be a "background" or "history" section that f ollows your "intro" section.
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instead of giving us so much detail about this case, why not use it to
show that some patients did move to get the drugs, and then use that as one of your "reasons"
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good attention to
broad audience
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what is them?
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Proof read
Proof read caref ully to identif y and correct simple errors like those in this sentence.
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I think breaking your work into chunks w/ headings (sections)will help you
to write more unif ied paragraphs. Each P should cover just one topic.
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RHET FOCUS
Advanced
Shows some attention to audience's needs, sometimes def ining necessary terms and
ideas and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to argue a position
persuasively) may be unclear at times, and it may not be achieved convincingly.
PROFICIENT
Usually shows attention to audience's needs, def ining necessary terms and ideas
and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to argue a position persuasively)
may be implied, but it's clear and achieved.
ADVANCED
Shows sophisticated attention to audience's needs, def ining necessary terms and
ideas and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to argue a position
persuasively) is clear and achieved with style.
ET HICAL RES
Prof icient
Using the appropriate majors customary citation style, ethically cite and communicate inf ormation f rom a
variety of discipline-appropriate sources.
ABSENT OR BELOW Omits or uses discipline-appropriate in-text and end-of -text citations and quotation
BASIC
marks incorrectly. Drops quotations and ideas into text without introducing source.
PROFICIENT
Correctly uses discipline-appropriate in-text and end-of -text citations and quotation
marks. Usually introduces each source f ully (as necessary and discipline-appropriate)
reader knows who did the research or communicating, f or whom, and why. Use of
sources is usually diverse, relevant and persuasive.
ADVANCED
Correctly uses discipline-appropriate in-text and end-of -text citations and quotation
marks. Introduces each source f ully (as necessary and discipline-appropriate)
reader knows who did the research or communicating, f or whom, and why. Use of
sources is always diverse, relevant and persuasive.
PERSUASION
Prof icient
Compare, evaluate, synthesize, and communicate caref ully, objectively, and persuasively the relative merits
of alternative or opposing arguments, assumptions, and cultural values. Integrate this evaluative work into
a persuasive argument.
ABSENT OR BELOW Fails to support claims with relevant reasoning and/or specif ic evidence. Objectivity,
BASIC
balance, and a controlling idea may be lacking.
DEVELOPING
Attempts to support claims with reasoning and evidence, but specif icity and/or
objectivity may be lacking. A controlling idea may be missing or implied. Objectivity and
balance may be weak or f lawed.
PROFICIENT
Usually supports the controlling idea and paragraph claims with relevant, thorough,
and insightf ul reasoning and specif ic evidence. Usually maintains objectivity and
balance in argumentation.
ADVANCED
Supports the controlling idea and paragraph claims with relevant, thorough, and
insightf ul reasoning and specif ic evidence. Maintains objectivity and balance in
argumentation.
ORGANIZ AT ION
Prof icient
Organize, f ocus, and communicate ones thoughts clearly and ef f ectively to address a rhetorical situation.
ABSENT OR BELOW Organizational devices (controlling idea, headings, subheadings, topic sentences,
BASIC
transitions) may be absent, unrelated to the prompt, or illogically connected. Ps
PROFICIENT
ADVANCED
Prof icient
Recognize, evaluate, and employ the f eatures and contexts of language and design that express and
inf luence meaning and that demonstrate sensitivity to gender and cultural dif f erences.
ABSENT OR BELOW Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors impede readability. Lanuage may ref lect
BASIC
a gender or cultural bias. Design may be unconventional and inef f ective.
DEVELOPING
PROFICIENT
Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors are f ew and do not distract f rom
meaning. Lanuage respects gender and cultural dif f erences. Design is conventional
and ef f ective.
ADVANCED
Lanuage respects gender and cultural dif f erences. Design is conventional and
ef f ective.