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Sentence structure Only uses simple Writes using Writes using Meaning is Writes using
EN2-2A sentences in mostly simple simple, compound enhanced by the simple, compound
writing. sentences, uses and some use of simple, and complex
some compound complex compound and sentences that
sentences. sentences that complex have been written
make sense. sentences that in a sophisticated
Sia make sense. manner.
Adam Matt
Text structure The text has no The text is Sequences events Text is well Text is well
EN2-2A set sequence and sequenced but and explores sequenced and sequenced and
does not explore does not explore ideas. The text ideas are explored ideas are explored
ideas. ideas. makes sense. in detail. in great detail.
Sia Adam Matt
Paragraphs Ideas are not Ideas are Ideas are Ideas are Ideas are
EN2-9B organised into organised into organised into organised into organised into
paragraphs. incorrectly paragraphs. paragraphs that paragraphs that
Sia, Adam, Matt structured develop ideas. develop and
paragraphs explore ideas.
Vocabulary Only uses limited, Uses mainly Uses familiar and Uses a variety of Successfully
EN2-9B familiar familiar some unfamiliar words that are incorporates a
vocabulary, vocabulary that is vocabulary relevant to the range of
relevant and relevant to the text, including vocabulary that is
includes text type. familiar and relevant and
unfamiliar Adam unfamiliar contribute to a
vocabulary that Matt vocabulary. sophisticate,
isnt always succinct text.
relevant.
Sia
Spelling Simple and Simple and Simple and Simple and Simple and
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EN2-5A common words common words common words common words common words
are rarely spelt are correctly spelt are correctly spelt are correctly spelt are correctly spelt
correctly. in some cases. in most cases. in all cases. in all cases.
Adam Difficult words are Difficult words are
Sia spelt mostly spelt mostly
correct. correct.
Matt
Hand writing Handwriting not of Handwriting is of a Handwriting is a Handwriting is Handwriting is
EN2-3A a reasonably reasonably consistent size, consistent size, flawlessly formed
consistent size, consistent size, slope and spacing. slope and spacing with consistent
slope and spacing. slope and spacing. and of a high size, slope and
Adam Sia quality. spacing
Matt
Punctuation Incorrectly uses or Uses full stops, Correctly uses full Uses correct Uses correct
EN2-9B does not use capitals some of stops, capitals, punctuation punctuation in a
punctuation. the time. Attempts commas and throughout the variety of ways
commas. apostrophes most text. throughout the
Adam of the time. text.
Matt, Sia
Audience Does not identify Identifies the Effectively Effectively Identifies and
EN2-7B the audience. audience and uses identifies the identifies and involves the
appropriate text audience and engages the audience with
structure. writes audience with effective language
Sia appropriately. effective and text structure.
Adam language.
Matt
Imagination Introduces Introduces Explores Explores Explores
EN2-7B characters, characters, characters, characters, characters,
actions or events actions or events actions and actions and actions and events
but does not with little events to engage events and an in great detail
engage audience elaboration. the audience. emotions in detail, to engage reader,
Sia Adam engaging the making them feel
audience. personally
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Matt involved.
Language Features Does not describe Uses some Uses adjectives Uses a variety Uses a variety of
EN2-9B anything in the adjectives to and experiments adjectives and adjectives and
text. describe features with figurative experiments with incorporates
in the text. language when figurative figurative
describing language. language
Sia features in the demonstrating a
text. Matt deep
Adam understanding of
language.
Overall, Sia has achieved a D grade in her writing task.
Overall, Adam has achieved a C grade for his writing task. Part B
Overall, Matt has achieved a B grade for his writing task.
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To be delivered verbally Adam, thank you for writing an exciting story, you
engaged me from the start! I liked how you used
Sia, well done with your writing task. I really liked how you adjectives when describing what was happening; words
always used capitals at the start of sentences and for proper like powerful and intense.
nouns.
Dont be afraid to slow down and take your time when
I would really like it if you added more detail to your writing, youre writing. When you rush, your writing isnt as
you write about whats happening but you dont really describe neat as it could be and you stop writing with good
whats happening. Tell me about why Egypt was beautiful, or detail.
tell me how you felt when you were in Egypt. I did like how you
wrote about your thoughts in the story. Some of your sentences are very long, it would be
easier to read if you changed your really long
Some of your sentences are very long, it would be very good if sentences into 2 or 3 shorter exciting sentences. You
you put commas in these sentences to give the reader a time could also use commas to break up your sentences and
to pause. It would be really good if you could re-read your work give the reader a break. It would be good for you to
so that you can fix a sentence if it is too long or if it doesnt reread you writing and change sentences that are too
make sense.
