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Essay writing is a di
cult skill that takes practice to master. No student starts their degree
able to write a perfect essay, but by the end of the programme most can write excellently.
Its important to take formative and summative feedback on board as you go through your
course. However, here are a few tips for what we are looking for in a good essay. They are
based on the Marking Scales and Assessment Criteria document that is on the
Anthropology Student DUO site (the sub-headings listed under Qualities Assessed) be
sure to thoroughly read that document too.
1. Relevance
One of the most common ways to lose marks is to not answer the question. Read the
question, make sure you understand it, and make sure you directly answer it in your essay.
For example, if a question asks you to compare two theories, make sure you directly
compare those theories. Dont just write two separate sections one describing each theory.
Make the readers job as easy as possible by 1agging up how the di2erent points you make
in the essay relate to di2erent parts of the question, and at the end of the essay clearly say
how youve answered the question. Many excellently written and researched essays
have received poor marks because they dont answer the question that is set!
2. Knowledge and Understanding
Any statement that you make should be supported by evidence, in the form of a citation to
published work. Evidence may vary across anthropological sub-disciplines, but could
include ethnographies, lab experiments, primatology 4eld studies, or palaeoanthropological
4nds. It is not enough to simply make claims, even if they are correct you need to support
those claims with evidence. Think of yourself like a lawyer: making a case, convincing a
sceptical jury.
You need to demonstrate both breadth and depth of knowledge and understanding. By
breadth we mean not relying on just a single source: you are expected to read widely on a
topic, and cite several sources of evidence to support your answer. By depth we mean that
you can really understand the signi4cance of a piece of evidence in relation to the question
being asked, rather than just citing lots of studies with no context.
3. Analysis and Synthesis
As well as just reporting research done by others, you need to also analyse and synthesise
it. By analysis we mean that you do not take claims or evidence at face value, and you
critically evaluate it. Does a theory make sense? Are there 1aws in a studys methodology?
Does an author make unjusti4ed claims? As well as being critical, also try to be
constructive: how might the theory be improved to better 4t the evidence? How might the
study be done again, addressing the 1aws youve identi4ed?
By synthesis we mean that you link together di2erent strands of evidence, either from
across a single sub-4eld, or across di2erent sub-4elds or even disciplines. We want to see
you make novel links between ideas that no-one has made before. However, while you
should be creative and original in your synthesis, this should be grounded in the evidence
you discuss (see Knowledge and Understanding above).
SAMPLE ESSAY
appear to be able to follow the gaze direction of human experimenters, using this form of
communication to overcome distractions and reach a desired destination (Tomasello, Hare, &
Agnetta, 1999). However, the social ability of primates has limits. Primates seem to struggle
with using gaze-following to find the hidden object in object choice tasks (Call, Hare, &
Tomasello, 1998). Yet there is a species that excel in such complex social tasks. Dogs,
colloquially dubbed mans best friend, appear to understand certain forms of human
communication at an impressive level. Two prominent animal cognition researchers, Hare
and Tomasello (2005), have even recently claimed that dogs have superior cognitive abilities
challenges of the conduct and implications of this study, before discussing the very concept
of social cognition. Finally, the essay will discuss possible implications of the results
concerning the evolution of human social cognition before concluding with a summary of the
The experiment conducted by Hare and Tomasello (1999) was inspired by an absence of
direct comparative study between primates and dogs investigating their relative social
cognitive abilities (Hare, Brown, Williamson, & Tomasello, 2002). The chosen subjects were
concealed in either one of two containers using social cues provided by the experimenter. The
experimenter used three social cues, namely leaning towards, gazing, and marking the
container with a wooden block, to indicate which container had the food concealed inside.
This provided the subjects with a conspicuous message to interpret. The results showed that
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Good introductory
paragraph: its brief (about
half a page), sets up the
background, explains the
importance of the topic,
and outlines the rest of
the essay structure.
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However, although the results do imply that dogs have a greater understanding of social cues
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could have been done by rubbing the food on both containers. The dogs may have used
olfactory cues to locate the food. If this were true, the results would simply suggest that dogs
have a greater sense of smell than chimpanzees, and say nothing with regards to their social
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Critical evaluation of
evidence: never take
studies at face value,
always think about
whether they really show
what they claim to have
shown.
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wooden block may have served the opposite purpose here and occasionally intimidated or put
Evidence of broad
reading: the student has
found a study that
counters the criticism.
off certain chimpanzees from selecting the correct container. This idea is similar to the evil
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9/11 chimpanzees to only score at chance levels, the social cues themselves such as the
eye hypothesis in which it was suggested that subjects may get put off by a dominant who
methodology was in fact used later on in this study when investigating differences between
dogs and wolves (Hare, et al. 2002).
