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Tip: Just type the template verbatim at the beginning, and then fill in the blank with examples.
The argument, that [insert conclusion only] omits some important considerations that
need to be addressed to get a holistic view of the situation under consideration. The argument
fails to provide substantive evidence or sound reasoning to be able to prove or even support the
conclusion from the given premises. The major flaws in the argument include unstated
assumptions as well as the fact that the argument confused revenue with profit. The passage
below aims to elaborate on the flaws as well as provide potential remedies to resolve them.
First, the argument readily assumes that []. This is an unwarranted leap of faith which
needs additional evidence in order to hold. A possible situation that contradicts this assumption
could be that []. Another possibility might be []. Moreover, []... Hence, the conclusion is invalid
unless the argument provides additional evidence to validate this unstated assumption.
Second, the argument claims that []. This is again a weak and unsupported claim as the
argument does not take into account []. For instance, [] Additionally, in the case that []. The
argument would not hold as well. Hence, the argument fails to convince readers that [conclusion].
Lastly, the argument confused [] with []. What if? Another possibility might be
Moreover, if, then the argument would not hold either
To remedy the aforementioned flaws, the argument need to include evidences that
support each of those unstated assumptions as well as interpret the given information reasonably.
Had the argument [fix flaw 1], [fix flaw 2], and [fix flaw 3], the argument would have been much
more sound.
In short, the argument fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could
be evaluated, and fails to reason logically from the given premises. The [flaw 1, 2, 3] render the
argument unconvincing. Had the argument included the remedies mentioned above, the
conclusion would have been much more reasonable.
myohmy wrote:
Hey guys-
I'm not hugely qualified to give GMAT advice (I'm not an instructor), but I took the GMAT twice
and got a 6.0 essay score both times, so I hope someone will find my essay templates/advice
useful.
Analysis of Argument
Paragraph 1
I always start begin with a broad statement about the issue at hand. For instance in an argument
essay about whether it was necessary to conserve energy, I would begin with:
Energy conservation has become a hot topic in the United States as of late. There are those who
debate climate change and those who affirm it, those who assert that humans are depleting the
world's natural resources, including fossil fuels, and those who believe that humans are barely
making a dent in consuming the resources the earth has to offer.
This sets up a fluid introduction to my essay, and by starting with an introductory sentence, I felt
I would set myself apart from the majority of other test takers who begin "I agree" or "I
disagree" -- remember, you want to distinguish yourself from other essay writers (in a good way)
right from the start.
I always continue by saying, "In the preceding statement, the author claims that (paraphrase of
the author's argument)." This shows that I understand the author's argument. I continue with my
disagreement (and, as has been often said, ALWAYS disagree with the author's reasoning, and I
pretty much always used the same thesis statement, something like:
Though his claim may well have merit, the author presents a poorly reasoned argument, based
on several questionable premises and assumptions, and based solely on the evidence the author
offers, we cannot accept his argument as valid.
I can use that statement for pretty much any argument essay I encounter. The beginning shows
that I see the issue as nuanced, rather than black and white, and I recognize that though the
author may have arrived at the correct answer, his reasoning is flawed. I also use "we" but I try
to avoid using "I". Take that as you will.
Paragraph 2
For me, paragraph two always attacks the premises of the author's argument. I usually jot down
a couple of premises on my board -- these are things that show up in the author's argument,
usually without any evidence provided. So 99% of the time, I attack the lack of evidence that the
author bases his premises on. I usually begin with some version of:
The primary issue with the author's reasoning lies in his unsubstantiated premises.
I like "primary" and "secondary" as transitional tools because they are more complex than "first"
and "second". Throughout the first paragraph, I show flaws in the author's premises by pointing
out his lack of evidentiary support (they pretty much always lack evidentiary support) and where
they are open to holes or alternate explanations. I usually have two or three, but one would be
fine if it it was strong. I generally end with something like:
The author's premises, the basis for his argument, lack any legitimate evidentiary support and
render his conclusion unacceptable.
Paragraph 3
In the third paragraph, I always attack the assumptions - again, I jot down a couple assumptions
on my notepad while reading the prompt. Generally, the issue with assumptions is that they need
to be clearly explicated - the author is asking the reader to make a jump with them, but the
reader may well veer off course if the author doesn't explicitly state his arguments. I usually
begin with some variation of:
Again, I begin with a transitional phrase that the e-grader can pick up on. As with the premises, I
spend this paragraph attacking a couple of the author's assumptions. The easiest way to do this
is to find an alternate explanation -- ie, what if the assumption wasn't true? I usually have two or
three, again. My assumption paragraph ends with something like:
The author weakens his argument by making assumptions and failing to provide explication of
the links between X and Y he assumes exists.
Paragraph 4
Paragraph 4 is where I talk about how the author could strengthen his argument -- that is, I go
back to my claim that his argument could have some validity, but not as it stands. I usually begin
this paragraph with something like:
While the author does have several key issues in his argument's premises and assumptions, that
is not to say that the entire argument is without base.
Then I provide some concrete ways the author could strengthen his argument. The easiest way
to do this is to give examples of what kind of evidence the author could provide, and discuss how
he can fill the holes in his assumptions. I generally end with something like:
Though there are several issues with the author's reasoning at present, with research and
clarification, he could improve his argument significantly.
Paragraph 5
This is my conclusion paragraph. I pretty much always conclude with the same sentence:
In sum, the author's illogical argument is based on unsupported premises and unsubstantiated
assumptions that render his conclusion invalid.
I usually use "in sum" because it's considered better stylistically than "in conclusion" but signals
to the e-grader that you're at your conclusion. I usually add a couple sentences of fluff in
between and then I end with:
If the author truly hopes to change his readers' minds on the issue, he would have to largely
restructure his argument, fix the flaws in his logic, clearly explicate his assumptions, and provide
evidentiary support. Without these things, his poorly reasoned argument will likely convince few
people.
P1- Intro with generic thesis statement that works for 99.9% of argument essays.
P5 - Conclusion.
Hope that helps someone out there and good luck on your essays!
I took the GMAT twice and scored 6.0 each time. I did put a lot of time in it the first
time....too much actually. Being a non-native speaker and having not written a damn essay (of
any kind) in many many years, I was very scared of the AWA. So, I went through every guide
that I could find and wrote nearly 25-30 essays. Even had a friend grade them for
me.....Pathetic, huh?
Anyway, for my second time, I just looked over my templates I created and wrote one of each
the day before test just to refresh my memory on faster typing without making too many
typos......
So, here it is....Enjoy, and please do not blame me if the 6.0 percentile goes down to 80
soon
AWA GUIDE
by Chineseburned
1. General Structure
Intro - Restate argument, point out flaws or state intention to discuss them below
1st Para - First,...
2nd Para - Second/In addition,...
3rd Para - Third/Finally,...
Conclusion - The argument is flawed/weak/unconvincing because of the above
-mentioned...Ultimately, the argument can be strengthened if/by...
3. Templates
Intro:
The argument claims that ....(restate)
Stated in this way the argument:
a) manipulates facts and conveys a distorted view of the situation
b) reveals examples of leap of faith, poor reasoning and ill-defined terminology
c) fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated
The conclusion of the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence.
Hence, the argument is weak/unconvincing and has several flaws.
1st Para:
First, the argument readily assumes that......
This statement is a stretch....
For example,...
Clearly,...
