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1) Peer Review Sheet: Synthesis

Writer: Tatiana Dashiell


Reviewer: Kasey Perry

Paragraph/Essay Structure:
In synthesis writing, a topic common to multiple articles should be extracted and paraphrased by
the writer. Upon reading your peer’s synthesis paragraph/essay, what do you determine is the
topic?
The topic is the death penalty, but I’m not sure what your position is on the topic? Are you
writing to support or go against the death penalty?

Also in synthesis writing, the common theme(s) of multiple articles should extracted and
paraphrased. What theme(s) does the synthesis explore?
The history of death penalty, death penalty in the U.S, and how it affects the African American
community specifically.

After analyzing the connection between the topic and theme(s), critique the quality of this
connection. Is the connection between the articles’ shared topic and theme(s) clear, or does
some information seem disconnected? Explain how the synthesis’ connection between topic and
theme(s) is either successful or unsuccessful.
Your information seems to be connected but you could maybe introduce the source in each
paragraph more in depth so that each paragraph flows together more fluidly.

Is there enough support and detail for the synthesis’ message to be clear, or do you need more
information from the synthesis writer? Offer at least one suggestion (or ask at least one
question) for further development.
I think if you introduced the authors of your sources a little more or possibly gave some
background information on them then that would help your synthesis.

Synthesis-Specific Components:
Mandatory to this synthesis assignment are bibliographic statements of source articles. Has your
peer included bibliographic statements? How are the bibliographic statements written, with a
reporting verb, “according to,” or some other method of citing the source article? How many are
there? List them below.
Include in text citations using the authors you have listed in your bibliography. Also, towards the
beginning of your paragraphs, rather than saying “the author talks about” in every paragraph,
change up how you lead into the quote to avoid being repetitive.

In writing an extended summary and synthesis, reminder phrases are crucial; these phrases
remind the reader that s/he is indeed reading a synthesis, not original ideas. Has your peer
included reminder phrases (or words)? If so, name a few examples; if not, suggest how the
writer might include reminder phrases to improve the synthesis quality.
Add in your in text citations so that whoever is reading knows you paraphrased something from
another author. Adding “according to ___,” and following the quote with an in text citation will
remind the reader you are quoting another author.

In synthesis writing, it’s important that the writer only include information from source articles.
Has the synthesis writer refrained from including his/her personal opinion, argument,
agreement/disagreement, and/or reaction on the topic? If the author has included statements like
these, mention them below, explaining why these statements don’t fit the specifications of
synthesis writing.
All of your information is unbiased, I don’t see anywhere you included your own opinion.

Is a clear outline readily detectable to your reading? Explain why or why not. In other words,
why is the essay organized well, or how could the organization of sources improve?
The order of your paragraphs is orderly and makes clear sense as you started with the history in
the first paragraph. Each paragraph also defines a different idea from the one previous which is
good, maybe just connect the paragraphs a little more to improve the way your synthesis flows.

Review your peer’s synthesis again and draft a brief outline of the synthesis.

Topic: Death Penalty


Theme Organization:
History of death penalty
Clear definition of capital punishment/death penalty
Role of doctor’s
Why the lethal injection was developed
Moral dilemmas many doctors faced
China’s rules for death penalty
United States still practice death penalty
6 states gotten rid of death penalty
How much money they will save if they abolish death penalty
New Mexico’s road to abolishment
Death penalty affects African Americans
Various examples to support
Gary Graham case
What he testified prior to execution
How impoverished communities are affected

Based on the outline you’ve written above, how would you say the article synthesis is organized
(e.g. general-specific, specific-general, cause/effect, debate positions, problem/solution, a
combination, other organizational scheme(s))? Name at least one way in which the synthesis is
organized.
Your synthesis seems to be general-specific as it clearly identifies what the death penalty is, not
so much as arguing for one side or the other.

Flow: Make sure the synthesis reads smoothly; you do not want a collection of sentences that
does not flow.
Consider how well the synthesis flows. Do transition, summary, and synthesis words create an
synthesis paragraph/essay that flows well? If so, mention an example; if not, offer a suggestion
regarding how the author may improve the synthesis’ flow.
Maybe improve a little on the transitioning from one paragraph to another. I also think that if you
introduce the authors of each source in a different way each paragraph, your text will flow easier.

Specific to summaries/synthesis, writers must choose transitions words that demonstrate the
relationship between main ideas; these transition words demonstrate the patterns of organization
found in the source article and/or connections across the synthesized content. If the author
doesn’t have words that express relationship meanings, which words might you suggest? If the
author has used transition words of the specified sort, mention a few.
Including a few transition words between your ideas would help your synthesis a lot and would
combine your three paragraphs to better support your overall idea. Maybe use phrases such as
“as well as stated above” or something similar.

At Last:
What did you like the best about the writer’s synthesis?
I liked your overall topic and how you executed the synthesis. Your information and sources
worked well together and was a good topic to choose for your synthesis. The sources you chose
really supported your overall topic as well and all in all I thought your synthesis paper was good.

