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Rationale
The craft of writing a vivid description was dissected and presented to the
students in progressive increments to gradually develop their knowledge of
descriptive writing. The sentiment presented to the students will focus on how
to create descriptions which the reader can easily grasp, this will involve
understanding the use of figurative language such as simile or metaphor paired
with the descriptive focus on sensory elements to invoke an empathetic view
from the reader, essentially the descriptions should focus on aspects which
appeal to a readers sense of sight, sound, touch, smell or taste which adds depth
to the description.
Before the students are able to compose their own pieces of descriptive,
imaginative writing; they are introduced to the fundamentals of the craft with
the aid of the model text. This is the basis to the Gradual Release of
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Responsibility pedagogy, which underlines the process of the three lessons. This
approach to teaching relies on a process of gradually decreasing the teachers
participation in the class work, eventually promoting the student to
independently apply their acquired skill (Howard, 2016). This system can be
identified in the overall course of the lesson plans as well as in each class lesson,
with the purpose of leading the students towards accomplishing the Syllabus
content point of a student Responds to and compose texts using alternative,
creative and imaginative ways of expressing ideas, recognising, valuing and
celebrating originality and inventiveness (BOS, 2012,p124).
The first lesson of the sequential plans features the highest level of teacher
involvement, this first lesson acts as the point of front loading information
(Ganon, Howie & Sawyer, 2010), which will influence the structure of the
following lessons. The rationale behind the teachers significant involvement in
the first lesson is influenced by Nancie Atwells discussion on the importance of
becoming a writer in the classroom, much like Atwells encouragement of
personal experience shaping writing for her students (Atwell, 1998), the teacher
in the first lesson stresses the importance of tangible and personal qualities in
descriptive writing. The procedure of the lesson follows the teachers
explanation of identifying effective descriptive language, progressing to the close
reading of Bradburys text involving the students independently highlighting
elements of the text which matches their new understanding of descriptive
language from the lesson. The last activity of the lesson touches on the stage four
outcome EN4-1A a student responds to and composes texts for understanding,
interpretation, critical analysis, imaginative expression and pleasure (BOS,
2011, p,15), this is seen when the students are asked to make a critical
observation of the story and identify vivid descriptions in the imaginative
writing.
The second lesson plan plays the part of furthering the gradual release model as
the students are asked to attempt a piece of descriptive writing. However this is
not the lesson when they will accomplish an original piece of writing, as they will
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The third and final lesson intends accomplish the overall aim of enabling
students able to apply the craft of writing vivid descriptions, by this stage of the
plans they are expected to do so with little help from the teacher and with basic
stimulus. The short story, which demonstrates the craft, has a limited influence
on this lesson as the students are intended to compose a text that demonstrates
originality according to the overall syllabus expectation of the lessons (BOS,
2012). The supports available to the students are a range of images that may
inspire their direction for description as well as a summary of useful techniques
learnt across the three lessons, the central activity to the lesson is associated
with the model text when the students are asked to generate a description of a
new planet inspired by the stimulus so they structure of the writing may be
similar but the descriptive features need to be original.
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Lesson one
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During the role call the students are asked to copy into their notebooks the text written
(or Projected) on the board. The text will outline the definitions of Analogy, Similie and
metaphor.
Accompanying each definition will be a single sentence demonstration of the device and
its use e.g Simile: a figure of speech involving the comparison of one thing with
another thing of a different kind, used to make a description more emphatic or
vivid (e.g. as brave as a lion ).
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Ask the students to construct their own single sentence examples of these
devices. Indicate that effective use of the descriptive features should appeal to a
readers senses of sight, sound, touch, smell or taste.
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Continuation of single sentence activity, take the time to guide students towards
the correct use of the device they are attempting to use and terminology used to
promote sensory engagement.
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Teacher will distribute printouts and commence reading of the short story All
Summer in a Day. The duration of this reading the students are expected to
highlight the descriptive language features they are able to identify with in the
text as it is read. The reading should take under 10 minutes to complete.
50 At the conclusion of the reading the teacher asks the students to offer their
findings of vivid description in the reading, this is checked against a pre written
annotation of the reading which only the teacher.
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Lesson Two
What is being taught in this lesson?
