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Jared Hunter

ENGL-1010
5/1/17

Dear Jamie McBeth-Smith,

I hope youre glad to have me and my writing methods in your class. Writing gives me lots of
ideas to put down and make them come to life, whether in a piece of paper or on other material. Ive
grown up as a writer since elementary school. My elementary class consisted of a majority of the
assignments be about writing, including spelling. I learned more about writing in junior high, where I
learned about the basic elements of a good essay, like thesis, evidence, and explanation. High school is
where I would learn the next big step in writing: the MLA format. I got good at the MLA format, thanks
to a website (the Citation Machine) and a lot of revisions from the assignments leading to my final
research paper. Elements of what I learned in high school would be carried over to this semester, where
Im taking an introductory writing class. This includes elements from my English classes in high school,
including the types of writing Ive never learned before, including a rhetorical analysis. I would always be
corrected by a teacher if there is something wrong with my assignment. In this portfolio, there are three
major writing assignments that I did this semester.

Flash Narrative

This writing assignment is based on a Japanese childrens manga franchise which involves an
earless robotic cat from the future, named Doraemon, who has come from the future to help a
struggling boy. Ive been interested in my franchise since the beginning of the year in my high school.
The franchise has never reached the United States until 2013, when translated manga chapters began
appearing on Amazon. The animated series based on the manga didnt air in America until July 2014,
when it began airing on Disney XD. Unfortunately, the TV series was cancelled two years later in
September. There are lots of stories that revolve around Doraemon, but for this assignment, Ive come
up with my own story.

The target audience for my story is toward people who are interested in pop culture that seems
obscure here in this country. I want this story to be in the age range of 16-30 years old, since they seem
to like pop culture so much. For this writing assignment, I hope to spread awareness and love of that
franchise to everyone. The first draft consists of a central image that is so strong, there is few of a story,
so I changed that in the final draft where I added in a few things, including a moral ending, to add a
story.

Rhetorical Analysis

This writing assignment takes an inside look at the rhetorical strategies used by journalist Maria
King for her article, Fit Pride Isnt Hate Speech. The article is about Marias post on Facebook
consisting of her pride for fitness which got offended by a group of people who take pride in their
obesity called the fat-acceptance movement. Her post got taken down after numerous reports by the
movement as a result. For the target audience, I would say that this assignment is for those who are
confident about their fitness despite being confronted. What I hope to get out of that assignment is to
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defend free speech and to raise awareness about censorship, especially from the fat-acceptance
movement. I believe that the fat-acceptance movement should not shame on people for being fit, or tell
them what to do; everyone is who they are, despite their weight. I also dont believe in censorship,
especially from people like the movement I mentioned, because I dont fit in their beliefs and I want to
do what I want to do.

The first draft consisted of many parts which can be implied as opinions, like when I addressed
the fat-acceptance movement as the fat people. Also, my thesis doesnt cover which rhetorical
strategy is effective. Ive changed that in the final draft, as I changed my thesis, added a paragraph about
which is the most effective strategy, and addressed the movement as something else like people who
are obese and the movement.

Viewpoint Synthesis

This writing assignment compares the viewpoints of the repeal of the Affordable Care Act:
repeal and replace, repeal and delay, and dont repeal. As a conservative, I didnt experience the health
care law much because I was too young to pay for health care. After hearing many complaints about the
ACA, I want to experience what its like to live under the health care law. The target audience would be
to those who are under health care. I hope to accomplish the pathos that would change the readers
lives to decide on the ACA.

The first draft of my Annotated Bibliography had MLA citations that were bold, not indented,
and contained URLs. Also, I typed will in parts where I write about the potential repeal. In my final
draft, I fixed the MLA citations to not be what my first draft contains, and I changed will to should in
some parts.

The first draft of my Viewpoint Synthesis contained the research question which talks about the
President. It seems like the paper is talking about the president, not the health care law. I also added a
conclusion which contained my viewpoint, but it isnt addressed as my opinion. The final draft, however,
has things added to the conclusion which contained my viewpoint. Also, I changed the research question
to be about the law itself.

As a student who slacks off a lot and waits until the last minute, my writing in the portfolio may not be
as good as you think they will be, but I think they will be as understandable as you expect it. Taking this
course, I hope that I will improve on my writing over the years, especially next semester. This class has
helped me to improve my writing and my time. Thank you for instructing me through this course.

-Jared Hunter
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The Netflix of Arcade Games (Flash Narrative)

It was a bright, sunny day in the spring time in a small, crowded neighborhood. Many students
are just going home from school; some of them doing things other than going home. Everything seemed
positive to the students getting out of school, except for one 10-year old boy, who ran crying. Noby,
wearing glasses and a yellow shirt, is feeling frustrated about something he encountered after getting
out of school, so he went home to talk to his friend about it.