The argument could have been much clearer if it explicitly stated that...
2nd Para:
Second, the argument claims that....
This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any
correlation between....and...
To illustrate,...
While,...
However,....indeed....
In fact, it is not at all clear...rather....
If the argument had provided evidence that.....then the argument would have been a lot more
convincing.
3rd Para:
Finally,...
(pose some questions for the argument).....Without convincing answers to these questions, one
is left with the impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive
evidence.
Conclusion:
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is therefore
unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the
relevant facts....
In order to assess the merits of a certain situation/decision, it is essential to have full
knowledge of all contributing factors. In this particular case....
Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.
ESSAY QUESTION:
The following appeared in the editorial section of a national news magazine:[/b]
"The rating system for electronic games is similar to the movie rating system in that
it provides consumers with a quick reference so that they can determine if the
subject matter and contents are appropriate. This electronic game rating system is
not working because it is self regulated and the fines for violating the rating system
are nominal. As a result an independent body should oversee the game industry and
companies that knowingly violate the rating system should be prohibited from
releasing a game for two years."
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. Point out flaws in the argument's
logic and analyze the argument's underlying assumptions. In addition, evaluate how
supporting evidence is used and what evidence might counter the argument's
conclusion. You may also discuss what additional evidence could be used to
strengthen the argument or what changes would make the argument more logically
sound.
YOUR RESPONSE:
Quote:
The argument claims that the electronic games rating system, although similar to the movie
rating system, is not working because it is self regulated and violation fines are nominal,
Hence, the gaming rating system should be overseen by an independent body. Stated in this
way the argument fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be
evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumptions, for which there is no clear evidence.
Therefore, the argument is rather weak, unconvincing, and has several flaws.
First, the argument readily assumes that because the electronic game rating system is self
regulated, it is not working well. This statement is a stretch and not substantiated in any way.
There are numerous examples in other areas of business or commerce, where the entities are
self regulated and rather successful. For instance, FIA, the Formula1 racing organization is self
regulated. Yet, the sport is very popular and successful, drawing millions of spectators around
the world each year. Tickets are rather expensive, races are shown on pay-per-view, and
nearly all drivers are paid very well. Another example is the paralleled movie rating system
that the argument mentions. The author fails to clarify whether it is working well, but it is
clear that the movie rating system is pretty well received by people, who often base their
decisions to go see a movie with kids or not on the movie rating. It has never been a case when
someone would feel cheated by the movie rating and express disappointment afterwards. Since
the movie rating system is also self regulated, it follows that this regulatory method is working
pretty well and it is not obvious how it can be the reason for the poor electronic game rating
system. The argument would have been much clearer if it explicitly gave examples of how the
self regulatory system led to bad ratings and customer dissatisfaction.
Second, the argument claims that any violation fees for bad electronic game ratings are
nominal. It thus suggests that this is yet another reason for the rating system not working. This
is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any
correlation between the monetary amount of the fines and the quality of the electronic game
rating system. In fact, the argument does not even draw a parallel with the mentioned movie
rating system and its violation fines. If any such correlation had been shown for the movie
rating system, which supposedly works well, then the author would have sounded a bit more
convincing. In addition, if the argument provided evidence that low violation fines lead to
electronic game manufacturers to ignore any regulations with respect to the game rating
system, the argument could have been strengthened even further.
Finally, the argument concludes that an independent body should oversee the game industry
and companies that violate the rating system, should be punished. From this statement again,
it is not at all clear how an independent regulatory body can do a better job than a self
regulated one. Without supporting evidence and examples from other businesses where
independent regulatory bodies have done a great job, one is left with the impression that the
claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence. As a result, this
conclusion has no legs to stand on.
5. Final tips
During the tutorial type in a few sentences in the mock essay window to get
used to the keyboard.
Again during the tutorial, jot down on your notebook the basic structure of
your essays or the opening sentences in case you get too nervous and forget
them when the clock starts ticking.
Write as much as you can. Try to write at least 500 words per essay.
Always have the e-rater in mind as your potential reviewer. Remember that
the human rater will make every effort to grade just like the e-rater. In that
sense, keep your structure and volume in mind over actual quality/content.
Be careful of spelling mistakes. Double check words that you normally know
you misspell (e.g. exercise). Try to finish 2-3 minutes before time is up so you
can slowly re-read your essay for the purposes of spell checking. Do not
reorganize/delete sentences/paragraphs with less than 2 min left.
No matter how great you thought your essays went, try to stay humble and
focused - remember this was just a warm-up and the real stuff hasn't started yet!
Good luck!
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The following AWA essay template (view as PDF or text), when accompanied
by proper grammar, good diction, and solid argument analysis, has produced
many 6.0 AWA scores.
Please see the sample essay in order to better understand how to apply this
template.
Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Statement of Point
Example
Statement of Point
Example
Paragraph 5 - Conclusion
Summary of Outline
Please see the sample essay in order to better understand how to apply this
template.
Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Statement of Point
Example
Statement of Point
Example
Paragraph 5 - Conclusion
Recap of Thesis
Statementhttp://www.platinumgmat.com/about_gmat/awa_sample_essay_a
rgument.pdf
http://www.platinumgmat.com/about_gmat/awa_essay_template#text-issue
Summary of Outline
Analysis of An Argument
"The recent surge in violence in the southern part of the city is a result of a shortage of police
officers and an absence of leadership on the part of the city council. In order to rectify the
burgeoning growth of crime that threatens the community, the city council must address this
issue seriously. Instead of spending time on peripheral issues such as education quality,
community vitality, and job opportunity, the city council must realize that the crime issue is
serious and double the police force, even if this action requires budget cuts from other city
programs."
In the argument above, the author concludes that the city council is not doing its job well and
needs to focus on expanding significantly the police force in order to combat recent growth in
the level of crime. The premise of the argument is that crime is expanding while the city council
focuses on ostensibly unrelated matters such as education reform. However, the argument is
flawed because it falsely assumes that the city councils efforts to improve quality of life are
entirely unrelated to levels of violence and it assumes that the crime problem can be solved by
merely increasing the police force.
First, the argument wrongly assumes that issues of educational opportunity, community vitality,
and job availability have no bearing on crime. However, the author fails to support this
assumption. It is entirely possible that the crime level spiked due to a recent and sizeable layoff
at a major nearby factory that pushed countless citizens out of work and onto the streets. With
individuals struggling to survive, it should come as no surprise that people are turning to crime.
Second, the reasoning in the editorial is flawed because it erroneously assumes that increasing
the police force will directly address the root of the crime problem and reduce the level of crime.
Yet, a landmark study published in early 2008 showed that increasing the size of a police force
beyond a certain point provides extremely small marginal returns in the reduction of crime.
Given the fact that the local police force is already above this threshold, the editorials author
wrongly assumed that a doubling of the police force will materially decrease the crime rate.
Moreover, the argument could be improved by appealing to the citys history with fighting crime
and managing the size of its police force. In particular, approximately 25 years ago, the city
council faced a situation very similar to the one it faces today: a rising crime rate and growing
spending on community development. The city council decided to increase the size of its
afterschool programs budget by about 75% and this reduced crime dramatically. Faced with the
same situation today, the city council should follow the path it took 25 years ago.
In conclusion, the argument in the newspaper editorial is flawed because it assumes that
educational opportunity, job availability, and community vitality are not related to the level of
crime a community experiences. Moreover, the argument wrongly concludes that an increase in
the police force will address the root issue behind the crime, which the argument assumes is an
inadequate number of police officers.