This lesson expands on the content of the previous lesson by asking students to
create their own vivid descriptions of a day on Venus, according to the fictional
world created in Bradburys All Summer in a Day.
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for this lesson plan in order to focus on the skill of descriptive writing, in place of
understanding the novel.
20 The teacher will distribute a worksheet. Using this worksheet the students will
begin an activity where they are to imagine they are new students at the school
on Venus. Using this inspiration, students will be asked to provide a paragraph
response to three questions; students must demonstrate at least one use of
analogy, simile or metaphor in each response to describe their experiences on
30 Bradburys Venus.
50 Students are asked to volunteer their responses, at the conclusion of the class
teacher will collect the worksheets and assess the accuracy of the students use of
sensory description and language devices to prepare effective aid for the
following lesson.
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Lesson Three
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The students will be handed a worksheet, which has six detailed images of a
random environment.
Students will be informed that todays lesson will require them to produce two
paragraphs of text which vividly reimagines an environment inspired by one of
the provided stimulus images of which they are free to choose from. Allowing the
students to structure the response as discovering a new planet, in a similar
fashion to the structure of All Summer in a Day, may bolster the activity.
20 The students will begin to analyse the images and decide which stimulus they
will utilise. At this time the teacher will present information on the board which
will aid in the completion of the activity, this information will be based off the
results of the teachers collection of responses of from lesson two. Particular
areas of weakness consistent throughout the students can be addressed here.
Allow this time for students to write. Teacher will be present and available for
30 assisting students.
Allow this time for students to write. Teacher will be present and available for
40 assisting students.
At the conclusion of the lesson, the teacher will ask the students to offer an
50 example of their own descriptions, grouped by their respective stimulus images.
The ideal outcome of the lesson plan will result each student creating at least one
original vivid description.
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Resources
Atwell, N. (1998). In the middle: Writing, reading, and learning with adolescents.
Upper Montclair, NJ: Boynton/Cook.
Board of Studies. (2012). English K-10 syllabus: NSW syllabus for the Australian
curriculum. Sydney: Board of Studies NSW.
Gannon, S., Howie, M., & Sawyer, W. (2010). Charged with meaning: Re-viewing
English (3rd ed.). Putney, N.S.W.: Phoenix Education.
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Appendix Material
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by him and nothing else. They edged away her possible future.
from her, they would not look at her. She "Get away !" The boy gave her another
felt them go away. And this was because push. "Whatre you waiting for?"
she would play no games with them in the Then, for the first time, she turned and
echoing tunnels of the underground city. If looked at him. And what she was waiting
they tagged her and ran, she stood blinking for was in her eyes.
after them and did not follow. When the "Well, dont wait around here !" cried the
class sang songs about happiness and life boy savagely. "You wont see nothing!"
and games her lips barely moved. Only Her lips moved. "Nothing !" he cried. "It
when they sang about the sun and the was all a joke, wasnt it?"
summer did her lips move as she watched He turned to the other children. "Nothings
the drenched windows. And then, of happening today. Is it ?"
course, the biggest crime of all was that They all blinked at him and then,
she had come here only five years ago understanding, laughed and shook their
from Earth, and she remembered the sun heads. "Nothing, nothing !"
and the way the sun was and the sky was "Oh, but," Margot whispered, her eyes
when she was four in Ohio. helpless. "But this is the day, the scientists
And they, predict, they say, they know, the sun"
they had been on Venus all their lives, and
they had been only two years old when "All a joke !" said the boy, and seized her
last the sun came out and had long since roughly.
forgotten the color and heat of it and the "Hey, everyone, lets put her in a closet
way it really was. before the teacher comes !"
But Margot remembered. "Its like a "No," said Margot, falling back.
penny," she said once, eyes closed. "No They surged about her, caught her up and
its not!" the children cried. "Its like a bore her, protesting, and then pleading,
fire," she said, "in the stove." and then crying, back into a tunnel, a
room, a closet, where they slammed and
"Youre lying, you dont remember !" locked the door. They stood looking at the
cried the children. door and saw it tremble from her beating
But she remembered and stood quietly and throwing herself against it. They heard
apart from all of them and watched the her muffled cries.
patterning windows. And once, a month Then, smiling, they turned and went out
ago, she had refused to shower in the and back down the tunnel, just as the
school shower rooms, had clutched her teacher arrived.