His friend is a robotic blue cat, with no ears, named Doraemon, who came from the future to
help Noby out with succeeding in everything. He was sitting in Nobys room, feeling relaxed while
thinking about his favorite food, a Japanese treat called a dorayaki. He could imagine his tastebuds
being touched by the wonderful food. Suddenly, his mind is interrupted when he heard a boys voice
screaming through the stairs to his room: DORAEMON!!!!!

Into the room goes a crying Noby. What is it this time? said a disappointed Doraemon. I
wanted to play a cool, new arcade racing game, but Big G and Sneech wouldnt let me, explains Noby,
they promised me that I could have a turn, but they took too long, and changed their minds! They even
stole my quarters! Big G and Sneech are bullies of Nobys life. The former is the huge guy who always
wanted to steal, or borrow anything good from children, and the latter is the richest kid in the
neighborhood.

Feeling a little sorrow from Noby, Doraemon started to think up a solution to his recent problem
at the arcade. His thoughts are being filled with words like arcade and stole my quarters, when
something hit him: a gadget that would implement the most important aspects of arcade
entertainment.

At the same time, Doraemon thought about what would happen to Noby if he were to use it too
much. The boy hasnt been doing much homework lately, and has been getting horrible grades at
school. Doraemon wanted to tell him about his potential addiction that would lead to less homework
time. Because of Nobys distracting puppy-eyed face, he begins to forget about the troubles and finds
that gadget anyway.

Struck with excitement, Doraemon grabbed the gadget from his kangaroo-like pouch that holds
most of the gadgets that come from the future. The gadget is a simple box that looks like an Apple TV.
Doraemon calls it the Anycade, and he explained to Noby that it is the Netflix of arcade games. He sat
the box down on the floor, and tapped on the top of it to turn it on. The hologram of the menu showed
up from the top of the box.

Just touch the box, and you can get a menu on what arcade game you would like to play
explained Doraemon. Hearing what he said, Noby began to feel a little better, but was unsure if the
arcade game he wanted to play was in the gadget. Uhh does it have any arcade game? Noby asks,
and it was answered by Doraemon: Any game you can think of!

So Noby navigated through the menu of the holographic touchscreen displayed by the Anycade
through a light at the top of the box, and what did he see? The cool, new arcade racing game that
Noby didnt get a chance to play! So he tapped the flyer of that game, and then the box started to shake.
Noby looked at Doraemon in confusion. Doraemon, what is it doing? asked Noby. The two saw the box
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stretching towards them, and then growing a chair, a steering wheel, and a huge screen, like how a raw
bread loaf rises when cooked in the oven. Those three make up the arcade game Noby was looking for.

He jumped with joy, as he finally found his desire: to play a particular arcade game. The solution
was successful, and Doraemon explained that no quarters were needed to play. Noby went to the
machine and sat down behind the steering wheel. He was feeling very excited to experience what the
bullies have experienced. The machine prompted him an option to play the game, like it was a reward
for doing house chores. Noby pressed a button to start the game, as Doraemon left the room to go
outside and explore the neighborhood.

For the first half-hour, he enjoyed the game, when the two bullies stand in front of his house.
Hey Noby, weve got a baseball game! yelled Big G. Come on, were counting on you! said Sneech.
Outside, there are lots of children playing. Some of them are playing sports, like baseball and football,
and they seem to be having fun! Its always fun when youre in the sun! But Noby didnt do anything but
play his game; he didnt open the window of his room to hear Sneech and Big G because he was so busy.
Disgruntled, the two bullies knocked on the door, and asked the mother if Noby is there. Unheard from
Nobys room is a female voice saying Noby, your friends are here to see you! The music from the
arcade game was so loud and realistic that Noby couldnt hear a thing! The mother and the two boys
came upstairs to check out Noby, when they heard car engines and crashes coming from his room. His
mother began knocking on the door, but Noby didnt respond. She knocked louder, but he didnt
respond. The three began bashing the door, but Noby still didnt respond. They tried yelling as hard as
they can, but didnt get an answer. They had no choice, so Nobys mother opened the door immediately.
What they saw inside is a yellow-shirted boy sitting in an arcade machine.