Paragraph 1 Introduction
-Summarize the argument given in the prompt
-Thesis statement that explains the flaw in the logic of the
prompt
-Summarize your argument in one sentence
-2 3 sentences long
Paragraph 2 First Flaw in the Prompts Logic
-Begin with words such as To begin with, Firstly, etc.
-Explain one reason why the prompts logic or reasoning is faulty
-Do not talk about anything but the flaw you are focusing on
-4 6 sentences long
Paragraph 5 Conclusion
-Begin with words such as In short, In summation, etc.
-Briefly summarize the flaws and your alternative
-2 3 sentences long
Now that weve got a template in our toolbox, lets take a look at
a real AWA prompt and outline a possible response using our
template above. Heres the prompt:
Paragraph 1 Introduction
-The prompt states that controlling workplace risk means
controlling cost
-This assumes that wages can be lowered, and that it is actually
possible to make every workplace safer
-Other factors, such as industry fixed costs and best practices,
can drive costs up even in very safe workplaces.
***
When the Apogee Company had all its operations in one location, it was more profitable than it
is today.
Therefore, the Apogee Company should close down its field offices and conduct all its operations
from a single location. Such centralization would improve profitability by cutting costs and helping
the company maintain better supervision of all employees.
Analysis:
Many companies have their offices in several locations. Some companies feel that having a
centralized office is better others feel that individual offices are better, some say this can lead to
increase in cost others feel the opposite and say that its better for managing things. In the
preceding statement, the author claims that when Apogee Company had all its operations in one
location, it was more profitable than it is today. Though this claim may well have merit, the
author presents a poorly reasoned argument, based on several questionable premises and
assumptions, and based solely on the evidence the author offers; we cannot accept his argument
as valid.
The primary issue in authors reasoning lies in his unsubstantiated premises. According to the
author, when Apogee Company had all its operations in one location there was better
profitability, but it is not necessary that the profitability has decreased because of having offices
in various locations, there can be other reasons for eg: the market is not stable and due to which
there had been a decrease in sales of the companys product or the no. of competitors may have
increased as compared to before etc. The authors premises, the basis for his argument, lack any
legitimate evidentiary support and render his conclusion unacceptable.
In addition, the author makes several assumptions that remain unproven. The closing down of
field offices and conducting all the companies operation from one location will increase the profits
like before, which is not necessary to happen as the scenario may have changed. Centralization
may lead to decrease in profitability then before, but it is not definite to happen, the company
may increase its costs by centralization as accumulating all in one place can lead to some
expenses, for eg: new offices, similar facilities, etc. Also, supervision of all employees may
become difficult as all would be accumulated at one place and there can be problem in
coordination between the people working together before. The author weakens his argument by
failing to provide explication of the links between centralization and profitability he assumes
exists.
While the author does have some key issues in his premises and assumptions that is not to say
that the entire argument is without base. The author can provide more examples to support his
argument, he can concentrate on increasing sales rather than on centralization and even if he
thinks centralization can improve profitability then he should mention the reason for the same for
eg: he can state that since the market is not supporting currently and business is reducing
simultaneously and because of which we need to merge offices etc. Though there are several
issues with the authors reasoning at present, with research and clarification he could improve his
argument significantly.
In sum, the authors illogical argument is based on unsupported premises and unsubstantiated
assumptions that render his conclusion invalid. If the author truly hopes to change his readers
mind on the issue, he would have to largely restructure his argument, fix the flaws in his logic,
clearly explicate his assumptions, and provide evidentiary support. Without these things, his
poorly reasoned argument will likely convince few people.
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Hello Architj,
My suggestions from your previous response were to clear up your writing and pick strong
examples to support your points.
Writing: There are still plenty of long sentences (look at your intro again for examples). Shorter,
more direct sentences will help engage the reader. Make sure you discuss the "author's"
reasoning, not "authors" reasoning. Similarly, use "company's" operation instead of "companies"
operation. On the other hand, "issue's" should be "issues." Use contractions mostly to show
possession (the author's argument, the company's policies), but don't use them to make a word
plural ("issue's" is incorrect; you mean "issues").
Structure: Your intro is much longer now, but I don't think you need to include so many details
right away. It took a few sentences before you reached the author's argument; make sure your
summary of the author's argument is clear right away. I think that the template helped you
structure your essay, because the paragraphs seemed more connected than in your previous
response. The conclusion doesn't have anything to do with this prompt: it is all right to use a
template, but you can't have a generic conclusion. Even something as small as mentioning the
company's name or adding a few words about the main argument will help make your conclusion
feel original.
Arguments/Examples: Great job finding reasons why profitability may have changed that aren't
related to the company location. You did much better with finding examples and connecting them
to your argument.
Suggestions for Improvement: I know it's easy to use a generic conclusion, but that will lose you
points on the AWA! Make sure your conclusion is tailored to the prompt. Keep trying to cut down
your long sentences and to make them concise. I'd put this essay in the 4-4.5 range, but I think
that you can improve before test day.
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AWA -5.5/6; IR-8/8; 730 (Q50, V39) - Next Generation GMAT Wed Jun 06, 2012 4:51 pm
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Took the GMAT today, got a 730. I was expecting a 740 - missed by this much !
And yeah, folks - this is the Next Gen GMAT.
1.0 Preface :
I know that many people are gonna ask this question later on. (My buddies on this forum have
quite often asked this questions) -> Why did you take the GMAT immediately after the
format changed ?
Quote:
I just did not get any other suitable time for the exam
* During my Test preparation - I got 730 once but i got 97% as the percentile score. Dont know
why it is varied here.
Preperation for IR :
IR was not one area where I had sufficient material; neither do i have enough knowledge to even
logically attack it. OG 13 provides a 6 month free access to their online portal hosting 50 IR
questions. These are the best. They are tough, stressful, irritating and just what you need to get
a taste of the original GMATish IR.
The most crucial factor about IR is to forget about numbers and understand the
synopsis/description/annotation about what this data means. Once you understand what values
each numbers/graph bars stand for - IR questions will demystify and will be a cake walk.
Sounds easy right ? This is where GMAT shows its true colors. One ca easily mistake the meaning
of a data while solving the question and land up at wrong calculation result. Oh yeah - GMAT will
make sure the wrong answer is present in the answer choices.
If you can - give the Online IR provided by OG13 a try - they are really really tough !
Sentence Correction is a pain in the ass. But one thing which drastically improved my
performance is a simple technique. Whenever evaluating correct answers - make sure to look
into non-underlined portion of the question for tips. Most of the case, you will find critical clues
which will help you answer the question.
Reading Comprehension is an area which can drain you of energy and concentration. Most
important thing to do for this section is to stay focused and connect with the passage. Sounds
stupid - But trust me, it works ! You don't have to dream about dolphins for 5 min if the passage
is about dolphins. You just need to like dolphins - seriously, love them - I myself hate dolphin but
what choice do we have ?
Critical Reasoning is an area where you will definitely commit mistakes. Period. This is
inevitable. Keep 1 or 2 questions buffer in CR and consider them as goners. I don't mean to
suggest and outrageous thing such as leaving out a question or blindly guessing. But what is am
saying is something that many people forget to adapt to on a CR question. Once you find the
answer - Mark and move on. It is not a mere coincidence that many people who apply for
competitive exam choose correct answer but review the answer choices again and again and end
up choosing the wrong answer. This is exactly why I did not cross cut-off in IIT-JEE.
