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Brenda Alvarado
Professor Beadle
English 115
7 December 2017
Improvement is an award of countless effort and dedication applied to a certain area. Success
is an example of improvement, which is what I have gained from English 115. At the beginning
of my first University level English course, I was completely unprepared and unaware of the
standards that were expected from my writing. My writing skills were basic and they met regular
university standards, which is good, but not great. Through various Learning Resource Center
visits, professor office hour appointments, and multiple drafts, I have drastically improved my
A thesis is the most important element to an essay, which is why it is critical to go above and
beyond when composing one. During the first weeks of class, we reviewed thesis creations and
the key elements that make it up. Thesis Statements should answer multiple questions like, who,
what, where, when, how, and why. I was nervous when it came to composing a thesis because
from a weak thesis, comes a weak essay/argument. As I progressed in the course, my thesis
improved and became effective. In the beginning of the course, we were assigned an essay
named, Project Space, which asked the writer to reveal the monstrous aspects of a particular
space. I decided to use a hospital as my space and reveal injections, illness, and oxygen masks as
the monstrous aspects. This was my first essay composed in this course and my thesis was not
properly written. When I wrote my first draft, I stated, At the spark of an illness, a hospital is
where humans, for example myself, are held captive until cleansed for return to the outside
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world, but at the same time newborn babies are cleansed for their entrance to the outside world.
Clearly, this thesis statement did not respond to the prompt at all proving it to be ineffective. I
decided to take my essay to the Learning Resource Center and confide in them for their help.
Right away, they told me my thesis was lacking content and gave me various suggestions on
what to include. After my LRC visit, I proudly wrote, Through these monstrous aspects
inhabiting this space, the fear of always having to come back for a cure, as well as being
consumed by an illness and leaving behind loved ones is revealed. It took multiple drafts of a
thesis to finally achieve the right one, which is why drafting is one of the skills I value. Drafting
has been an important contributing factor to my improvement in this course. It allows me to pour
The second out of the three projects was named, Project Text, which asked the writer to
compare two films and argue if the monster in the film changed, stayed the same or in between.
It also asked to consider why these changes or similarities were significant. I decided to argue
that the monster had changed through foreign interaction, weapon improvement, and methods of
termination. In my opinion, this revealed the fears and anxieties of the country affected. This was
my second essay composed in this course and my final thesis improved greatly, as stated by a
comment from my professor. Before achieving this thesis statement, I had composed, Through
the Godzilla films, changes over the years were spotted, including appearance, government
collaboration, and methods of termination resulting in the fear and anxieties of Japan. For this
essay, I took my draft to my professor and asked him to review it for me. He congratulated me
on my thesis improvement, but told me he knew I could work a bit harder on it. Once I left, I
dedicated hours to drafting my thesis and made up a total of five thesis statements before
selecting the right one. After visiting my professor and reviewing his feedback, I thoughtfully
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wrote, Through the 1954 and 2016 Godzilla films, we can spot the change over the years of
debut, foreign interaction and government collaboration, technology and weapon improvement,
and methods of termination; which in turn resulted in the fear and anxieties of the population, as
well as the reconstruction of Japan. Visiting my professor allowed me to discover what I was
lacking in my thesis statement, which gave me a learning experience and helped me achieve a
higher grade. In my first thesis statement, I didnt clarify which films I was comparing and my
sentence structure was poor. In my final thesis statement, I stated what films were being used and
The last project we did in English 115 was named, Project Media, which asked the writer to
relate a monster to a current issue in America. I decided to relate aliens to the issue of racism by
definitions and acts of discrimination. This was my last essay in this course and I felt passionate
about my thesis because I only made two drafts before deciding on my final one. I composed this
thesis by myself with no help and I believe that it made my argument very strong. For this essay,
I wrote, Through the negligence of aliens, immigrants, and people of color, racism is defined as
a clear factor, which in turn reveals the discrimination of others appearance and origin all
throughout American society. After having gone through two projects, the third project was
easier for me to do. I had gathered all the suggestions from the previous essays and applied them
to this final essay. I used my drafting skills and I made sure to answer all of the questions that the
thesis needs.
In the beginning of the semester, I made a goal for myself to improve my thesis creation.
Now, at the end of the semester I can excitingly say that I have achieved my goal. I couldnt
have done it without all the resources available to me and the drafting skill I developed. The
LRC visits and professor office hours allowed me to catch my mistakes on time and fix them. A
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good writer is one that grows and improves his or her writing. A growth mindset is what helped
me develop into a better writer and improve my writing skills. As I go on further with my
university courses, I wish to keep improving as a writer and continue to utilize the resources