The mother was shocked as she saw a big machine inside a small room. Big G ran into the room
to see Noby. When Big G found out why the door wasnt answered, he came to the arcade machine and
punched Noby heavily in the arm. Noby reacted, and as he looked around, he saw one of his bullies
glaring angrily at him. You little twerp! exclaimed Big G, how dare you not listen to me? Doraemon
had just come back from his outdoor exercise, and when he came up to Nobys room, he saw that it had
been messed up by the arcade machine, and the mischief Big G did to Noby. He began to feel confused
about this. I guess arcade machines were too much fun said Doraemon. The fight went on, with his
mother and Sneech staring in awe, and Doraemon wondering what would happen if Noby got caught by
his predator. Desperate for his friends life, Doraemon found a gadget that looked like a pinwheel: a
device that calms a person down with a touch on the mouth. He finds Big G, and uses the device against
the bullys mouth, so the fight would be tamed. After, Doraemon punched the arcade machine, so it
would turn back to a small box again. The fight is over, but not when Nobys mother started to get angry
at her son for being too distracted. Doraemon couldnt do anything about the mother, as he feels it is
not right to do so or Noby would end up slacking off more.

A few hours later, the sky began to darken. Doraemon is still worried about Nobys future
without completed homework and even good grades. He got ashamed for forgetting to tell Noby about
his gaming addiction. Nobys mother is still mad at her son for not paying attention and for not doing
any work. Doraemon began to regret for giving Noby what he wants instead of actually helping him for
his education. He tries to come up with something to cope with this situation. Fortunately, its only a
few hours away from midnight, so Doraemon came up with a last-ditch plan to get Noby up and running
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on his education. Thats right, the solution is to make sure Noby does all of his homework before
midnight. The homework is from an elementary school, which is less time consuming than the higher
grade ones, but why would Noby slack off on them? Anyways, Doraemon finally comes downstairs to
talk to Noby about his addiction, when he defends his position. Video games can improve your brain,
Ive read studies! complained a logical Noby. But Doraemon explains that his education is more
important. When youre good at school, you could get a job that makes lots of money, explained
Doraemon, think about it. What would you do to your future?

After putting thought into what Doraemon explained to him, Noby finally agrees to do
homework four hours before midnight with Doraemon watching him. Doraemon began to smile, as he
sees Nobys good future after watching for his completed homework. The two went upstairs to Nobys
room to check out the homework. As soon as he gets to his homework, Noby feels a little nervous but
has a fierce expression on his face. Im going to do my best, even when the going gets tough. Noby
said, as he prepares himself to do homework, with Doraemon helping him. With four hours left before
the clock shifts to the next day, theres enough time to get something done before rest.
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Rhetorical Analysis

On December 3, 2013, an opinion article, Fit Pride Isnt Hate Speech by Maria Kang, was
published at TIME.com, and at her fitness blog www.MariaKang.com. The author, Maria Kang, is a
mother of three sons, and a founder of a nonprofit organization called Fitness without Borders. She
started a passion for nutritional health and fitness after learning that her mother suffered many health
diseases. She started her fitness blog after she battled her eating disorder. She had won many titles
relating to beauty and fitness, like Miss Philippines USA and Miss San Francisco Chinatown. She had a
social media account on Facebook, where she posted something that would be considered offensive to
some people: a picture of herself in fitness wear, with her three sons, one of which is 8 months old,
accompanied by the text Whats Your Excuse? on the top. As a result, her account got banned for
almost three days. The people who were offended by that picture would be those who are part of the
fat acceptance movement, where they get to be proud of their obesity and think that theyre beautiful
and normal. The intended audience of this article is for the fit people who want to feel confident about
their fitness, despite being confronted by the fat acceptance movement. This situation led to Maria Kang
writing her opinions and reasons in an article.

The author shares her thoughts about the fat acceptance movement and censorship of social
media posts through the use of logos, pathos, and ethos. The one she uses the most effectively is the
use of logos. Kang supports them by writing that the obesity rate in America will grow to nearly half of
the population by 2030. She also writes that being a real woman isnt about being obese, or even
about other body images. She supports that being a fit person and standing up for ones self isnt hate
speech. It seems to Kang that being overweight is normal these days, even here in America. When it
comes to being healthy, though, people who are overweight might have to suffer horribly, even if they
dont care about it.

For logos, Maria Kang claims that obesity isnt healthy, and she uses organizations, institutions,
and publications to cite the sources for her arguments. One such example would be from the Centers for
Disease Control and Prevention (CDC), who held a study that over two-thirds of Americans above the
age of 20 are overweight or obese, and predicted that nearly half of the population in the country
would be obese by 2030. The obesity rate in America is growing with more people getting out of shape.
The problem with obesity is that it accounts for more heart diseases than people who are in shape, even
if those who are overweight are metabolically healthy, according to the journal, Obstetrics &
Gynecology. Heart diseases are caused by the arteries being clogged, usually by fat, which the obese
consume. She also stated that obesity can cause other problems, like health care, where a study in the
Journal of Health Economics states that our obesity crisis accounts for 21% of our health care
spending, which is roughly $190 billion a year. Health care can cost more for people who are obese
than for people who are in shape.