I am suggesting this from the bottom of my heart - with all the good will. This is applicable to
Verbal questions in general but mostly to RC & CR. Never re-review your answer choices once
you have correctly zoned in using elimination technique. It is waste of your time and energy.
G-Day(my slot was morning - 9:00 AM) - Have a heavy breakfast and tea/coffee/juice -
whatever suits you. Just don't get dehydrated. That is the last thing you want on a GMAT. I took
a red bull - now i know 1 was not enough. I should have taken some chocolate bars/energy
bars. Manhattan GMAT has a set of techniques to get you relaxed. Practice these - will be helpful
during Real Exam. Also - don't forget to ask the test administrator for Ear-Plugs. They work for
noise cancellation and are very effective.
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Detailed Documentation: Whenever I am done with a practice test - I open up spreadsheet
and enter all the errors I have committed. With details and answer three headers related to the
error:
Details on the Error, Reasons for the Error & To-Do Improvement.
In case anyone wants a template of this file, you can download it below:
(No copyrights applicable : Free document : Creative Commons of Penguinfoot)
Finally, Remember : You can practice 1001 questions, but if you don't review your errors - you
are not gonna make any progress.
Do let me know in case i can be of any help to my fellow community members. I have a month
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I took the GMAT twice and scored 6.0 each time. I did put a lot of time in it the first
time....too much actually. Being a non-native speaker and having not written a damn essay (of
any kind) in many many years, I was very scared of the AWA. So, I went through every guide
that I could find and wrote nearly 25-30 essays. Even had a friend grade them for
me.....Pathetic, huh?
Anyway, for my second time, I just looked over my templates I created and wrote one of each
the day before test just to refresh my memory on faster typing without making too many
typos......
So, here it is....Enjoy, and please do not blame me if the 6.0 percentile goes down to 80
soon
AWA GUIDE
by Chineseburned
1. General Structure
Intro - Restate argument, point out flaws or state intention to discuss them below
1st Para - First,...
2nd Para - Second/In addition,...
3rd Para - Third/Finally,...
Conclusion - The argument is flawed/weak/unconvincing because of the above
-mentioned...Ultimately, the argument can be strengthened if/by...
3. Templates
Intro:
The argument claims that ....(restate)
Stated in this way the argument:
a) manipulates facts and conveys a distorted view of the situation
b) reveals examples of leap of faith, poor reasoning and ill-defined terminology
c) fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated
The conclusion of the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence.
Hence, the argument is weak/unconvincing and has several flaws.
1st Para:
First, the argument readily assumes that......
This statement is a stretch....
For example,...
Clearly,...
The argument could have been much clearer if it explicitly stated that...
2nd Para:
Second, the argument claims that....
This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any
correlation between....and...
To illustrate,...
While,...
However,....indeed....
In fact, it is not at all clear...rather....
If the argument had provided evidence that.....then the argument would have been a lot more
convincing.
3rd Para:
Finally,...
(pose some questions for the argument).....Without convincing answers to these questions, one
is left with the impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive
evidence.
Conclusion:
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is therefore
unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the
relevant facts....
In order to assess the merits of a certain situation/decision, it is essential to have full
knowledge of all contributing factors. In this particular case....
Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.
4. Going from the templates to full-fledged essays
ESSAY QUESTION:
The following appeared in the editorial section of a national news magazine:[/b]
"The rating system for electronic games is similar to the movie rating system in that
it provides consumers with a quick reference so that they can determine if the
subject matter and contents are appropriate. This electronic game rating system is
not working because it is self regulated and the fines for violating the rating system
are nominal. As a result an independent body should oversee the game industry and
companies that knowingly violate the rating system should be prohibited from
releasing a game for two years."
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. Point out flaws in the argument's
logic and analyze the argument's underlying assumptions. In addition, evaluate how
supporting evidence is used and what evidence might counter the argument's
conclusion. You may also discuss what additional evidence could be used to
strengthen the argument or what changes would make the argument more logically
sound.
YOUR RESPONSE:
Quote:
The argument claims that the electronic games rating system, although similar to the movie
rating system, is not working because it is self regulated and violation fines are nominal,
Hence, the gaming rating system should be overseen by an independent body. Stated in this
way the argument fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be
evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumptions, for which there is no clear evidence.
Therefore, the argument is rather weak, unconvincing, and has several flaws.
First, the argument readily assumes that because the electronic game rating system is self
regulated, it is not working well. This statement is a stretch and not substantiated in any way.
There are numerous examples in other areas of business or commerce, where the entities are
self regulated and rather successful. For instance, FIA, the Formula1 racing organization is self
regulated. Yet, the sport is very popular and successful, drawing millions of spectators around
the world each year. Tickets are rather expensive, races are shown on pay-per-view, and
nearly all drivers are paid very well. Another example is the paralleled movie rating system
that the argument mentions. The author fails to clarify whether it is working well, but it is
clear that the movie rating system is pretty well received by people, who often base their
decisions to go see a movie with kids or not on the movie rating. It has never been a case when
someone would feel cheated by the movie rating and express disappointment afterwards. Since
the movie rating system is also self regulated, it follows that this regulatory method is working
pretty well and it is not obvious how it can be the reason for the poor electronic game rating
system. The argument would have been much clearer if it explicitly gave examples of how the
self regulatory system led to bad ratings and customer dissatisfaction.
Second, the argument claims that any violation fees for bad electronic game ratings are
nominal. It thus suggests that this is yet another reason for the rating system not working. This
is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any
correlation between the monetary amount of the fines and the quality of the electronic game
rating system. In fact, the argument does not even draw a parallel with the mentioned movie
rating system and its violation fines. If any such correlation had been shown for the movie
rating system, which supposedly works well, then the author would have sounded a bit more
convincing. In addition, if the argument provided evidence that low violation fines lead to
electronic game manufacturers to ignore any regulations with respect to the game rating
system, the argument could have been strengthened even further.
Finally, the argument concludes that an independent body should oversee the game industry
and companies that violate the rating system, should be punished. From this statement again,
it is not at all clear how an independent regulatory body can do a better job than a self
regulated one. Without supporting evidence and examples from other businesses where
independent regulatory bodies have done a great job, one is left with the impression that the
claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence. As a result, this
conclusion has no legs to stand on.
5. Final tips
During the tutorial type in a few sentences in the mock essay window to get
used to the keyboard.
Again during the tutorial, jot down on your notebook the basic structure of
your essays or the opening sentences in case you get too nervous and forget
them when the clock starts ticking.
Write as much as you can. Try to write at least 500 words per essay.
Always have the e-rater in mind as your potential reviewer. Remember that
the human rater will make every effort to grade just like the e-rater. In that
sense, keep your structure and volume in mind over actual quality/content.
Be careful of spelling mistakes. Double check words that you normally know
you misspell (e.g. exercise). Try to finish 2-3 minutes before time is up so you
can slowly re-read your essay for the purposes of spell checking. Do not
reorganize/delete sentences/paragraphs with less than 2 min left.
No matter how great you thought your essays went, try to stay humble and
focused - remember this was just a warm-up and the real stuff hasn't started yet!
Good luck!