hands to her ears and over her head, "Ready, children ?" She glanced at her
screaming the water mustnt touch her watch.
head. So after that, dimly, dimly, she "Yes !" said everyone.
sensed it, she was different and they knew "Are we all here ?"
her difference and kept away. There was "Yes !"
talk that her father and mother were taking The rain slacked still more. They crowded
her back to Earth next year; it seemed vital to the huge door. The rain stopped. It was
to her that they do so, though it would as if, in the midst of a film concerning an
mean the loss of thousands of dollars to avalanche, a tornado, a hurricane, a
her family. And so, the children hated her volcanic eruption, something had, first,
for all these reasons of big and little gone wrong with the sound apparatus, thus
consequence. They hated her pale snow muffling and finally cutting off all noise,
face, her waiting silence, her thinness, and all of the blasts and repercussions and
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thunders, and then, second, ripped the film squinted at the sun until the tears ran down
from the projector and inserted in its place their faces; they put their hands up to that
a beautiful tropical slide which did not yellowness and that amazing blueness and
move or tremor. The world ground to a they breathed of the fresh, fresh air and
standstill. The silence was so immense and listened and listened to the silence which
unbelievable that you felt your ears had suspended them in a blessed sea of no
been stuffed or you had lost your hearing sound and no motion. They looked at Commented [nc6]: The sea of no sound and no motion
altogether. everything and savored everything. Then, is a powerful metaphor for the overwhelming quiet
sensation felt by the children in the absence of rain and
The children put their hands to their ears. wildly, like animals escaped from their storm.
They stood apart. The door slid back and caves, they ran and ran in shouting circles.
the smell of the silent, waiting world came
in to them. The sun came out. It was the They ran for an hour and did not stop
color of flaming bronze and it was very running. And then - In the midst of their
large. And the sky around it was a blazing running one of the girls wailed. Everyone
blue tile color. And the jungle burned with stopped.
sunlight as the children, released from The girl, standing in the open, held out her
their spell, rushed out, yelling into the hand. "Oh, look, look," she said,
springtime. trembling. Commented [nc4]: The jungle did not in fact burn, it is
They came slowly to look at her opened insinuated that the bright sunlight in contrast to the
overcast looks similar to a blaze.
"Now, dont go too far," called the teacher palm. In the center of it, cupped and huge,
after them. "Youve only two hours, you was a single raindrop. She began to cry,
know. You wouldnt want to get caught looking at it. They glanced quietly at the
out !" sun. "Oh. Oh."
But they were running and turning their A few cold drops fell on their noses and
faces up to the sky and feeling the sun on their cheeks and their mouths. The sun
their cheeks like a warm iron; they were faded behind a stir of mist. A wind blew
taking off their jackets and letting the sun cold around them. They turned and started
burn their arms. to walk back toward the underground
"Oh, its better than the sun lamps, isnt it house, their hands at their sides, their
?" smiles vanishing away. Commented [nc7]: This plays on the physical senses of
"Much, much better !" A boom of thunder startled them and like the children, as the sunshine ends the rain returns and
this is represented by their simultaneous sobbing. In this
They stopped running and stood in the leaves before a new hurricane, they moment tear drops are the same as rain drops.
great jungle that covered Venus, that grew tumbled upon each other and ran.
and never stopped growing, tumultuously, Lightning struck ten miles away, five
even as you watched it. It was a nest of miles away, a mile, a half mile. The sky
octopi, clustering up great arms of darkened into midnight in a flash.
fleshlike weed, wavering, flowering in this
brief spring. It was the color of rubber and They stood in the doorway of the Commented [nc5]: The author likens the alien plants to
ash, this jungle, from the many years underground for a moment until it was an octopus, this is a tangible visual image for the reader.
without sun. It was the color of stones and raining hard. Then they closed the door
white cheeses and ink, and it was the color and heard the gigantic sound of the rain
of the moon. falling in tons and avalanches, everywhere
The children lay out, laughing, on the and forever.
jungle mattress, and heard it sigh and "Will it be seven more years ?"
squeak under them resilient and alive. "Yes. Seven."
They ran among the trees, they slipped and Then one of them gave a little cry.
fell, they pushed each other, they played "Margot !"
hideand-seek and tag, but most of all they "What ?"
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