For censorship, she cites Facebook for saying that social media posts are taken down
automatically from the site for having offensive content the users flagged. According to the community
standards of Facebook, there is a section on hate speech, one of the sections which includes things that
shouldnt be on Facebook. The section defines hate speech with a list of content that directly attacks
people based on their beliefs and traits. The list includes Race, Ethnicity, National origin, Religious
affiliation, Sexual orientation, Sex, gender, or gender identity, or Serious disabilities or diseases. Kang
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wrote that her picture that was taken down had her fit and healthy self, plus her three sons, along with
the text on the top that said, Whats your excuse? There isnt a sentence she wrote about the picture
containing hate speech according to the community standards definition. In addition, Kang wrote that
we now apparently live in a culture where other people deliberately try to and feel entitled to
censor speech they dislike by labeling it hateful. Because her post, which didnt contain anything the
community standards says whatever Facebook doesnt allow, was taken down, she feels that censorship
can take on anything a community dislikes, not just hate-speech.

When she talks about social media posts being taken down, she uses pathos to describe her
experience with her censorship by the fat acceptance movement. When she posted a photo of her fit
self with her 3 children on Facebook, some of the viewers took offence at her by reporting it for hate
speech, resulting in Facebook taking it down. When the fat acceptance movement caused her post to
be taken down, she felt harassed by them, for offending them. She writes that story in the article to
express her feelings on being censored by the fat acceptance movement, even when she posted
innocent stuff that isnt hate speech. When she wrote Will a real woman please stand up?, she
meant for the people, who were confronted by the fat acceptance movement, to stand up for
themselves, and claim that they were real women as well. That phrase gives confidence to the fit
people. If the fat acceptance movement can be confident, so can the fit people. If people who are
overweight want to be motivated to stand up for themselves, and so can the people who are fit and in
shape. Being a real woman means to be yourself, not to become like the those who are calling obesity
normal.

For the final touch of this article, she puts in ethos to give credibility and character to herself
and other people. When the fat acceptance movement got offended by Maria Kangs post about her
fitness, they reported it for having hate speech. We can imply that the hate speech social media
users from the movement saw gives Kang the character of being a mean person towards the different
kind of people. When she argues about obesity being unhealthy for the fat acceptance movement, she
credits organizations, institutions, and publications, like the Centers for Disease Control and Prevention,
to cite her sources. Without citing the sources, she wouldve credited the things she didnt even write to
herself, which is plagiarism. On the last sentence in the article, she credits herself as being a real
woman, and that shes standing up for herself.

Out of all of the rhetorical devices Maria used, it would be logos that is the most effective.
When she was citing reliable sources to defend her fitness, like when shes writing about the causes of
bad health by obesity and how it impacts the country, she was being logical. In the article, she uses
sources from other people more than sources from herself (like that banned Facebook post). She uses
pathos to catch the audiences attention, but that mostly comes from her citations of real sources. She
uses ethos for credibility of the sources, but they were reliable sources. If something is a real source, its
more believable, credible, and logical, and it catches the readers attention to believe in something real.

Maria Kangs piece of writing is supposed to be a message about getting into shape if youre
overweight, and censorship on content, even if it doesnt have hate speech. She provides enough
information for the fat acceptance movement to learn about the dangers of obesity, like health
problems and the price of health care. Though whatever Facebooks community standards wrote about
hate speech is not on the article, she does credit Facebook for having terms and services regarding the
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removal of flagged posts. At the end of her article, she writes something that would appeal to the three
rhetorical appeals: I, Maria Kang, am a real woman and Ive stood up. Its not hate speech to be fit
and proud. She wants fit people to stand up for themselves. She also wants censors to let them know
that pride on fitness does not attack people who are overweight.

Works Cited:

Fit Pride Isnt Hate Speech by Maria Kang (TIME.com)

Community Standards by Facebook (www.facebook.com)


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Annotated Bibliography

After Trump won the 2016 election to become the President of the United States, questions were raised
on what would happen to the life-saving Affordable Care Act or Obamacare. The then-president elect
promised to his supporters that he would repeal and replace the health care law put out by now-
former president Barack Obama in 2010. About half of Americans have problems with ACA, citing price
hikes and financial problems as reasons. The other half praises the laws for saving lives, especially of
poor families. There are other sides to Trumps decision on Obamacare, like repeal and delay which
would wipe Obamacare but delay a replacement plan until later, and repeal only which erases the law
in its entirety. The research question used to be What should Trump do with Obamacare? but after I
took the last lab session where my instructor pointed out that the question isnt actually about what
Trump is doing, my new research question should be How should the Affordable Care Act be
repealed?