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For the Analytical Writing Assessment (AWA) on the GMAT, students are presented
with an argument and are asked to evaluate it. Students need to break down the
argument, point out weaknesses and gaps in the reasoning and examples, and
suggest ways to improve the argument. All this needs to be accomplished in thirty
minutes.
In order to write an effective essay in thirty minutes, I recommend walking into the
test with a meaty skeleton of an introduction so that you can get to what really
mattersthe body paragraphs. Let me show you what I mean.
Keep it Pithy
Your introduction should not be long. Encyclopedic texts require long introductions;
thirty-minute essays require a short introduction. An effective introduction need only
be a few sentences. My introduction for this article was only three sentences and I
recommend that you aim for around that length in your AWA essay.
Every argument you see on the test will be flawed and have weakness. So this is the
perfect sentence to re-use during your practice and on test day. No reason to have
something new each time. Find a sentence you like and memorize it.
Repeat Yourself
Dont repeat the same idea, but you should repeat phrases and even entire
sentences every time you write a new essay. There is no reason to reinvent
something that works. The graders wont know how many times you recycled a
phrase or sentence so make it a point to repeat yourself from essay to essay.
This plan is likely to fail due to flaws in the reasoning and logic of the editorial.
This remedy is unlikely to be successful due to flaws in reasoning.
This argument contains some egregious flaws in reasoning making the conclusion doubtful.
The success of this recommendation is doubtful considering the logical flaws and faulty
assumptions on which it is based.
Find your own sentence and use it every time you write an essay.
Example
Lets try to make these suggestions more tangible. I have pulled an argument from
the list of arguments that could appear on the test. All argument prompts for the
AWA are made available so this is the perfect place to practice.
The following appeared as part of an editorial in the Waymarsh city newspaper:
Last year the parents of first graders in our school district expressed satisfaction
with the reading skills their children developed but complained strongly about their
childrens math skills. To remedy this serious problem and improve our districts
elementary education, everyone in the teacher-training program at Waymarsh
University should be required to take more courses in mathematics.
Introduction 1:
The editorial that appeared in the Waymarsh city Newspaper claims that the best
way to improve math education in first grade in the school district is to require
students in the teacher-training program at Waymarsh University to take more
courses in mathematics. This plan is likely to fail due to flaws in the reasoning and
logic of the editorial.
In this introduction, every thing that needs to be said has been said. The grader can
read this introduction quickly, knows that I have read the editorial and that I
understand the fundamental claim of the argument, and knows what I will talk about
in my body paragraphs. There is really nothing else that needs to be there.
Introduction 2:
The editorial that appeared in the Waymarsh city Newspaper pointed out that
parents were upset about their childrens math skills. To correct this issue, the
editorial recommends that students in the teacher-training program at Waymarsh
University take more courses in mathematics. This remedy is unlikely to be
successful due to flaws in reasoning.
This introduction is similar to the previous one, but summarizes the whole editorial
and not just the conclusion. But it still maintains the same logic and organization
summarize and then state that its flawed.
Takeaway
An essay with a score of four or higher is not that way because of the introduction. A
strong essay is strong because it identifies the most damaging flaws and analyzes
the gaps in logic. It recommends ways to improve the argument and uses relevant
examples to illustrate why something is flawed. All of this happens in the body
paragraphsnot in the introduction or conclusion. So dont fuss about the
introduction. Keep it concise and move past it quickly so that you can spend more
time in the heart of your essaythe paragraphs that analyze the argument in your
body.
For more GMAT AWA strategies, check out my posts on organizing a body
paragraphand writing a conclusion!
Happy studying!
Now that weve discussed how to write an introduction, it is time to turn to writing a
body paragraph. What follows is a layout, a map if you will, of what to do in your
body paragraphs. If you include each of these pieces in two to three body
paragraphs, youll be on track for a strong score on the writing section of the GMAT.
If done well, this discussion will flow nicely from the specific premise and flaw into a
broader discussion of the argument and its conclusion.
Example
Talk only gets us so far. Lets look at an example prompt and write a sample body
paragraph that contains all these points. All prompts that appear on the GMAT are
made available to us. Thats where you should do your practice.
The following appeared in the editorial section of a West Cambria newspaper:
A recent review of the West Cambria volunteer ambulance service revealed a longer
average response time to accidents than was reported by a commercial ambulance
squad located in East Cambria. In order to provide better patient care for accident
victims and to raise revenue for our town by collecting service fees for ambulance
use, we should disband our volunteer service and hire a commercial ambulance
service.
What follows is a sample paragraph. I have numbered the sentences so that they
correspond to the headings above so that you know the purpose of each sentence.
(I) The major tenet of the editorial from the West Cambia newspaper is the
comparison of West Cambrias volunteer ambulance service and East Cambrias
commercial ambulance service. (II) But the argument fails to account for differences
between these two localesa logical fallacy of composition and division, and in
common parlance, attempting to compare apples and oranges. (III) In no way does
the editorial establish how, and if, West and East Cambria are the same. (III) Since
the editorial points to response times, it should establish that these regions are not
distinct, but very similar. (III) For example, if West Cambia is in the city center and
East Cambria is in the suburbs, this would explain the difference in response times,
and thus a commercial ambulance service would be no faster in their responses to
an accident. (III) A city center has more traffic, more congestion, and more
accidents thereby making anyones response time higher. (IV) Since the editorial
fails to clarify the similarities and differences of East and West Cambria, there is no
way to know if this will benefit victims of accidents. (V) If we were to learn that West
and East Cambria are similar, have similar traffic congestion, share the same peak
hours of usage, and are built on a similar street grid, then perhaps bringing in a
commercial ambulance would be an improvement in West Cambria.
Takeaway
As you can see from the sample paragraph, there is a lot to accomplish in a short
amount of time. This is one reason I encourage students to keep their introductions
and conclusions brief. With practice, armed with this format and structure, you will
find that writing these paragraphs will be natural and quick. Continue to practice
under time constraints and youll increase incrementally until you have no problem
jotting down a quick essay analyzing any argument.
Happy Studying!
Keep it Pithy
As with the introduction to your essay, you should not dwell in the conclusion. The
heart of your essay, what really matters toward your score, is in the body
paragraphs. Theses should be bulky and in depth, but the conclusion should be short
and to the point. Wrap things up in a timely manner so that you can get to business
of editing and revising your essay.
Avoid sounding too generic. Many students will regurgitate a line about problems and
flaws that sounds like it could be used in any essay. Although Ive encouraged
students to reuse phrases and sentences in the past, I think that this can be taken
too far. Students become too generic and dont even try to make the sentence fit
with the essay. So at least take the time to mention aspects of the argument in the
conclusion. If it came from a company memo or an editorial in a newspaper, mention
that. If it involved a certain company or city, mention the name.
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to
analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example,
you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and
what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You
can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the
argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically
sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
Ive recommended adding a strengthening point to each body paragraph, but now in
the conclusion, broaden the suggestion. Find some general evidence that will make
the argument more convincing or make it irrefutable. Suggest a change so that the
logic stands on firmer ground.
Example
Enough said. Lets turn these recommendations into an actual paragraph. Below is
an actual prompt that might appear on your GMAT. You will find all arguments that
can appear on the GMAT on the MBA website.
And heres a sample conclusion. Although out of place without an essay leading into
it, you should be able to get a sense of what was said in the essay and see the major
recommendations from above.