2) Peer Review Sheet: Synthesis


Writer:Tatiana Dashiell
Reviewer:Cade Hepner

Paragraph/Essay Structure

In synthesis writing, a topic common to multiple articles should be extracted and paraphrased by
the writer. Upon reading your peer’s synthesis paragraph/essay, what do you determine?
Teachers

Also in synthesis writing, the common theme(s) of multiple articles should extracted and
paraphrased. What theme(s) does the synthesis explore? There’s a shortage of teachers.

After analyzing the connection between the topic and theme(s), critique the quality of this
connection. Is the connection between the articles’ shared topic and theme(s) clear, or does
some information seem disconnected? Explain how the synthesis’s connection between topic
and theme(s) is either successful or unsuccessful. All the sources deal with teachers and the
shortage of them. One says teachers have been leading, another defined and details why there are
shortages, and the last one compares shortages of the 90s to now.

Is there enough support and detail for the synthesis’s message to be clear, or do you need more
information from the synthesis writer? Offer at least one suggestion (or ask at least one
question) for further development.
I think with the theme being teacher shortages there is enough details and facts about them but I
think you could continue to delve into more specifics.
Synthesis-Specific Components

Mandatory to this synthesis assignment are bibliographic statements of source articles. Has your
peer included bibliographic statements? How are the bibliographic statements written, with a
reporting verb, “according to,” or some other method of citing the source article? How many are
there? List them below.
The article states, or the author talks about seem to be the two used.
In writing an extended summary and synthesis, reminder phrases are crucial; these phrases
remind the reader that s/he is indeed reading a synthesis, not original ideas. Has your peer
included reminder phrases (or words)? If so, name a few examples; if not, suggest how the
writer might include reminder phrases to improve the synthesis’s quality.
In synthesis writing, it’s important that the writer only include information from source articles.
Has the synthesis writer refrained from including his/her personal opinion, argument,
agreement/disagreement, and/or reaction on the topic? If the author has included statements like
these, mention them below, explaining why these statements don’t fit the specifications of
synthesis writing.
No she just states the refutes of the articles.
Is a clear outline readily detectable to your reading? Explain why or why not. In other words,
why is the essay organized well, or how could the organization of sources improve?
Review your peer’s synthesis again and draft a brief outline of the synthesis.
The outline is the three articles all organized into there own paragragh.
Topic:
Topic is kind of unclear as she goes right into the theme of teacher shortages
Theme Organization:
Teacher count now compared to 90s, the reason for shortages, and why they quit.
Based on the outline you’ve written above, how would you say the article synthesis is organized
(e.g. general-specific, specific-general, cause/effect, debate positions, problem/solution, a
combination, other organizational scheme(s))? Name at least one way in which the synthesis is
organized.
I think this topic is difficult to go from general to specific, all three paragraphs are about teacher
shortages in there own respect, I don’t think you can clearly develop a general to specific outline.
Audience Expectations
Consider how well the author has written her/his synthesis with regard to audience. The writer
should provide brief definitions of key terms, assuming his/her readers are unfamiliar with the
topic. Would you say the author has composed the synthesis for a general public, or does the
synthesis instead assume background knowledge? If the synthesis assumes too much
background knowledge, where should additional definitions of key terms be included? Highlight
an example of either a major-specific concept which is explained to a general audience, or
explain what needs to be further unpacked. The topic and then are pretty simple so not a need
for backrground knowledge and is easily readable for the public. A major specific concept it how
teachers are leaving there line of work and this isn’t in need of background knowledge.

Word Choice
Consider the verbs the author has used in her/his synthesis. Are the verbs informal (e.g. put up
with, look into), or are the verbs academic (e.g. tolerate, investigate)? If the verbs are informal,
how might they be formalized? Find at least one formal/informal verb to comment on. The
article talks about is used a few times, articles can’t talk therefore this could be consideree
informal but overall good job.

Consider the adjectives/nouns the author has used in her/his synthesis. Are the adjectives/nouns
informal (e.g. nice, a lot of), or are the adjective/nouns academic (e.g. robust, considerable, an
integral part of)? If the adjectives/nouns are informal, how might they be formalized? Find at
least one formal/informal adjective or noun to comment on.
I think she does a good job balancing, there isn’t any crazy informal diction but also nothing that
you’d need a dictionary for. I found she said the data is still goin on which is an informal phrase
because she needs to say the research of more data is still being developed.
Flow: Make sure the synthesis reads smoothly; you do not want a collection of sentences that
does not flow.

Consider how well the synthesis flows. Do transition, summary, and synthesis words create an
synthesis paragraph/essay that flows well? If so, mention an example; if not, offer a suggestion
regarding how the author may improve the synthesis’s flow.
There aren’t many transition phrases but it’s all similar topically, to connect give a hint at what
your next source or is going to illustrate in the topic prior.
Specific to summaries/synthesis, writers must choose transitions words that demonstrate the
relationship between main ideas; these transition words demonstrate the patterns of organization
found in the source article and/or connections across the synthesized content. If the author
doesn’t have words that express relationship meanings, which words might you suggest? If the
author has used transition words of the specified sort, mention a few.
She can use anything to first next and last to furthermore, and in conclusion.
At Last
What did you like the best about the writer’s synthesis?
How easily she made it to understand and not having anything to difficult or something that’s
you’d need to look up.