Capretta, James C., and Joseph Antos. "The Problems with 'Repeal and Delay'" AEI.org.

American Enterprise Institute. N.p., 3 Jan. 2017. Web. 4 Apr. 2017.

James C. Capretta, holder of the Milton Friedman Chair, works together with Joseph Antos to
write an article about The problems with repeal and delay for the American Enterprise Institute. The
writers express that they do not support the repeal of Obamacare. They wrote that repealing it would
cause chaos in the health economy. They explain that repeal and delay of Obamacare would
destabilize, when the marketplace is already unstable. The writers concluded that it isnt easy for
Congress to replace a bill without failing.

As someone who opposes Obamacare, the article did provide some facts about what would
happen if Obamacare is gone as a law. I feel like some of the content in the article were opinions and
predictions from the writers, so there wouldnt be other sources from the article to look at. This is
written before the American Health Care Act is proposed and backfired in a vote, and I thought that this
article can connect to the failed law. I didnt read what laws do, like the American Health Care Act, but I
do know that its Obamacare Lite, so Im glad that didnt pass. I thought the article can be a good one for
using evidence and citing it for a paper.

This source could be used when Im writing about repeal and delay, which is one of the
viewpoints of my Viewpoint Synthesis. This is a counterclaim on why Republicans shouldnt repeal and
delay.

"EHealthInsurance.com Investor Relations News Release." EHealth. N.p., 23 Jan. 2017.

Web. 01 Apr. 2017.


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eHealth, Inc. is a health insurance company which provides health coverage in all 50 states to
individuals, families, and small businesses. eHealth states that the costs of premiums for all covered
entities went up 140% since 2013 when Obamacare was majorly revisioned. The company proves that
by publishing reports on health care prices from eHealth for each year. Since eHealth is an insurance
company, they claimed to have obtained premium data from customers of eHealth for use in their
reports for each year. eHealth publishes its comparison chart of premiums from 2008 to the first two
months of 2017 into their article. eHealths chart states that the average premiums and deductibles for
individuals and families increase every year.

This source from a source is much in-depth, as it provides health care premium statistics from a
health insurance company, which Im assuming is one of the Obamacare-covered companies. I noticed
that in the chart of average premiums and deductibles in the article, the prices go up each year, even
before the major Obamacare revisions in 2013. Whats left out in the sources source is whatever the
problem with Obamacare is, though it did mention that the price increase coincided with the major
Obamacare revisions made in 2013. This is because the article is about statistics, not opinions. The fact
that this article is from a health insurance company which happens to provide details about their
increasing premiums and deductibles from 2008 to 2017 makes it the most accurate source, which is
what I like about it.

This source could have some great evidence, considering the fact that the information about
prices increasing because of Obamacare is provided by a health insurance company, which the law
covers. This doesnt mention anything on what Trump can do with Obamacare, but it does give a good
point on Obamacares prices expanding. I think this should go with the repeal only viewpoint.

"First Half of 2016 Effectuated Enrollment Snapshot." CMS.gov. Centers for Medicare &

Medicaid Services. N.p., 19 Oct. 2016. Web. 01 Apr. 2017.

The Centers for Medicare & Medicaid Services (CMS) is a government organization which
specializes in health care programs like Medicare and Medicaid to work with the health insurance
standards. The CMS reports that an average of 10.4 million customers are insured through the
Obamacare program in the first half of 2016. The CMS cites Health Insurance Marketplace CEO Kevin
Counihan for saying that The share of Americans without health insurance is at the lowest level in our
nations history. The organization states that 63 percent has decreased for consumers with their
coverage ended because of their unresolved immigration data mismatches, and that 42 percent has
decreased for households with income data mismatches.
What I like about this article is that the number of customers (10.4 million) can actually afford
Obamacare. What I dont like, though, is that the number is lower than the expected 22.4 million, as
pointed out by the source I went to the CMS page from (8 Reasons Why Obamacare Should Be
Repealed from The Daily Signal). I can connect the 10.4 million to the increase in premium and
deductible prices because people cant be insured when they cant afford healthcare. What I also like
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about this is the fact that its the original source from a government organization after finding the
sources sources.

This source is good for the dont repeal viewpoint, since Kevin Counihan said that The share
of Americans without health insurance is at the lowest level in our nations history, but it is also good
for the repeal only viewpoint since it is linked from an article where it says that 10.4 million couldn't
achieve the expected 22 million to be insured.

Kodjak, Alison. "Republican Plan To Replace Obamacare Would Turn Medicaid Over To

States." NPR. NPR, 22 Jan. 2017. Web. 07 Apr. 2017.