After some analysis, the director of marketing has more work to do. Whether the
memorandum was hastily drafted or merely meant for brainstorming, its clear that
the rash assumptions and the confusion between causation and mere correlation will
doom this marketing campaign for Omnilixir. Yet sending free samples to potential
clients is not a bad idea; the marketing department needs to better identify their
target market.
Takeaway
Now you are ready to write your own argument analysis essay. You should have a
better sense of what to do in the conclusion, and thats all. Just because youve read
about what to do, doesnt mean you can actually do it. To master the essay, you
have to practice. Make writing a regular part of your studies. You dont even have
to write a complete essay. Grab a prompt and practice a body paragraph or an
introduction. Set a timer and see if you can write a introduction and conclusion in
four minutes or less. Ready. Set. Write!
Happy Studying!
The issue of _______ is as timely as ever. Recently, _________. Regarding this issue, the
author of the argument claims __________. He suggests that _________.Though the
underlying issue certainly has merit, because of a lack of evidence, weak
assumptions, and vague language the authors argument is unsubstantiated and
deeply flawed.
You do not have to list your three examples in your thesis, but it can be a nice way of
clarifying for the reader what you will be discussing.
What is the author assuming to be true? Show the reader you can see the gaps in
logic between the weak evidence provided and the conclusion. Use very clear
transition words between your body paragraphs.
Paragraph 4 Vague Language (4-6 sentences)
Use a transition phrase again, then attack the specific terminology the author utilizes
in the argument. How many is many? Who exactly does he mean by most? Here
you will be using the authors own rhetorical construction against him.
In your conclusion, introduce a few ways the author could improve his argument,
other than the three flaws you have already discussed. Reinforce the idea that there
is SOME merit in the issue underlying the authors argument, but not nearly enough
as it to be convincing. Heres an outline:
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GMAT AWA Essays
We all know that the essays on the GMAT are scored separately and
that the schools dont care as much about the essay scores. We also know we have to write the
essays first, before we get to the more important quant and verbal sections, so we dont want to
use up too much brain-power on the essays. Still, we cant just bomb the essay section; the
schools do care about the essayssomewhat. So how do we do a good enough job on the essays
without expending so much energy that were negatively affected during the multiple-choice
portion of the test?
We need to develop a template, an organizational framework on which to hang our writing. The
template will not, of course, tell us exactly what to write. For that, we need the actual essay
prompt, which we wont see until we take the test. We can, however, determine how to organize
the information ahead of time, as well as the general kinds of messages we need to convey at
various points throughout.
First Paragraph
Summarize the issue
State a thesis
Acknowledge that the other side does have some merit
Introduce your examples
The first paragraph should contain a brief summary of the issue at hand in your own words
(dont just repeat what the essay prompt said). For an Argument essay, briefly summarize the
conclusion of the given argument. For the Issue essay, briefly summarize the issue upon which
the prompt has asked you to convey your opinion. For either, you dont need more than a one to
two sentence summary.
The first paragraph should also contain a thesis statement. The thesis is typically one sentence
and conveys to the reader your overall message or point for the essay that you wrote. For the
Argument essay, you can write most of your thesis sentence before you get to the test! You
already know that the Argument will contain flaws, and that you will be discussing how those
flaws hurt the authors conclusion. Guess what? Thats your thesis!
While the argument does have some merit, there are several serious flaws which serve to
undermine the validity of the authors conclusion that XYZ.
DONT USE THAT EXACT SENTENCE. Theyre going to get suspicious if hundreds of people use
the same sentence. (Besides, thats my sentence. Come up with your own! )
Note the opening clause: While the argument does have some merit. This is whats called
acknowledging the other side. We dont say, Hey, your argument is completely terrible!
Theres nothing good about it at all! We acknowledge that some parts may be okay, or some
people may feel differently, but our position is that the flaws are the most important issue (that
is, our thesis is the most important thing).
On the Issue essay, you wont be able to write your thesis statement ahead of time, but you do
know youll have to do two things: (1) establish one clear position for yourself and (2)
acknowledge the other side. (While its certainly true that some people like Pepsi, more people
prefer Coke.)
Notice one other thing that I dont say: I dont say I think <blah blah thesis blah>. I state my
thesis as though it is fact and reasonable people surely agree with me. Thats a hallmark of a
persuasive essay.
Finally, the first paragraph needs to introduce whatever examples were going to use in the body
paragraphs below. Dont launch into the examples fully; that will come later.
Body Paragraphs
You can choose to use either 2 or 3 body paragraphs. (I use 2 body paragraphs, personally.
Remember, we just need to be good enough!)
Argument essay:
For example, lets say that an argument claims that firing half of a companys employees will help
the company to reduce costs and therefore become more profitable. While its certainly true that
chopping half of your payroll will reduce costs, it doesnt necessarily follow that the company will
become more profitable! That loss of personnel may reduce productivity, hurt morale of the
remaining employees, and so on. The author of such an argument could bolster the claim by, for
example, showing evidence that half of the employees are fully redundant and firing them
wouldnt affect the company adversely (if such evidence actually exists, of course!).
For the issue essay, your support will come from your brain: youll have to brainstorm some real-
life example (something that actually happened in the past) in order to support your thesis. That
example could be something from your own life (work history, school, friend of a friend) or from
the broader world (business, history, and so on). Stating that Cokes market share is higher than
Pepsis, for example, would bolster your claim that more people prefer Coke.
There is no inherent advantage to a personal example versus a broader world example, but if
you use a personal example, be sure to provide enough detail that the reader can understand the
relevance. When you use real-world examples that the readers are likely to know, you dont have
to worry about, for example, explaining what Coke and Pepsi are.
Finally, make sure to tie your example specifically back to your original thesis. Dont make the
reader connect the dots: tell him or her exactly how this example supports your thesis.
Conclusion Paragraph
Re-state your thesis (using new words)
Re-acknowledge the other side (using new words)
Briefly summarize how your examples supported your thesis (using new words)
Minimum 3 sentences; ideally 4 to 5
Are you noticing a theme within the above bullet points? Basically, the conclusion paragraph isnt
going to contain much new information. Its a conclusion; the major points should already have
been made earlier in the essay. What youre doing now is tying everything together in one neat
package: yes, the other side has some merit, but heres my point-of-view and, by the way, I
proved my case using these examples.
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The article on trends and lifestyles that apppeared in a magazine claims
that people are not as concerned about their intake of red meat and fatty
cheeses as they were a decade a ago .The argument is likely to fail due to its
faulty reasoning and unconvincing logic .Moreover no substantial evidence
has been mentioned inorder to draw a logical conclusion from its premise .
First, the argument assumes that Hearts delight , a store that sold organic
fruits and whole grain flours in the 1960's, represents the peoples habits
about eating red meat and fatty cheese. However the author fails to consider
that fact that the store might have started selling vegetables and whole
grain flours due to sevral other reasons ,like increasing cost and low profit
margins in of organic food and better and easier procurement processes for
the red meat It would have been much clear if the examples substantiating
those assumptions were present in the argument.
