Acevedo 1

Brandon Acevedo

Holly Batty

English 028

May 31, 2017

Reflective

For this essay I had no comment from my professor, I did have feedback from my friend

Elizabeth. For my second essay "Accessories" I saw drastic changes in how I would transition

between ideas. Upon reading it for this assignment I realized my ideas were not cohesive. I

would jump from idea to idea without clearly establishing the main idea of my paragraphs. A

peer of mine suggested I should try to read my paper aloud to help me find my mistakes. Surely

enough, reading aloud clearly helped me point them out. I began to think of different ways to

phrase my sentences. For example I would combine two incomplete sentences to form one strong

complex sentence. I also focused on putting together my essay as a whole. Apart from adjusting

specific sentences, I strived for an overall smooth flowing paper. I made my ideas have good

transitions, avoiding random unnecessary information. Overall, I believe I improved on my

writing as a whole. Although it is not perfect it was a great stepping stone. The grade I received

was also great.