Alison Kodjak, a health policy correspondent on NPRs Science Desk, writes about what would
happen if a Republican healthcare plan issues a block grant program from Medicaid. She cites Trumps
adviser, Kellyanne Conway for stating that the replacement plan will turn Medicaid . . . into a block
grant program. She explains that Medicaid is a program in which health insurance is funded by federal
and state governments to help those in need. She writes that policy sources say that block grants would
reduce elements of care. Kodjak writes that Trumps replacement plan would give everyone coverage
tax-free when critics say it doesnt help low-income people who pay little to no income tax.

This is an article where it gives me good explanations on why repealing and replacing
Obamacare is a problem. Also, I learned something new: the definition of Medicaid being a health
insurance program funded by both the state and federal governments. The title of the article makes me
think that the states can do their own health care programs, which sounds like a good idea to me. If the
states can do their own health care programs, then I would live better than that federal government-
endorsed health care law.

This source can be used in the Viewpoint Synthesis to explain one of the perspectives of
Obamacare during the Trump years. Repeal and replace is one of the perspectives.

Moffit, Robert E., Ph.D. "Obamacare repeal and replacement: The case for moving quickly."

The Heritage Foundation. N.p., 24 Jan. 2017. Web. 13 Apr. 2017.

Robert E. Moffit, the author of this article who studies health policies, writes about the case of
President Trumps repeal and replace strategy for the healthcare market. He writes that with the
replacement bill, the Congress doesnt think they would leave millions of Americans uninsured. He
points out that at least 10 million Americans didnt get paid by the ACA, despite increasing premiums.
He suggests that President Trump and the Congress must do three things: remove insurance rules, drop
prices on employers health insurance by revoking the grandfather rules, and provide tax relief for
those who couldn't afford healthcare coverage.
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This article was posted on a news outlet which relies on conservative beliefs and ideologies.
Because this is an article about politics and the government, Moffit gives credit to President (-elect)
Trump and the Congress for making progress on the presidents campaign promise to do something with
Obamacare. What the writer could do is to cite sources which would help with the three suggestions
posted at the bottom, and facts about the number of Americans who struggled with the Affordable Care
Act. This is an article from January, so it doesnt give updates of Trumps progress like my lab session
instructor told me about updated articles.

Pear, Robert, Jennifer Steinhauer, and Thomas Kaplan. "G.O.P. Plans Immediate Repeal of

Health Law, Then a Delay." The New York Times. The New York Times, 02 Dec. 2016. Web. 08
Apr. 2017.

Robert Pear, Jennifer Steinhauer, and Thomas Kaplan of the New York Times wrote an article on
how the Republican party plants to repeal Obamacare immediately, then delay it. They wrote a statistic
on Obamacare that since the law is passed in 2010, 20 million people went uninsured with their health
insurances. They write that the reason Republicans are delaying after repealing is to give time for
Congress to make the right policies, and for Americans to seek better health care. But the three write
the reasons why repeal and delay wont work. They write one reason to be that repealing the
functions of Obamacare would cause a market meltdown. They also write another reason being that
delaying it for two or three years could leave markets unstable.

I like this article because it tells me one benefit of Obamacare, and a reason why Republicans
should repeal and delay. This article explains a lot about repeal and delay and there are two sides to
that. What I dont like, however, is that the two different sides are lopsided. The three people who
wrote this explain more about the opposition of repeal and delay than the benefits of that, so this
article must be biased.

This source has the dont repeal viewpoint since it talks about the opposition of repeal and
delay, but since this is on the subject of the repeal and delay viewpoint, this should be put in one of
the paragraphs of that viewpoint of the writing assignment.

Senger, Alyene. "8 Reasons Why Obamacare Should Be Repealed." The Daily Signal. N.p.,

23 Jan. 2017. Web. 16 Apr. 2017.

Alyene Senger, a healthcare researcher for the Heritage Foundation, publishes her article about
the 8 reasons of the Obamacare repeal to the conservative analysis website, The Daily Signal. She writes
the first reason being the costs of health insurance, and the increasing premiums despite Obamacares
promise to reduce them. She writes her second reason being choice and competition, which includes
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Obamacares limit of competition between health insurers. She writes that 10.4 million people were
insured under the ACA in 2016, which is less than half of the expected 21 million people. She writes
another of her eight reasons being that the citizen must keep what the government gives them,
regardless of what they like about the plan under ACA. She writes her last reason being that the ACA
restricted health care insurance to health care providers.

