Peer Review: Research Outline/Draft 1

Reviewer:__Edwin Contreras___________________

Reviewee:_______Ayra Nunez______________

Directions:
Look at the content of your peers outline/draft. Make marginal comments and a summative
comment for the author of the paper which you are reviewing. Carefully consider the authors
implementation of the P.I.E elements in each of their slices. Also consider how and why they
need to be changed. BE CLEAR about what you are saying and why you are saying it.

Keep in mind the following (but also include things you think should be added):
Does each P.I.E element do what it is supposed to in each of the slices?
Does each slice have only one flavor? (is the slice talking about more than one thing?)
Is each slice placed logically within the paper?
Did you understand the content of the slice as it was presented? Tell the author what you
did understand and didnt.
Are the slices understandable for an outsider? Explain what the author can do to make it
more understandable.
Did you understand the content of the paper as a whole? (Is this an effective research
paper? Explain)

Write detailed and helpful comments that will help your peer consider how to
better shape their slices to make a well formed research paper.

Prompt

Extended Response: In an academic voice, discuss the most/least important skill (particular ability or
expertise) or idea (understanding or awareness) that can be gained from this course by an outsider
student considering the readings which have been completed.

You may discuss:

Why one reading is more important than another based on the ideas presented in those readings.
A particular unit within the course.
A critique on a major assignment within the course.
Other (See me for approval)

Format and Requirements

 1300-1700 words, 12pt Times New Roman, single spaced, 1 inch margins.
Proper title and MLA header.
Correct comma use and sentence boundary awareness.
Use MLA format (8th edition) for in-text citations.
A works cited page is required.
You must use Detached Impersonal Style for the entire paper.
Quotes may be no longer than 3 lines.

Summative Comments:

The outline seems strong and like it could contruct a well thought out essay. In the
intro, you begin it by explaining certain terms and then in your thesis you use those
terms, eliminating chances for confusion, which is good. Later in the essay you
mention a relationship between the student and the authors. Go more into this and
explain what that relationship is. In another area, you mention traits of an insider,
but then don't clarify if what you speak of in your information are those traits. You
should clarify this in the explanation, if not when you mention the traits, reiterate
that they're traits. Your sentence about students making RRs isn't very clear and
you should restructure it so it could be understood quicker. In another point you
mention ML students but then don't connect the information or explanation to
them. In your last point, you mention an important skill that we should avoid. It
feels as if you should decide whether it is important or if we should avoid it.