Second, the claims that owners of Good earth cafe ,an old vegetarian
restaurant, are living a modest life styles and correlates it with their
business profits to conclude that there business is reducing . However the
author fails to consider possibilities that they may well prefer leading a
simple and modest living to a more flamboyant one . Also The owners may
not show off so much about their lifestyles and the millionaires might have
huge debts but consider living in the best possible manner . The argument
could be considered strenthened if the author mentioned concrete evidence
to bolster his claim .Moreover before concluding the authoor must negate all
other possibilities
in summary the argument does not provide concrete evidence and other
relevant factor and makes a rash conclusion ...... concluding
First, the argument assumes that the number of older adulsts will
significant;ly increase as the population ages over the next 20 years . This
statement is a strech as it does not take into consideration the effect of the
new births that would balance the effect of ageing popuelation for exmaple
A child who is born at a particular date will add to the age group that
drinks more cola and less coffee and a significantly high birthrate can
render the assumption invalid . It could have been much clear if argument
provided statistics to prove his point for an ageing poipulation which cannot
be concuded as such
Second,the argument claims that the past 40 years of trends among the
cola and coffee drinkers are unlikely to change .This is another unconvincing
assumtptions.The argument does not negate any consideration that might
change the past 40 year trends. For example a study on cola and coffee
drinkers from a reliable institution may conclude that coffee drinking has
detrimental effect on the human health especially human in the age bracket
of 40-70.Such a study can change the preferences completely and the
conclusion thus becomes invalid.
Finally, the author concludes the investments should be transferred from the
Coal Loca to early Bird Coffee,However the argumenst fails to take into
consideration the fact that there can be several other factors that can doom
the Early Bird Coffee such as poor managment of resources , bad decision in
trems of investments etc which can hurt the conclusion despite the fact that
coffee consumtion may increase . Thus the argument could have been
strenthened if it mentioned relevant statistics and data regarding the
performnace of the Early bird Coffee company .
The article that appered in the business section of a local newspaper states
although a foreign motorcycle maker has copied the motorcycle X of a US
manufacturer ,it has failed to attract the customers of the motorcycle X
customers due to reasons other than its loud noise .The articles supports it
claims with several faulty claims and evidences that are not conclusive in
nature .This argument is likely to fail due to illogical reasoning and weak
evidences .
First, The author claims that loud noise of motorcycle X is not the
explanation for its high demand among customers against a simialr model of
motorcycle by another manufacturer because foreign cars which are of
foreign make are quiter but still attract customers in US .Here the author
assumes that the customers have similar preferences for car and motorcycle
which migh not be tru as one may prefer a luxury sedan with best sound
proofing over a loud sports car but may choose a sports bike with higher
noise over the conventional ones .Thus author should substatiate his
comparison for preferences with more examples and staistics to make the
argument strong .
Second, the author states that the advertisements of motorcycle X has voice
overs or rock musics rather than engine roar on the sound track thus
conclusing that loud noise is not differentiating factor . However the
argument does talk about what is displayed in the video ,there is possibility
that the visual state the loud noise of the motorcycle X as its unique selling
point in the ads thus users might be attracted towards the loudnoise
claimed in the visual and thus test drive it to experinece the same .Here the
argument does not cleraly state the visual aspecst of the ads thus making
the claim weak .
Finally , author states that its the durability and sleek lines which are
highlighted in the advertisement with no audio supporting loud noise of
motorcycle X in the ad .However author fails to account for the fact that
people may find the ad appealing enough to give the motorcycleX a try and
thus once they test it they get attracted towards the loud noise .Thus the
argument does not take into account experience that loud noise gives to
xutomer when they encounter it.The argument could have been
strengthened if the author substantiated it with concrete evidences and
reviews of buyers.
First , the arguments states that the XY general store shpiuld launch a significant rebranding and
market campiagn to change the company's image .Here the author does not provide any
information of previous marketing campiagns and rebranding activities.It is possible that the
rebranding activities and market campiagn may not be affective in changing the image as the
products sold at XY stpores have themselves have created a fixed mindset, which might me
difficult to change .Moreover there is a strong possibility that the agnecy that the XY stores hires
does not not have ability to deal with the scale of campign required and XY might retain it . Thus
inorder to strenthen it claim the auhtor should provide indepth analysis of the previous campign
and rebranding activities befpore suggesting the same for the company's image change .
Second, the argument assumes that change in company's image will bring in new
customers.However the argument faild to consider a possibility that that image change might
spoil the company's standing in the market and may lead to existing customer might not prefer it
anymore with its new image .This can lead to negative publicity and can inturn effect the
mindset of the new customer who might also shun the company . Therefore the correlation
between image change and new customer need to be examined further inorder to make this
argument a sound one .
Finally , The argument states that since 60 % of thhose surveyed recognized the name of XY
stores but have not shoopped at the XY stores , so there is a huge scope of bringing in new
customer .Here the argument does not consider the sample size and if it represent an unbiased
sample of people .It is possible that more that 90% of of all consumer are XY customer but the
saaple taken in this survey was biased .Thius the veracity of sample need to be checked
beforedrwaing any consluiosn from it .
In conclusion , The argument is flawed due to above mentioned reasons . The arguments claims
to change company image and increase inflow of cutomers through re branding and marketing
campaign is weak and unconvincing as it the author does not justify its claims tand makes rash
assumptions .It could be strengthened if all contributing factors were taken into consideration .
AWA ESSAYS: Analyze Argument
ESSAY QUESTION:
The following appeared in a market research report examining consumer perceptions of a chain of clothing stores:
"A recent survey commissioned by the market research department of XY Gen Stores indicated a high level of
recognition among consumers of the brand and the nature of the apparel sold in XY Gen Stores. However, the survey
also indicated that approximately 60% of those surveyed that recognized the name of XY Gen Stores had never
shopped at one of the company's stores. Because of this result, XY Gen Stores executives should launch a significant
rebranding and marketing campaign to change the company's image and thereby bring new consumers into the
stores.
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. Point out flaws in the argument's logic and analyze the argument's
underlying assumptions. In addition, evaluate how supporting evidence is used and what evidence might counter the
argument's conclusion. You may also discuss what additional evidence could be used to strengthen the argument or
what changes would make the argument more logically sound.
YOUR RESPONSE:
The article that appeared in the market research report states that
xy general stores executives should launch a significant re
branding and marketing campaign to change the XY's image and
thereby bring new consumer into the stores .The argument is likely
to fail due to faulty reasoning and illogical assumptions .Moreover
the argument does not substantiate THE CLAIMS to prove its
conclusion from the given premises . The argument does not provide
substantive evidence to be able to proveor even support the main conclusion
from the given premises.
First , the mayor assumes that renowned transporation and award winning parks and recreation
department are the sole factors which make a place ideal for the business.There are several
factors such the market accessibility , transporation cost as well as customer preferences which
could account for a place to be an ideal one for business .the argment does not take into account
any of these and thus ignores the possibility of these playing a mojor role in the successof
business in Ketner Springs .the argument could have been strengthened if the author had
mentioned relevants statistics pertaining to the other contributing factors to support his claim.
Second, Mayors claims families love living as Ketner's schools have the lowest student to teacher
ratio in the state and its restaurants boats more kissie menu options than anywhere else in the
country . In this cliams the mayors fails to consider the possibility that despite some of the
positives there may be glaring negatives factors affecting the life of Ketner springs such as
criminal activities and safety of citizens, cost of living etc .In case Ketner springs is highly unsafe
for its citizens , the families would not prefer living in the city .Moroevr if the cost of living is
extremely high as comapred to subusrban areas ,families may prefer the suburban areas to
Ketner Springs .Clearly Mayor need to elaborate more on the various factors concerning the
families prefernec for the city to add credibility to his claims .