This article is written by the same author who did the five reasons one (summary and analysis
below), except this one is published during the start of Trumps presidency, and the one below is
published two years earlier. She uses a lot of ethos for most of her reasons, and she provides links to the
sources. This article even has the 22 million people expectation I was writing about in my CMS.gov
analysis. For some of her citations in her reasons, she doesnt credit them, but the links are provided in
words, usually past-tense verbs and nouns.

Senger, Alyene. "Five reasons to repeal Obamacare." The Heritage Foundation. N.p., 21 Jan.

2015. Web. 04 Apr. 2017.

Alyene Senger, a healthcare researcher for the Heritage Foundation, writes about the five
reasons Obamacare should be repealed. She writes that Obamacare creates trillions of dollars in
expanding health care, and then irresponsibly spending it. She predicts that with Obamacare, millions of
Americans will lose coverage to affordable health care. She writes that Obamacare limits the number of
health care providers near many Americans. She sees that the cost of health coverage has been
increased because of Obamacare in 2014. For the fifth reason, she writes that the Affordable Care Act
contains 18 separate tax increases, fees and penalties, which will keep middle-class Americans
spending much on health coverage.

The article has a link in the bottom which tells me that there is more information on the story. I
tried accessing that link, but its down, so I tried to bring the link to the Internet Archive to see if there
were any snapshots that I could access. Unfortunately, there were never any snapshots I could access. I
couldnt have access to the sources within the source, so this is one of the few parts that I dont like
about it. The separate tax increases, fees, and penalties part is what Im shocked about.

This source has a viewpoint of repealing it alone, as it doesnt mention anything about repeal
and replace or repeal and delay. Also, this article is published on a website that seems conservative.
Therefore, that source is good for writing about the opposition of Obamacare, and about the viewpoint
of repeal only when I found lots of articles about more than repeal only.
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Good for Your Health (Viewpoint Synthesis)

Research Question: How should the Affordable Care Act be repealed?

Donald Trump has won his presidency on November 8, 2016 following the presidential election.
One of the promises the then-president-elect made during his campaign is to wipe out the assumed
cons and failures of the Affordable Care Act, commonly known as Obamacare, and replace it with
something financially better, a process which he calls repeal and replace. The Affordable Care Act is a
health care law which was passed by then-President of the United States Barack Obama on March 23,
2010 which deals with giving health care coverage to low-income families. Supporters of the law praised
it for saving more lives than health care under presidents prior to Obama. Some people viewed the law
as the cause of financial problems, citing statistics from Obamacare providers.

President Trumps first attempt at his promised repeal and replace strategy happened before
March 23, 2017 when the vote on the replacement bill failed to become a law. However, Trump himself
promised to not give up on repealing the Affordable Care Act. The President could do three things to the
Democrat-supported health care law, if the voting were to take place again. Republican citizens dont
support the Affordable Care Act, and wanted Trump to repeal and replace with a replacement bill
because of financial causes by Obamacare. Members of the Congress want to repeal Obamacare, but
thought working on a replacement bill would take time off doing more important things for the country.
Most low-income people supported the Affordable Care Act, and wanted the law to be kept instead of
the replacement bill, as they think it could cause problems with the health care market.

Republicans want the Affordable Care Act to be repealed and replaced under certain conditions.
There are many reasons why they dont like Obamacare. Alyene Senger provides a look at the problems
caused by Obamacare with sources provided by politicians, government organizations, and health care
companies. In her 2015 article consisting of five reasons to have the ACA repealed, one of the reasons is
listed as for losing health care coverage. She wrote that Millions of Americans already have lost, and
more likely will lose, their coverage because of Obamacare. (Senger, 2015) She is saying that after the
Affordable Care Act has passed, there is an increasing number of people without health care coverage,
so she thought a repeal will take care of that.

Senger writes another reason of the ACA repeal in her 2017 article, being the increase of
premiums and deductibles. She cites a data report from eHealth, saying that the average nationwide
premium increase has been 99 percent for individuals and 140 percent for families from 2013-2017.
(Senger, 2017) She is reminding the readers that 99 percent for individuals and 140 percent for families
are numbers that are enough to have the premiums be costly for insurance users. She concludes that
the huge rising numbers are caused by Obamacare, as they happen while the ACA is taking place. She
also uses the rhetorical analysis of ethos for using a statistic from an Obamacare-provided health
insurance company, which in that case would be eHealth.

