Student Error Log

Name: Yuchen Cao (Flora)

Assignment 1: Summary rough and final draft

Sentences with Errors Description of Error/ Explanation and Remarks Correction

example: after the thief
robbed, he ran himself away
quickly
The case that almost half of
the students were accused of
plagiarism and improper
collaboration in the final
take-home exam of the
course "Introduction to
Congress"
Correction Symbol
transitive vs. intransitive 'to rob' takes an object After the thief robbed the
verbs woman,
'to run' in intransitive- no
object he ran away quickly.
lead word of the subordinate When using a clause to The case in which......
clause describe what is the case, use
in which instead of that

The case that almost half of
the students were accused of
plagiarism and improper
collaboration in the final
take-home exam of the
course "Introduction to
Congress"
Some arguments were put
forward by Adriana to
disprove Manjoo's opinions
Too many prepositional
phrases adding information.. sentences to introduce all of
The use of passive voice.
This is a sign for using two
this information.
Put the more general
information in the 1st
sentence and other
information in the 2nd
sentence
Use active voice when In order to disprove
possible, especially if it
allows you to use a human
subject for the sentence.
During the Spring 2012 term
at Harvard, almost half of the
students who took the course
"Introduction to Congress"
were accused of plagiarism
and improper collaboration
in the final take-home exam.
This "unprecedented" event is
known as the Harvard
Cheating Scandal.
Manjoos opinions, Salerno
has put forward some cogent
arguments.

Most of these students may Article error The: Most of these students may
possess the Have been mentioned before possess a
'performance-oriented' Something unique 'performance-oriented'
mindset of learning mindset of learning

This article can have Singular/plural form When meaning means This article can have
significant meanings in value, it is uncountable significant meaning in
prompting students to prompting students to
cultivate learning-oriented
mindsets
This article can have
significant meaning in
prompting students to
cultivate learning-oriented
mindsets
The conclusions drawn from
this article can have
significant meaning in
impelling professors to
clearly illustrate their goals
when assign certain tasks
Adriana Salerno, an
assistant mathematics
professor at Bates College,
posted an article on her blog
to provide her thoughts on
the Harvard Cheating
Scandal.
Therefore, when facing with collocation error
challenging tasks, they
choose to collaborate rather
than try to understand the
meaning of the task and work
hard to solve the problem on
their own.
Assignment 2: Short Report Rough and Final draft
Singular/plural form When you use a pronoun
(like their) in front of
mindset, it has to be plural
form---mindsets.
But when there is no specific
object, it is better to use the
singular form.
Word choice Impel is used in more
political or formal situation
to advocate or call on
something
Try to streamline the Leave out unnecessary
sentence(especially when it information.
is the first sentence of the
summary)
She is faced with a difficult
choice.
She faces a difficult choice.
cultivate learning-oriented
mindsets
This article can have
significant meaning in
prompting students to
cultivate a learning oriented
mindset
The conclusions drawn from
this article can have
significant meaning in
prompting professors to
clearly illustrate their goals
when assign certain tasks.
Adriana Salerno, an assistant
mathematics professor at
Bates College, provides her
thoughts on the Harvard
Cheating Scandal.
Therefore, when facing
challenging tasks, they
choose to collaborate rather
than try to understand the
meaning of the task and work
hard to solve the problem on
their own.
Sentences with Errors
example: after the thief
robbed, he ran himself away
quickly
Title: Womens current
situation in China
Description of Error/ Explanation and Remarks
Correction Symbol
transitive vs. intransitive 'to rob' takes an object
verbs
'to run' in intransitive- no
object
1)front size 1)The font size of the title
2)word choice should also be 12 point
2) Current situation is an
unusual expression in
English
Correction
After the thief robbed the
woman,
he ran away quickly.
Gender Inequality in China;
The State of Equality for
Women in China

Women are affiliated to men Collocations be affiliated with Women are affiliated with
during the whole period of men during the whole period
their lives. of their lives.

Since Chinese women have a Word choices staying at an oppressed Since Chinese women have a
long history of staying at an position is not a common long history of remaining in
oppressed position, it is of expression an oppressed position, it is of
utmost importance to focus utmost importance to focus
on promoting gender on promoting gender equality
equality in China. in China.

In the meantime, maternal
mortality rate decreased
remarkably by more than
three-quarters from 1999 to
2014.
article error There is no article before In the meantime, the
maternal mortality rate maternal mortality rate in
China decreased remarkably
by more than three-quarters
from 1999 to 2014.

However, there are still some meaning incomplete recognition of + what? However, there are still some
serious maternal health serious maternal health issues
issues arising from the lack arising from the lack of
of recognition and sexual recognition of the terrible
education. consequences of abortion
and sexual education.

