Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.

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higher than 3 (if everything else is fine with your essay) if
60 min you dont paraphrase the prompt.
SO, stop being STUBBERN and try to paraphrase it
Teachers payment should be upon their students quality
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether the teacher's salaries should be based on and achievements.
their student's academic performance. Indisputably, teachers duty is to train future engineers,
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scientist, etc. and this is so important for an academic institution to have teachers who can
teach better. Nevertheless, the students should try and study to understand the topics and the Commented [S3]: of great importance

teachers are just the leaders who should guide students to right path. Thus, I generally disagree Commented [S4]: have qualified and competent teachers
with the opinion that student's academic performance should be the criteria that which teacher Commented [S5]: students endeavor and talent are
will get higher salary. primarily the key factors in their performance.
Commented [S6]: This is pluralit should be criterion
First and foremost, there are plenty of students who do not or cannot study perfectly in Commented [S7]: ,With which teachers are ranked for
schools. I would like to point out that teachers are not responsible for students problems in salary allocation.
studying. There are students who are lazy, mentally ill or even do not like the topics the teacher Commented [S8]: The support and example in this
is explaining. To illustrate, let us look at the example of a student who want to be dentist, but paragraph was good..
he is studying mathematics majors only because of his family's pressure on him. The Commented [S9]: , which are taught by the teacher.
performance of this kind of student has nothing to do with the teacher teaching skills in the
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class.
Commented [S11]: To be a dentist

Furthermore, there are courses which need some equipment to be fully learned. Some schools Commented [S12]: He has been forced by family to
pursue his/her education in mathematics.
suffer from lack of facilities that can help students to better understand the course materials.
Therefore, it would be impossible for teachers in these schools to teach those course materials Commented [S13]: Is not properly representative of the
teachers proficiency in teaching.
to students. For instance, imagine a chemistry teacher wants to talk about the chemical
reactions of different materials. Equipment in these topics is crucial for students to visually Commented [S14]: Very nice support and example

understand and for teacher to better educate students. Commented [S15]: Hands-on or laboratory experiments
are critically important in perception of some courses.

However, it is impossible to neglect the fact that, the future of the society is related to the Commented [S16]: However, facilities and equipment,
teachers performance in schools. Schools which have provided all important materials for which are a necessity, are not usually accessible in all ...
teachers and also have collected talented students can expect teachers to put all their efforts Commented [S17]: This is kinda strong word..avoid it if ...
on teaching. For instances, schools that make a group of students to compete in mathematical Commented [S18]: It becomes intensely hard to teach ...
Olympiad should pay the teacher based on the group's performance. Commented [S19]: Third support????
Commented [S20]: To better appreciate the taught ...
In conclusion, although there are schools in which students have all the facilities to be better
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educated, teachers should not be blamed for their students' performance. It is the students'
responsibility to find their own best way of studying and understanding the course materials. Commented [S22]: It is substantial that the future of ...
Finally, it is unreasonable to determine the amount of salary a teacher gets based on the Commented [S23]: In which all necessary materials such...
students' performance. Commented [S24]: Why is this capital!?
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Commented [S27]: Indeed, it is students responsibility to
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Commented [S28]: !! never use this..its not professional
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