President Trumps viewpoint of what should be done to the Affordable Care Act is from his
election campaign promise: repeal and replace. What he means is that Obamas health care law should
be wiped out, and replace it with an alternative health care bill. There is an article by Robert E. Moffit,
Ph.D. of the Center for Health Policy Studies at The Heritage Foundation that talks about why there
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should be a bill that can replace the Affordable Care Act as soon as possible. At the third paragraph of
the article, he points out that not many people are receiving benefits from Obamacare. For his first
example, he writes that There are more than 10 million people in the individual market who get no ACA
taxpayer subsidies for their insurance yet are being hit with staggering premium increases. He is telling
the readers that health care users dont receive an allowance from the Affordable Care Act, which
makes the situation worse for paying continually-increasing premiums. Here comes the part where
Moffit writes about replacing the bill. He writes on the last paragraph that Trump and Congress must
move quickly to prevent even greater disruption to the badly damaged health insurance markets.
(Moffit) He explains that there should be a replacement bill to cover up the damages Obamacare has
caused, like not getting ACA taxpayer subsidies when the premiums are rising.

The viewpoint from the Republicans in Congress deals with repealing the Affordable Care Act
like Trump wanted, but delaying the replacement bill Trump wanted to pass. An article in The New York
Times written by Robert Pear, Jennifer Steinhauer, and Thomas Kaplan explains the reason why the
replacement bill should be delayed. They cite Texas Representative Kevin Brady for stating the reason
behind the delay: so Congress can develop the right policies and the American people can have time to
look for better health care options. (qtd. in Pear, Steinhauer, and Kaplan) The writers chose that quote
to explain that the Congress couldnt get more important jobs done when working on the replacement
bill pronto, and that the Americans dont have to rush looking for good health care without the ACA
before the replacement bill passes.

There is a problem for the repeal and delay viewpoint, though. That problem should also be part
of the dont repeal viewpoint. There is an article for the American Enterprise Institute by James C.
Capretta and Joseph Antos which explains the problem. The writers explain that repealing it would
cause chaos in the health economy, and that delaying the replacement bill would further destabilize an
already unstable insurance marketplace. The duo is telling the readers that living with Obamacare
makes the health insurance market better than without Obamacare when there is no replacement bill at
the moment.

Like the problem explained by Capretta and Antos, Obamacare supporters dont support
repealing the ACA, as repealing it would make things worse. Alison Kodjak wrote an article for NPR
about the effect of repealing and replacing. She titled the article to be about the replacement bill
turning over Medicaid to the state governments. She explains in the article that Medicaid is a joint
federal-state program to give health insurance to those in need. She cited a quote from Trumps adviser,
Kellyanne Conway for saying that the replacement plan will turn Medicaid. . . into a block grant
program, which Kodjak means would reduce elements of care according to health policy sources.
Kodjak explains that turning Medicaid over to the states would abolish the benefits of health care.

Researching for this Viewpoint Synthesis, Ive come to the conclusion that Republicans need to
be careful on proposing a reasonable health care bill that will replace the Affordable Care Act. This
should be the reason that their attempt on passing a replacement bill in late-March failed to have
enough votes. I think that the Republicans made a good point on Obamacare and how the ACA made
damages financially, but they may have made some mistakes on the replacement progress that they
need to look over, according to the Democrats who support the ACA. I agree that the ACA saved millions
of lives, but I dont agree that the law covered enough people because they cant afford insurance,
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which is my main concern of Obamacare. For my viewpoint, I am in between repeal and replace and
repeal and delay. In my opinion, the ACA should be repealed and delayed, but for a shorter time than
the Congress wanted. I dont really know how the Congress words, but I think half of it should work on
the health bill, while the other half can do stuff that is more important, which is what the delay part
should be. I think the delay part could also include looking over the bill to make sure it has the right stuff
to fix health care.
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Works Cited

Capretta, James C., and Joseph Antos. The Problems with Repeal and Delay AEI.org. American
Enterprise Institute, 3 Jan. 2017. Web. 4 Apr. 2017.

Kodjak, Alison. "Republican Plan To Replace Obamacare Would Turn Medicaid Over To States." NPR.org.
NPR, 22 Jan. 2017. Web. 07 Apr. 2017.

Moffit, Robert E., Ph.D. Obamacare Repeal and Replacement: The Case for Moving Quickly.
Heritage.org. The Heritage Foundation, 24 Jan. 2017. Web. 13 Apr. 2017.

Pear, Robert, Jennifer Steinhauer, and Thomas Kaplan. "G.O.P. Plans Immediate Repeal of Health Law,
Then a Delay." Nytimes.com. The New York Times, 02 Dec. 2016. Web. 08 Apr. 2017.

Senger, Alyene. "Five reasons to repeal Obamacare." Heritage.org. The Heritage Foundation, 21 Jan.
2015. Web. 04 Apr. 2017.

Senger, Alyene. "8 Reasons Why Obamacare Should Be Repealed." The Daily Signal. N.p., 23 Jan. 2017.
Web. 16 Apr. 2017.

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