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Feedback to colleague
for Sia
EN2- Creates a short imaginative text that Adam can publish an imaginative text Matt can publish an imaginative text
2A contains some key information using that contains key information and that contains key information and
knowledge of text structures and language supporting detail. Engages the supporting details. Matt recognises
features. Working at EN1-2A audience with descriptive language. his audience and writes accordingly
Sia needs to add key information about Ad should use shorter sentences and using descriptive language, plot
characters, supporting details and language maintain his descriptive writing to twists and sloid text structure.
features to her writing. improve Working at EN3-2A
EN2- Sia spells high-frequency words correctly. Adam spells high-frequency words Matt uses a variety of spelling
5A Working at EN2-5A correctly when writing imaginative strategies to spell high-frequency
Sia should work on adding lower-frequency texts. He does often make mistakes words correctly. Matt is also a
words to her writing. with less common or more complex competent speller of more complex
words. words. Working at EN3-4A
EN2- Sia uses mostly accurate punctuation Adam experiments with vocabulary Matt experiments with vocabulary,
9B conventions when writing. Working at EN1- and language features to engage the language features and punctuation to
9B reader. He could experiment further engage the reader.
She needs to experiment with vocabulary, with punctuation. Matt could use more punctuation
language features and punctuation to such as exclamation marks in his
improve. wiring.
EN2- Sia writes neatly using clearly formed Adam writes with a consistent size. Matt writes neatly using clearly
3A letters. Working at EN2-3A Adam needs to improve the shape and formed letters.
Sia can begin to use NSW cursive. slop of his writing. Matt can begin to use NSW cursive.
EN2- Introduces characters and a destination. Engages the reader using actions, Describes characters, actions and
7B Working at EN1-7B. Sia should elaborate on events and introducing characters. events to engage the reader.
characters and events to engage the Adam should be more descriptive of
reader. characters in his writing.
NAPLAN Data- Shading indicates area of future focus
NAPLAN Data Sia Adam Matt
Audience Basic awareness of the Makes language choices that engage and Engages and supports the reader
audience, makes only some interest the reader. Engagement drops off through language features, plot
attempts to engage the towards the end of the writing. twists and narrative devices.
audience with writing.
Text structure Story contains a beginning, Story contains an orientation, Well sequenced orientation and
complication, events and complication and resolution. complication. There is no real
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Stage 2 Sia spells high-frequency words Adam constructs a well sequenced Matt writes using ideas from personal
Standards correctly and writes with neat, imaginative text and uses different experiences and connects with the
Cluster 9 consistent handwriting. Sia uses strategies to spell high-frequency audience. He uses sentences and
Cluster 10 simple punctuation (full stops, words. Adam chooses verbs, nouns simple punctuation correctly and
capitals) correctly. Sia uses different and adjectives to express ideas and uses a variety of knowledge to spell
types of verbs using appropriate details. Adam is working to improve and edit words. Matt uses
tense. Sia should work on using sentence structure and handwriting. appropriate grammatical features to
commas and adding quotation Adam is currently achieving in link ideas and writes with
marks to denote speech. Sia is areas of cluster 8 and 9. Matt is currently working in
currently working around cluster 10.
cluster 7 and 8.
Common Sia has demonstrated a basic Adam has demonstrated a sound Matt has demonstrated a thorough
grade scale understanding of imaginative understanding of an imaginative text, knowledge of imaginative writing,
writing, she has correctly engaging the audience with language engaging the reader with language,
sequenced her work but has not use, imagination and descriptive descriptive writing, imagination and
engaged the reader through writing writing. Grade=C connection to culture. Grade=B
techniques or imagination.
Grade=D
Sentence EN2-2A Uses effective and accurate Putting sentences Teacher Product analysis Literacy
structure sentence structure. together. (PA) lessons
Write using simple, Re-reading
compound and complex
sentences
Paragraphs EN2-9B Understand that paragraphs Re-reading writing Teacher PA Literacy
are a key organisational Planning scaffolds Discussion lessons
feature of written texts Observation
Punctuation En2-9B Experiment with Punctuate prepared Teacher PA Literacy
punctuation. Using commas sentences lessons
in writing Re-reading writing
Explicit teaching
Prompts
Vocabulary EN2-9B Experiment with vocabulary Vocabulary lists Teacher PA Literacy
choices to engage the Word walls lessons
listener or reader New vocabulary
activities.
Descriptive EN2-2A Use descriptive language Activities where students Teacher PA Literacy
language e.g. adjectives, figurative introduce an idea and lessons
language to explore ideas. describe it.
Characteriza EN2-7B Introduce, describe and Creating character Teacher PA Literacy
tion explore characters. profiles. Discussion lessons
Audience EN2-7B Identify and engage the Discuss audience of Teacher PA Literacy
awareness audience with creativity and different texts. Discussion lessons
language features. My audience mind map Observation
(SMART Teaching Strategies,
2016)
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Self- EN2-2A Re-read and edit work. Visual reminders Teacher, PA, discussion All lessons
assessment self
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Appendix
ENs-2A plans, composes and reviews a range of texts that are more demanding in terms of topic, audience and language
EN2-3A uses effective handwriting and publishes texts using digital technologies
EN2-5A uses a range of strategies, including knowledge of lettersound correspondences and common letter patterns, to
spell familiar and some unfamiliar words
EN2-7B identifies and uses language forms and features in their own writing appropriate to a range of purposes, audiences
and contexts
EN2-9B uses effective and accurate sentence structure, grammatical features, punctuation conventions and vocabulary
relevant to the type of text when responding to and composing texts