Finally , The mayors concludes that if one needs to locate a business or a office , one would find
perfect locale in Ketner springs but fails to corroborate hsi claims with supporting evidences . the
mayor should afddress what constitues a [refect locale and present relevant data with concrete
exaples to supprt his claims .I the abscence of the supporting evidences this this cliams sounds
weak and unconvincing
In conclusion the argument is flawed due to above mentioned reasons .The mayors claims that
ketner springs is will provide the perfect locale for any business is weak and unconvincing as
mayor does not substantiate his claims and makes rash assumptions to draw the conclusion It
could have been strengthened if the author had mentioned relevants details of all contributing
factors .
The mayor's welcome note that appeared at the conference states that Ketner Springs is the
ideal place to locate a business as Ketner springs offers renowned transportation systems and
award winning parks and recreation departments. Moreover the mayors claims that Ketner
springs offers perfect locale for any business office or factory .The argument is likely to fail due to
unconvincing logic and illogical assumptions.Moreover the argument does not substantiate the
claims with relevant data to draw the conclusion from the given premise .
First , the mayor assumes that renowned transportation and award winning parks and recreation
department are the sole factors which make a place ideal for the business.There are several
factors such as the market accessibility , transporation cost as well as customer preferences
which could account for a place to be an ideal one for business .The argument does not take into
account any of these and thus ignores the possibility of these playing a major role in the success
of business in Ketner Springs .The argument could have been strengthened if the author had
mentioned relevant statistics pertaining to the other contributing factors to support his claim.
Second, Mayors claims families love living at Ketner Springs as Ketner's schools have the lowest
student to teacher ratio in the state and its restaurants boats more kiddie menu options than
anywhere else in the country . In this claims the mayors fails to consider the possibility that
despite some of the positives there may be glaring negatives factors affecting the life of Ketner
springs such as criminal activities and safety of citizens, cost of living etc .In case Ketner springs is
highly unsafe for its citizens , the families would not prefer living in the city .Moreover if the cost
of living is extremely high as compared to suburban areas ,families may prefer the suburban
areas to Ketner Springs .Clearly Mayor need to elaborate more on the various factors concerning
the families preference for the city to add credibility to his claims .
Finally , The mayors concludes that if one needs to locate a business or a office , one would find
perfect locale in Ketner springs but fails to corroborate his claims with supporting evidences .
The mayor should address what constitutes a perfect locale and present relevant data with
concrete examples to support his claims .I the absence of the supporting evidences this this
claims sounds weak and unconvincing
In conclusion the argument is flawed due to above mentioned reasons .The mayors claims that
Ketner springs will provide the perfect locale for any business is weak and unconvincing as
mayor does not substantiate his claims and makes rash assumptions to draw the conclusion. It
could have been strengthened if the author had mentioned relevant details of all contributing
factors to support his claims .
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do not get stuck ...if u have to get high score ..u have to get the last few correct as they shoot
score ...but if u get a series of them wrong ....u r screwed ....so keeep a good time for the end
thats ur major target ...take decision and move fast ...as anything getting u stuck...can go either
ways ...butu loose time for sure ...so just go ahead ...and cruise fast !!
The mayor's welcome note that appeared that appeared at the conference states that ketner
Springs is the ideal place to locate a business as ketner springs offers renowned transporation
systme and award winning parks and recreation departments. Moreover the mayors claims that
ketner springs offers perfect locale for any business office or factory .The argument is likely to fail
due to unconvincing logic and illogical assumptions.Moreover the argument does not
susbattiate the claims with relevant data to draw the conclusion from the given premise .
First , the mayor assumes that renowned transporation and award winning parks and recreation
department are the sole factors which make a place ideal for the business.There are several
factors such the market accessibility , transporation cost as well as customer preferences which
could account for a place to be an ideal one for business .the argment does not take into account
any of these and thus ignores the possibility of these playing a mojor role in the successof
business in Ketner Springs .the argument could have been strengthened if the author had
mentioned relevants statistics pertaining to the other contributing factors to support his claim.
Second, Mayors claims families love living as Ketner's schools have the lowest student to teacher
ratio in the state and its restaurants boats more kissie menu options than anywhere else in the
country . In this cliams the mayors fails to consider the possibility that despite some of the
positives there may be glaring negatives factors affecting the life of Ketner springs such as
criminal activities and safety of citizens, cost of living etc .In case Ketner springs is highly unsafe
for its citizens , the families would not prefer living in the city .Moroevr if the cost of living is
extremely high as comapred to subusrban areas ,families may prefer the suburban areas to
Ketner Springs .Clearly Mayor need to elaborate more on the various factors concerning the
families prefernec for the city to add credibility to his claims .
Finally , The mayors concludes that if one needs to locate a business or a office , one would find
perfect locale in Ketner springs but fails to corroborate hsi claims with supporting evidences . the
mayor should afddress what constitues a [refect locale and present relevant data with concrete
exaples to supprt his claims .I the abscence of the supporting evidences this this cliams sounds
weak and unconvincing
In conclusion the argument is flawed due to above mentioned reasons .The mayors claims that
ketner springs is will provide the perfect locale for any business is weak and unconvincing as
mayor does not substantiate his claims and makes rash assumptions to draw the conclusion It
could have been strengthened if the author had mentioned relevants details of all contributing
factors .
The mayor's welcome note that appeared at the conference states that Ketner Springs is the
ideal place to locate a business as Ketner springs offers renowned transportation systems and
award winning parks and recreation departments. Moreover the mayors claims that Ketner
springs offers perfect locale for any business office or factory .The argument is likely to fail due to
unconvincing logic and illogical assumptions.Moreover the argument does not substantiate the
claims with relevant data to draw the conclusion from the given premise .
First , the mayor assumes that renowned transportation and award winning parks and recreation
department are the sole factors which make a place ideal for the business.There are several
factors such as the market accessibility , transporation cost as well as customer preferences
which could account for a place to be an ideal one for business .The argument does not take into
account any of these and thus ignores the possibility of these playing a major role in the success
of business in Ketner Springs .The argument could have been strengthened if the author had
mentioned relevant statistics pertaining to the other contributing factors to support his claim.
Second, Mayors claims families love living at Ketner Springs as Ketner's schools have the lowest
student to teacher ratio in the state and its restaurants boats more kiddie menu options than
anywhere else in the country . In this claims the mayors fails to consider the possibility that
despite some of the positives there may be glaring negatives factors affecting the life of Ketner
springs such as criminal activities and safety of citizens, cost of living etc .In case Ketner springs is
highly unsafe for its citizens , the families would not prefer living in the city .Moreover if the cost
of living is extremely high as compared to suburban areas ,families may prefer the suburban
areas to Ketner Springs .Clearly Mayor need to elaborate more on the various factors
concerning the families preference for the city to add credibility to his claims .
Finally , The mayors concludes that if one needs to locate a business or a office , one would find
perfect locale in Ketner springs but fails to corroborate his claims with supporting evidences .
The mayor should address what constitutes a perfect locale and present relevant data with
concrete examples to support his claims .I the absence of the supporting evidences this this
claims sounds weak and unconvincing
In conclusion the argument is flawed due to above mentioned reasons .The mayors claims that
Ketner springs will provide the perfect locale for any business is weak and unconvincing as
mayor does not substantiate his claims and makes rash assumptions to draw the conclusion. It
could have been strengthened if the author had mentioned relevant details of all contributing
factors to support his claims .