3) Peer Review Sheet: Synthesis


Writer:
Reviewer: Kristen Crook

Paragraph/Essay Structure

In synthesis writing, a topic common to multiple articles should be extracted and paraphrased by
the writer. Upon reading your peer’s synthesis paragraph/essay, what do you determine is the
topic? Teacher shortages

Also in synthesis writing, the common theme(s) of multiple articles should extracted and
paraphrased. What theme(s) does the synthesis explore? The shortage of teachers in urban areas
and teacher retention
After analyzing the connection between the topic and theme(s), critique the quality of this
connection. Is the connection between the articles’ shared topic and theme(s) clear, or does
some information seem disconnected? Explain how the synthesis’s connection between topic
and theme(s) is either successful or unsuccessful.
I think this is all good detail and information but the way the paragraphs start kind of disconnect
them from the previous one, so maybe bringing the different paragraphs together by relating it to
the last one would help with the flow of the paper.

Is there enough support and detail for the synthesis’s message to be clear, or do you need more
information from the synthesis writer? Offer at least one suggestion (or ask at least one
question) for further development. There’s a lot of detail.

Synthesis-Specific Components

Mandatory to this synthesis assignment are bibliographic statements of source articles. Has your
peer included bibliographic statements? How are the bibliographic statements written, with a
reporting verb, “according to,” or some other method of citing the source article? How many are
there? List them below. There are a lot of bibliographic statements used such as “The scholarly
journal “What Can We Learn About Retaining Teachers from PDS Teachers' Voices?” by Holly
J. Thornton” and “Richard M. Ingersoll talks about...”

In writing an extended summary and synthesis, reminder phrases are crucial; these phrases
remind the reader that s/he is indeed reading a synthesis, not original ideas. Has your peer
included reminder phrases (or words)? If so, name a few examples; if not, suggest how the
writer might include reminder phrases to improve the synthesis’s quality.
Yes, there were reminder phrases used especially in the third to the last paragraph where she
used “Ingersoll states…”
In synthesis writing, it’s important that the writer only include information from source articles.
Has the synthesis writer refrained from including his/her personal opinion, argument,
agreement/disagreement, and/or reaction on the topic? If the author has included statements like
these, mention them below, explaining why these statements don’t fit the specifications of
synthesis writing.
There’s only article information used.
Is a clear outline readily detectable to your reading? Explain why or why not. In other words,
why is the essay organized well, or how could the organization of sources improve?
Review your peer’s synthesis again and draft a brief outline of the synthesis.
I think the essay is organized well, but like I said above, relating the paragraphs with their
previous ones would help. Also I think Professor Matheson said not to have distinct differences
in the articles in separate paragraphs. For example, whenever you put “In this article…” or “In
this scholarly article…” at the beginning of a paragraph, but rather making the paragraphs flow
and using your synthesis transition words within the paragraphs.

Topic:

Theme Organization:

Based on the outline you’ve written above, how would you say the article synthesis is organized
(e.g. general-specific, specific-general, cause/effect, debate positions, problem/solution, a
combination, other organizational scheme(s))? Name at least one way in which the synthesis is
organized. General Specific.

Audience Expectations
Consider how well the author has written her/his synthesis with regard to audience. 0The writer
should provide brief definitions of key terms, assuming his/her readers are unfamiliar with the
topic. Would you say the author has composed the synthesis for a general public, or does the
synthesis instead assume background knowledge? If the synthesis assumes too much
background knowledge, where should additional definitions of key terms be included? Highlight
an example of either a major-specific concept which is explained to a general audience, or
explain what needs to be further unpacked. It’s composed for the general public.

Word Choice
Consider the verbs the author has used in her/his synthesis. Are the verbs informal (e.g. put up
with, look into), or are the verbs academic (e.g. tolerate, investigate)? If the verbs are informal,
how might they be formalized? Find at least one formal/informal verb to comment on.

Consider the adjectives/nouns the author has used in her/his synthesis. Are the adjectives/nouns
informal (e.g. nice, a lot of), or are the adjective/nouns academic (e.g. robust, considerable, an
integral part of)? If the adjectives/nouns are informal, how might they be formalized? Find at
least one formal/informal adjective or noun to comment on.

Flow: Make sure the synthesis reads smoothly; you do not want a collection of sentences that
does not flow.

Consider how well the synthesis flows. Do transition, summary, and synthesis words create an
synthesis paragraph/essay that flows well? If so, mention an example; if not, offer a suggestion
regarding how the author may improve the synthesis’s flow.
See above.

Specific to summaries/synthesis, writers must choose transitions words that demonstrate the
relationship between main ideas; these transition words demonstrate the patterns of organization
found in the source article and/or connections across the synthesized content. If the author
doesn’t have words that express relationship meanings, which words might you suggest? If the
author has used transition words of the specified sort, mention a few.

At Last
What did you like the best about the writer’s synthesis?
I liked all of the detail used like the statistics which really helped me to understand the actual
issue of teacher shortages.

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