Implicit attitudes rooted in subject-verb error The subject is in its plural Implicit attitudes rooted in
this ideology is still prevalent form,so use are!!! this ideology are still
in China. prevalent in China.
The situation behind this
statistics is that since people
have little knowledge about
safe sex, accidental
pregnancy rate is extremely
high in China.
In addition to that, due to the
implement of strict policies
restricting the number of kids
that a family can have and
the pervasive bias people
possess towards
single-mothers, Chinese
women oftentimes have to
resort to abortion after
accidental pregnancy.
This sociocultural abortion
trend have had a harmful
impact on both the mental
and reproductive health of
the Chinese women.
Although a meta-regression
analysis indicates that
gender gap in elementary
education has been
narrowing for the past 20
years, Chinese women are
still at a disadvantaged
position in terms of tertiary
education.
In her article published in
2012, Tatlow has pointed
out that there is an
increasingly severe tendency
in China that girls have to
obtain higher grades than
boys in order to be admitted
to the same university.
singular or plural error this->these The situation behind these
that->those statistics is that since people
have little knowledge about
safe sex, accidental
pregnancy rate is extremely
high in China.
1) confusing grammar 1) in addition is fine In addition, due to the
2) academic language 2) kids are informal, implementation of strict
3) word form error use children policies restricting the
instead number of children that a
3) implement-> family can have and the
implementation pervasive bias people possess
towards single-mothers,
Chinese women oftentimes
have to resort to abortion
after accidental pregnancy.
subject-verb errors have->has This sociocultural abortion
trend has had a harmful
impact on both the mental
and reproductive health of the
Chinese women.
1) article error 1) add article! Although a meta-regression
2) common use 2) more common to analysis indicates that the
say at a gender gap in elementary
disadvantage education has been narrowing
for the past 20 years, Chinese
women are still at a
disadvantaged position in
terms of tertiary education.
1) make language same as the left In her 2012 article, Tatlow
more concise pointed out that there is an
2) To cite others ideas, increasingly severe tendency
it is more common in China that girls have to
to use the past obtain higher grades than
tense boys in order to be admitted
to the same university.
His words seem to suggest
that women have to make
concessions and give their
educational opportunities to
their less capable male
counterparts, and only in this
way, will the country gain its
maximum interests.
According to a review article
published in Quartz, female
PhDs has been mocked as
the third gender in China.
With regard to political
participations, China ranked
74 out of the 144 countries
covered in the 2016 Global
Gender Gap Report.
The gender gaps in higher
education and political
empowerment remain to be
urgent issues demanding
effective solutions.
Assignment 3: Argument paper rough draft
Sentences with Errors
example: after the thief
robbed, he ran himself away
quickly
Plenty of papers found that
gender inequality against
girls in elementary schools
has been diminishing
significantly for the past
twenty years.
About a third of these papers
indicated that gender
inequality still exist in
punctuation extra comma
subject-verb error
noun ending participation: uncountable
noun
confusing grammar remain+noun
Description of Error/ Explanation and Remarks
Correction Symbol
transitive vs. intransitive 'to rob' takes an object
verbs
'to run' in intransitive- no
object
word choice error inequality does not go with
against
verb choice error Exist does not fit into the
context
His words seem to suggest
that women have to make
concessions and give their
educational opportunities to
their less capable male
counterparts, and only in this
way will the country gain its
maximum interests.
According to a review article
published in Quartz, female
PhDs have been mocked as
the third gender in China.
With regard to political
participation, China ranked
74 out of the 144 countries
covered in the 2016 Global
Gender Gap Report.
The gender gaps in higher
education and political
empowerment remain
urgent issues demanding
effective solutions.
Correction
After the thief robbed the
woman,
he ran away quickly.
Plenty of papers found that
gender discrimination
against girls in elementary
schools has been diminishing
significantly for the past
twenty years.
About a third of these papers
indicated that gender
inequality is still prevalent
tertiary schools
Tatlow has pointed out that
there is an increasingly
severe tendency in China
that girls have to obtain
higher grades than boys in
order to be admitted to the
same university.
To solve this intractable
problem, it is fundamental
that educators and families
discard the traditional
Confucian beliefs about
girls ability and social rules,
and further provide girls with
practical guidance about how
to success academically.
The Spring Bud Project
collects donations from
organizations and individuals
to sponsor girls in rural areas
whose family cannot afford
their tuition fees.
Until the end of 2010, this
program has raised over
$88.2 million to build 500
schools, operate 5,000
special classes and fund
vocational training and
education for more than 1.7
verb error use past tense when quoting
word-choice error others verbs
use common expression
word form error success [n]
succeed [v]
singular or plural error Here family means the
family of the girls, so it
should be in plural form.
preposition choice error by the end of
tense error past perfect tense is used to
express action completed in
the past
in tertiary schools
Tatlow pointed out that there
is a growing trend in China
that girls have to obtain
higher grades than boys in
order to be admitted to the
same university.
To solve this intractable
problem, it is fundamental
that educators and families
discard the traditional
Confucian beliefs about girls
ability and social rules, and
further provide girls with
practical guidance about how
to succeed academically.
The Spring Bud Project
collects donations from
organizations and individuals
to sponsor girls in rural areas
whose families cannot afford
their tuition fees.
By the end of 2010, this
program had raised over
$88.2 million to build 500
schools, operate 5,000 special
classes and fund vocational
training and education for
more than 1.7 million girls in
million girls in China. China.