Try to be constructive
rather than dismissively
critical: suggest ways that
the criticism could be
addressed in future work
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Notwithstanding the above evaluation on whether the given explanation of Hare and
Tomasellos study is justified, a more general question must be asked on the subsequent claim
object choice paradigm an all encompassing test of social cognitive ability or is it just one
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As well as methodological
criticisms, you can also
challenge definitions and
theoretical claims
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category of a larger spectrum? In response, the phrase social cognitive ability means the
cognitive abilities needed to interact in a social context, mainly with conspecifics or humans.
This includes tasks such as understanding social cues, but also other activities such as the
ability to discriminate between different attentional states and even forms of competition with
conspecifics. Hare and Tomasello (1999) showed that dogs are more competent than
chimpanzees in locating hidden food in the object choice paradigm when using the social
cues of leaning towards, gazing and marking the container with a wooden block
simultaneously. Yet one social cognitive area in which chimpanzees excel is when it comes to
competition with conspecifics. One study showed that in cases where two pieces of food are
revealed to a subordinate chimpanzee and only one of those pieces is revealed to the
dominant chimpanzee, the subordinate chimpanzee will tend to decide which piece of food to
approach based on an understanding that the dominant chimpanzee could only see one of the
pieces and thus approach the other piece, even in cases where the subordinate chimpanzee is
released a few seconds before (Hare, Call, Agnetta, & Tomasello, 2000). This study
demonstrates that chimpanzees have a high social cognitive ability in the context of
Despite the fact that it does not seem to be justified to claim that dogs have superior social
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cognitive abilities than chimpanzees based on the results of this study alone, the evidence
Hare and Tomasellos investigation showed that dogs have evolved noteworthy skills in
understanding and acting upon social cues. A thought provoking question asked by Hare and
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Tomasello is where did this skill come from? Three possible explanations are provided. First,
the canid generalisation hypothesis suggests that this unique social cognition is found
human exposure hypothesis posits that dogs astute social cognitive abilities are derived from
human exposure. This hypothesis could be confirmed if young dogs are shown to have
relatively poor social skills when compared to adult dogs that have been raised in close
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contact with human beings. Finally, the domestication hypothesis suggests that somehow,
during the process of dog domestication, there was a selective pressure in favour of dogs with
the most advanced social cognitive skills. If this were true, dogs from a young age, with little
exposure to human beings, should still considerably outperform their wolf counterparts as
their social cognitive abilities have been delicately nurtured to the point where they are now
innately present. Yet strikingly, Hare and Tomasellos subsequent studies showed that indeed
then demonstrated that puppies lacking human exposure performed equally as well at locating
the hidden food using social cues in the object choice paradigm as puppies that had
experienced human exposure. This rejected the human exposure hypothesis, leaving only the
domestication hypothesis. With this new innovation looking increasingly more convincing,
the obvious question must be asked of what actually was the selection pressure that caused
the domestication of dogs to result in them having such impressive social cognitive abilities.
One suggested answer, is a selection pressure against fear and violent behaviour towards
Human infants are also known to have similar social cognitive abilities from a young age
with children around the age of 14 months able to perform well in the same task of using
social cues to locate hidden objects in the object-choice paradigm (Behne, Carpenter, &
Tomasello, 2005). As previously claimed, the results described above may have serious
implications for understanding the evolution of human social cognition. One exciting
suggestion put forward is that convergent evolution has occurred between both human beings
and dogs (Ha
dissimilar species share a common trait, where the common trait developed independently
due to similar evolutionary processes. Therefore, it has been suggested that the evolution of
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mechanism of how, over time, advanced social cognitive abilities would have evolved. Some,
however, question the reliability of making a comparison between dogs and humans beings in
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regards to social cognitive abilities (Povinelli, & Giambrone, 1999). They allege that the
argument of analogy should not be used to compare the cognitive abilities of dogs and human
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superior social cognitive abilities. However, a major problem with such a claim is that being
able to understand social cues is not the only function that falls under the heading of social
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cognitive ability and therefore, it was suggested that to make the claim that dogs have
superior social cognitive abilities than chimpanzees based on this one study alone is not
evolution of human social cognition, given that dogs have similar social cognitive skills to
humans. A suggested explanation of social cognitive similarities between dogs and humans
was convergent evolution, with both dogs and humans subject to the same domestication
major studies testing the social cognitive abilities of dogs and chimpanzees with a conclusion
The bibliography or
reference list contains all
of the studies cited in the
essay, and no additional
studies not mentioned in
the essay (even if you
read them if they were
important then you should
reference them in the
essay explicitly)
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