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This sample assignment is provided for your reference. It will show you the kind of work you are expected to do for Part A, Part B and
Part C of your Module 1 assignment.
There are some things you should know about this assignment:
The sample is not intended to be perfect. It is the first draft of an assignment; the tutor would provide feedback and make
suggestions on the draft.
The sample was not written by a single student. Some parts were written by previous participants in the course. Other parts
were written just for this sample.
The sample does not include all the documents the learner referred to in completing Part B.
What is your purpose in writing When my primary reader reads this document, she will
the document? understand why she has been asked to review the
project report.
What is your document’s main We have been asked to review this document and make
message? sure it conforms to WHO guidelines, since it was written
by someone who has not written reports for WHO before.
There are some things I would do differently if I wrote this document again, and some things I would keep the same.
First I will write about the things I would change. After I sent this email, I received another email from Dr. Lin asking me to explain
how project reports are usually prepared. I should have explained this when I wrote the email. She is new in her job. I would not give
so many details about who wrote the report; it is not important. I would include more about how to revise the report. I did not tell her
about the Style Guide. I could also tell her where to find examples to look at.
I would keep some things the same. I would explain the procedure for this report, and I would explain the status of the project.
Dear Dr Lin,
Per your request, I have communicated with XX Institute of Oncology (XIO) and found out that XIO is the responsible and implementing unit of
this 5-year project in Country XX.
For the first phase of the project, it was agreed by WHO/HQ and the Cluster that the Oncology Unit (OU) of the General Hospital of AA would be
the main implementing unit. After the first phase, the OU would write the report on the project including the technical and financial report and
send it to XIO for them to follow up. Dr. B. at the OU wrote the report, with some assistance from two colleagues, Dr. D and Dr. F. None of them
had written reports on WHO projects before.
The first phase is done now, and the OU has submitted the report to XIO. It is attached. When Dr. Chan, focal point from XIO, reviewed the
report, he realized there needs to be some revisions so the project report will be made in accordance with the requirement of a WHO project report.
Dr. Chan has asked for our help to provide the correct format and guidance.
At today’s unit meeting, which we decided The branching in the middle is confusing The unit meeting was held today despite
to go ahead with even in the absence of and perhaps the information is not the absence of several people at
those away at conference, the new travel necessary. I’ve rewritten it, but I think if I conferences. We discussed the new travel
policy was introduced. was writing this again I would just remove policy.
the part about people being away.
Noun-based writing There are at least two noun-based phrases, The administrative staff reviewed the filing
which I have highlighted. The whole system. They observed that the files
The administrative staff conducted a example is quite wordy. I think it could still contain many unnecessary documents.
review of the filing system and made the be shorter.
observation that much of what we have
filed is documentation that is not currently
required.
As I indicated in my previous email of Oct My revision is much shorter and more to All project budgets must be submitted by
5, it is imperative that project budgets be the point. It is very important that the November 15. If your project budget is not
submitted by November 15. Budgetary figures be submitted on time. submitted, your project will not be funded.
allocations will be done immediately
following this date and those projects for
which no budgetary information is
provided will not be funded.
I work in administration, so most of my writing is emails and letters about administration. I send many emails confirming details of
travel arrangements, expenses, meetings and other things. Most of my emails are quite short. Sometimes they are long and contain a
lot of details. The long emails are harder to write, because it is hard for me to decide what order to put things in. Sometimes when I
send a long email asking someone to do several things, they only do some of the things I ask about. I have to check very carefully to
make sure everything is complete.
The correspondence that I write is important because it helps new staff settle in to the organization quickly, and helps program officers
deal with the details of contracts, etc. My work saves them a lot of time. Often they are focused on their projects, not on
administrative details. When I am efficient, I make it possible for them to stay focused.
There are two main things I noticed when I was working in Module 1. Sometimes my writing is very wordy. I use too many words,
and noun-based writing. It makes things more complicated than they need to be. The second thing is about providing background
information. Sometimes I forget that my reader does not know as much about the administrative process as I do. I don’t provide
enough background details, and sometimes they must ask me many questions. Or sometimes they don’t do things correctly and I have
to send followup emails.
I hope to make my writing less wordy. I will try to use verbs instead of noun-based writing whenever I can, and I will try to eliminate extra words.
I want to be sure I am including the right amount of background information. I will ask myself what the reader already knows, and what they need to
know to answer my question or do what I have asked them to do.