Alexander Kozlov

Professor Batty
English 28
9 May 2017
In my original draft of the in-class essay, I realized how poor my time management skills were. I

made a weak outline of what I was gonna say and how I was gonna support it. I then followed that up

with an even worse essay barely putting the points together that I put on the outline.This was mostly due

to my pressure when faced with a time limit. I improved this essay by making the ideas more relevant and

coherent,and actually supporting my thesis in this essay. If you attempt to read the original essay, its

quite difficult to see how I am connecting the points to my thesis. I have attempted to rectify this in my

final draft of the same essay. Although I was no fan of the source material we are attempting to expand

upon, it is still my poor timeline that resulted in a sub par first draft essay. Although I am no fan of this

essay that I have produced, I believe it is more sound than my original Narrative essay. If if I were to

re-do anything about this essay, I would probably re-write this essay but going for the other position on

the matter. Saying that it is incorrect to buy smartphones for neglecting children. This essay has taught me

that I really need to improve the speed at which I make my outlines and turn those outlines into full

essays.